Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and provides good information, but it can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "It's been a wonderful experience of me working"; instead, say "It has been a wonderful experience working". Also, try to limit your answer to 3-4 sentences and use linking words to improve flow.

Exemplo: I work as a consultant physiotherapist at a reputed hospital in Amritsar. I have been there for seven years, treating patients of all ages. It has been a rewarding experience because I get to help many people and learn new things every day.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Make sure to complete your sentences and provide clear information. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid abrupt endings. Also, avoid repeating information already given in the previous answer unless adding new details.

Exemplo: I work at Sri Ramdas Charitable Hospital in Amritsar. It is a well-known hospital where I have been working for seven years, gaining valuable experience in physiotherapy.

Sugestão: Your answer provides good content but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, "1:50 to 200 patients" should be "150 to 200 patients". Also, the last sentence is unclear. Use linking words like 'because' and 'moreover' properly and keep sentences clear and concise.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because I see around 150 to 200 patients daily, which helps me gain diverse experience. Moreover, the staff is calm and friendly, and patients are cooperative, making the work environment pleasant.

Sugestão: Your answer is positive and detailed but somewhat repetitive and wordy. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "best place to work here" multiple times. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences concise and natural.

Exemplo: Yes, I like working here because of the supportive environment and the empathy among staff members. It is a rewarding place, and I feel fortunate to be part of such a team.

Sugestão: Your answer is informative but can be more concise and clear. Avoid repeating similar information like "credential process" and "license exam" separately without clear distinction. Use linking words like 'currently' and 'also' to improve flow. Try to keep the answer within 4-5 sentences.

Exemplo: Currently, I am preparing for the IRS exam to start the credentialing process for the Canadian physiotherapy license. It is a lengthy process that takes about two years. I also plan to take the licensing exam in Canada, and I hope to become a registered Canadian physiotherapist in the coming years.

× I have been working here since seven years.

✓ I have been working here for seven years.

The phrase 'since seven years' is incorrect because 'since' is used with a specific point in time, not a duration. For durations, 'for' should be used. Hence, 'for seven years' is correct.

× It's been a wonderful experience of me working and treating patients of all ages and kinds.

✓ It's been a wonderful experience working and treating patients of all ages and kinds.

The phrase 'experience of me working' is awkward and incorrect. The correct structure is 'experience' followed by a gerund verb phrase without 'of me'. So, 'experience working' is appropriate.

× I work in Amritsar at a reputed hospital that is Sri Ramdas Charitable Hospital.

✓ I work in Amritsar at a reputed hospital called Sri Ramdas Charitable Hospital.

The phrase 'that is Sri Ramdas Charitable Hospital' is awkward. Using 'called' is more natural to introduce the name of the hospital.

× I've been working here for seven years and it's been a.

✓ I've been working here for seven years and it's been great.

The sentence is incomplete ending with 'it's been a.' It needs a proper ending to complete the thought.

× ...because it's a charitable hospital 1 can see around 1:50 to 200 patients on a daily basis...

✓ ...because it's a charitable hospital I can see around 150 to 200 patients on a daily basis...

The pronoun '1' is a typographical error and should be 'I'. Also, '1:50' is likely a typo for '150'.

× ...and acquire a vast variety of knowledge after dealing with different sorts of patients.

✓ ...and acquire a vast variety of knowledge by dealing with different sorts of patients.

The preposition 'after' is incorrect here. The correct preposition to indicate the means is 'by'.

× Moreover, the staff is very calm, composed and cordial and one and the patients are also very good at listening to.

✓ Moreover, the staff is very calm, composed and cordial, and the patients are also very good listeners.

The phrase 'and one and the patients are also very good at listening to' is ungrammatical and unclear. It should be rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I like the place where I work because I've been working here since seven years...

✓ Yes, I like the place where I work because I've been working here for seven years...

Same as before, 'since' should be replaced with 'for' when referring to a duration.

× ...no one can ever wish to go to other place after working here.

✓ ...no one can ever wish to go to another place after working here.

The phrase 'other place' is incorrect without an article or determiner. 'Another place' is the correct form.

× I wish I'll be a registered Canadian physiotherapist after some years.

✓ I wish I will be a registered Canadian physiotherapist after some years.

The phrase 'I wish I'll be' is incorrect. 'I wish' is usually followed by past tense or modal verbs like 'would'. However, to express future hope, 'I hope I will be' is better. Alternatively, 'I wish to be' can be used.