Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant with good content, but it is slightly long and has a few grammatical issues (e.g., "I really enjoy to work" should be "I really enjoy working"). To improve, shorten the response to a strong topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words (for example, "because" or "and"). Avoid redundancy by combining related ideas.

Exemplo: I'm currently working in the IT department of a cooperative organization in India. I started this job after completing my master's and have been here for three years. I enjoy the role because I solve technical problems and present solutions in meetings, which helps me learn continually.

Sugestão: Good specific details about the organization and services, but the answer repeats "basically" and could be more concise and natural. Use a clear topic sentence, then one linking phrase (e.g., "for example" or "in particular") to give two concrete examples of what your team does. Avoid filler words and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "provide" instead of "provision").

Exemplo: I work in the IT department of a cooperative agricultural organization in India. Specifically, our team provides identity and digital services to farmers and small proprietors; for example, we develop mobile apps and websites and help clients access AI-based tools to improve their businesses.

Sugestão: Strong content and clear reasons make this effective. Improve cohesion by using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "I didn't know how to run meetings or understand organizational procedures and business rules"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and make the progression of ideas smoother.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a very good place to work because it offers competitive benefits and many learning opportunities. For example, when I started I couldn't run meetings or understand business procedures, but the role helped me develop those skills and grow professionally.

Sugestão: The message is positive and relevant, but there are grammatical errors and some redundancy (e.g., "stand very supportive" and repeated "help"). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific example of colleague support using a linking word (e.g., "for example"). Use natural phrasing like "I like the place I work" and vary verbs (support, mentor, guide).

Exemplo: Yes, I like the place where I work because my colleagues are friendly and supportive. For example, when I struggled with a presentation they gave constructive feedback and mentored me to improve.

Sugestão: Clear and well-structured plans with time frame — very good. To improve, make the response slightly more concise and link your short-term and long-term goals with a linking phrase (e.g., "so that" or "in order to"). Also consider mentioning a specific skill or role you aim for to add concreteness.

Exemplo: My immediate plan is to build solid experience on my current project to improve my technical expertise and gain management exposure. By the end of next year, I hope to move to a role with greater responsibilities, such as a team lead position, so that I can manage projects end-to-end.

× I started this job after I completed my masters and it's been three years of working here now.

✓ I started this job after I completed my master's degree, and I've been working here for three years.

Use the past participle form for possession in 'master's degree' and correct noun form. Use present perfect continuous 'I've been working' to express an action that began in the past and continues to now. Also replace 'three years of working here now' with the natural phrasing 'working here for three years.'

× I really enjoy to work here because I get to solve technical problems, attend meetings, present my thoughts in the presentations and learn.

✓ I really enjoy working here because I get to solve technical problems, attend meetings, present my thoughts in presentations, and learn.

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form (gerund): 'enjoy working.' Remove the unnecessary definite article before 'presentations' and ensure parallel structure by using base verbs or gerunds consistently. Add a comma before 'and' in lists for clarity.

× Our team basically provisions ID services to our clients who are farmers and proprietors who sell agricultural products.

✓ Our team basically provides ID services to our clients, who are farmers and proprietors selling agricultural products.

'Provision' as a noun is correct but here verb 'provides' is more natural than 'provisions.' Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause and use the participle 'selling' to combine ideas more smoothly. This fixes article/word choice and improves clarity.

× We basically develop apps and websites and help them to use AI services.

✓ We basically develop apps and websites and help them use AI services.

Remove the unnecessary 'to' after 'help' in this context: the verb 'help' is followed by the bare infinitive or object + infinitive without 'to' in American and British English (help them use). This corrects preposition/infinitive misuse.

× When I started here as a beginner, I didn't know how to run meetings or understand organizational procedures, the business rules.

✓ When I started here as a beginner, I didn't know how to run meetings or understand organizational procedures and business rules.

The original sentence has an awkward comma splice and a fragment-like listing. Remove the comma and use 'and' to join 'organizational procedures and business rules' as parallel items. This corrects sentence structure.

× Yes, I would like to place where I work.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work.

The original uses the wrong verb 'would like' and omits an article, producing an unnatural phrase. Use 'I like the place where I work' to express preference. This fixes pronoun/article and verb choice issues.

× They stand very supportive and they help me overcome my shortcomings and help me grow.

✓ They are very supportive, and they help me overcome my shortcomings and grow.

Use 'are' with the adjective 'supportive' rather than 'stand.' Remove the redundant 'help' before 'grow' to avoid repetition and ensure parallel structure. This fixes subject-verb and word choice issues.

× My immediate plan is to build solid experience on my current project.

✓ My immediate plan is to build solid experience in my current project.

Use the preposition 'in' rather than 'on' with 'project' to sound natural in English: you gain experience in a project. This corrects a present-tense/preposition collocation.

× I would like to improve my technical expertise in the information technology field and gain more management exposure.

✓ I would like to improve my technical expertise in the information technology field and gain more managerial exposure.

'Management exposure' is understandable but 'managerial exposure' is a more natural adjective+noun collocation. This corrects word choice in present-tense context.

× By the end of next year, I hope to move to another company for greater responsibilities.

✓ By the end of next year, I hope to move to another company to take on greater responsibilities.

Use 'to take on greater responsibilities' to express the intended future action clearly. This clarifies the purpose of moving and improves verb phrase usage for future intent.