Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答は明確で自然ですが、文が少し長く冗長です。冒頭で直接「働いている」と述べ、その後で簡潔に経験年数と感想（挑戦と楽しさ）を2文以内でまとめるとより効果的です。語彙は適切ですが、

Exemplo: I work full-time; I’ve been in my current job for four years. I still face new tasks regularly, which can be challenging, but I enjoy the work because it keeps me motivated.

Sugestão: 内容は具体的で適切ですが、表現をもう少し簡潔にし、'confidential information'の前置きは短めにすると良いです。また単語の一致（'confidential information'ではなく'confidential'）を注意してください。

Exemplo: I work at a national regulatory agency that oversees medicines and medical devices sold in Japan. I can’t give detailed information because much of our work is confidential.

Sugestão: 論理は明確ですが、'therefore'の使い方や語順を整理するともっと自然になります。具体的な理由（例えば学びの機会やキャリアの利点）を1つ挙げると説得力が増します。

Exemplo: Yes, it’s a good place to work because our agency has a unique role, so I gain experience you can’t get elsewhere. For example, I learn about many different medicines before they reach the market, which is very interesting.

Sugestão: 感情と理由はよく示されていますが、文法（時制や語順）と表現の簡潔さを改善してください。'after get launched'は誤りで、'after they are launched'などに直す必要があります。

Exemplo: Yes, I find my job very rewarding. When I evaluate medicines for approval, I feel I’m helping future patients who will use them after they are launched.

Sugestão: 計画は明確で論理的です。ただし'deepen my understanding towards my job'は不自然なので、'deepen my understanding of my work'に直すと自然です。文は2文に分けると聞きやすくなります。

Exemplo: Initially, I’d like to stay in my current department for several more years to deepen my understanding of my work. Later, I plan to rotate through other departments to learn the whole agency’s system.

× I'm now working and this is my fourth year since I started my job.

✓ I'm currently working, and this is my fourth year since I started my job.

Use 'currently' instead of 'now' for a more natural formal expression; also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses correctly.

× Still I'm facing with new tasks every day and I'm struggling with it but I'm enjoying my job.

✓ Still, I face new tasks every day and I'm struggling with them, but I'm enjoying my job.

The verb 'face' does not take 'with' in this context. Use 'face' + object. Match plural 'tasks' with 'them'. Add commas for clarity.

× I'm working at a national agency and my work is related to medicines and medical devices.

✓ I work at a national agency, and my work is related to medicines and medical devices.

'Working at' is acceptable but 'I work at' is more natural for a general statement. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. Article use is fine; this correction improves register.

× I can't tell in detail because it's a confidential information, but I can say that our work is related to all the medicines and medical devices which are sold in Japan.

✓ I can't give details because it's confidential information, but I can say that our work is related to all medicines and medical devices sold in Japan.

'Confidential information' is uncountable so do not use 'a'. Use 'give details' rather than 'tell in detail'. 'Which are' can be omitted; 'sold in Japan' suffices.

× I think it's a good place to work because no other agency plays the same role as ours.

✓ I think it's a good place to work because no other agency plays the same role as ours.

Sentence is grammatically correct; kept unchanged. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'agency plays' is correct.

× Therefore you can experience very unique jobs and also it's very interesting to see a wide range of medicines before they are launched in the market.

✓ Therefore you can experience very unique jobs, and it's also very interesting to see a wide range of medicines before they are launched in the market.

Move 'also' to a more natural position ('it's also') and add a comma before 'and'. 'Launched in the market' is acceptable; alternatively 'launched on the market' or simply 'launched' works.

× Yes, I found my job very rewarding because when I do the evaluation for the medicine approval, I always feel that I'm helping the future patients who are going to take the medicine after get launched and I can't gain that experience in any other agencies.

✓ Yes, I find my job very rewarding because when I evaluate medicines for approval, I always feel that I'm helping future patients who will take the medicine after it is launched, and I can't gain that experience at any other agency.

Use present simple 'find' to match current feeling. 'Do the evaluation' -> 'evaluate' is more natural. 'Medicine approval' -> 'approval' or 'approval of medicines'. Use 'who will take' or 'who are going to take' and include 'it' for the medicine. 'Agency' should be singular with 'any other agency'. Use 'at' rather than 'in' for agency.

× First of all, I'd like to continue my job in the same department for several more years in order to deepen my understanding towards my job, and after that, I'd like to experience several other departments in order to know the whole system of my agency.

✓ First of all, I'd like to continue working in the same department for several more years in order to deepen my understanding of my job, and after that I'd like to work in several other departments to learn the whole system of my agency.

Use 'continue working' instead of 'continue my job'. 'Understanding of' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Experience several other departments' is awkward; use 'work in' or 'gain experience in'. 'To learn' is clearer than 'in order to know.' Removed unnecessary comma before 'and after that.'