Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法の誤りや単語の選択ミスが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。より自然で正確な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、"serial student"は不自然で、"a student"や"currently studying"の方が適切です。また、"I major economics"は"I am majoring in economics"とするべきです。

Exemplo: I am currently a student at Canossava University, majoring in economics with a focus on international business. Although I sometimes find the coursework challenging, I enjoy my studies overall.

Sugestão: 文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。過去形と現在形の使い分けも混乱しています。より明確で自然な表現を心がけ、文を整理しましょう。例えば、"pastime job workers my work"は意味不明なので、"I work part-time in a restaurant"などに修正が必要です。

Exemplo: I work part-time in a restaurant where I serve customers and help with management tasks. Although the job can be tough at times, I enjoy it very much.

Sugestão: 語彙の誤用（"stuff"は"staff"）、文法の誤り、意味の不明瞭さがあります。より正確な単語を使い、文を簡潔にし、理由を明確に述べることが重要です。

Exemplo: Yes, I think my restaurant is a good place to work because most of the staff are very kind, and we always support each other. This positive environment makes working enjoyable.

Sugestão: 多くのためらい言葉（"uh"）があり、流暢さが欠けています。また、"amusement store"は不自然で、"amusement park"や"entertainment venue"の方が適切です。文を整理し、明確に意図を伝えましょう。

Exemplo: I would like to work in an amusement park because I think it would be a fantastic job. I want to help make customers' experiences more enjoyable.

Sugestão: 多くのためらい言葉があり、文が不完全で意味が伝わりにくいです。文を簡潔にし、具体的な計画を明確に述べる練習が必要です。

Exemplo: In the future, I want to work for a global company based in my hometown. My goal is to promote connections between my local area and foreign countries.

× I'm currently serial student at Canossava University.

✓ I'm currently a serial student at Canossava University.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'serial student'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I major economics and my main focus is on international business.

✓ I major in economics and my main focus is on international business.

The verb 'major' is typically followed by the preposition 'in' when indicating a field of study. Omitting 'in' is incorrect. Therefore, 'major in economics' is the correct form.

× Sometimes I find it difficult to difficult, however I enjoyed overall.

✓ Sometimes I find it difficult, however I enjoyed it overall.

The phrase 'difficult to difficult' is incorrect and redundant. The correct expression is 'find it difficult'. Also, 'enjoyed overall' is incomplete; it should be 'enjoyed it overall' to include the object of enjoyment.

× I worked in a restaurant as a pastime job workers my work.

✓ I worked in a restaurant as a part-time job worker.

The phrase 'pastime job workers my work' is incorrect and confusing. The correct term is 'part-time job worker' to describe someone working part-time. Also, 'worked' is correctly in past tense here.

× My job is serve some disease for customer and management.

✓ My job is to serve some dishes for customers and management.

The phrase 'serve some disease' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'serve some dishes'. Also, 'for customer' should be plural 'for customers'. The infinitive 'to serve' is required after 'My job is'.

× Customer service.

✓ I do customer service.

The phrase 'Customer service.' is a fragment without a verb or subject. Adding 'I do' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× It's sometimes very tough but I enjoy it all.

✓ It's sometimes very tough, but I enjoy it all.

A comma is needed before 'but' to separate the two independent clauses. This improves readability and correctness.

× Yes, I think my restaurant is good place to work because most of our stuff very kind and we always support each other.

✓ Yes, I think my restaurant is a good place to work because most of our staff are very kind and we always support each other.

The phrase 'good place' needs the article 'a'. 'Stuff' is incorrect; the correct word is 'staff' meaning employees. Also, 'most of our staff very kind' lacks the verb 'are' for subject-verb agreement.

× In in practical ways so I can work with positive.

✓ In practical ways, so I can work positively.

The phrase 'In in' is a repetition error. 'Work with positive' is incorrect; the adverb 'positively' should be used to modify the verb 'work'. Adding a comma improves sentence clarity.

× I would like to work in, uh, uh, amusement store because I think it's very, uh, fantastic, uh, work, uh, I want to make customer, uh, customer more, uh, enjoyable on this store.

✓ I would like to work in an amusement store because I think it's very fantastic work. I want to make customers enjoy their time in this store more.

The article 'an' is needed before 'amusement store' because it starts with a vowel sound. The sentence is fragmented and repetitive; restructuring improves clarity. 'Make customer more enjoyable' is incorrect; it should be 'make customers enjoy their time more' or 'make the store more enjoyable for customers'.

× Uh, I want to work in a company, uh, operating globally, uh, in my hometown because I want to, uh, combine, uh, my local area with, uh, of, with foreign countries, uh, by promoting, uh.

✓ I want to work in a company operating globally in my hometown because I want to connect my local area with foreign countries by promoting it.

The sentence is fragmented and contains filler words. 'Combine my local area with of with foreign countries' is incorrect; 'connect my local area with foreign countries' is clearer. The future intention is expressed correctly with 'I want to'.