Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear and direct response with specific details about your workplace location and your role. Avoid redundant or confusing phrases.

Exemplo: I work at a company called Bliss, which is located in the city center. It is a peaceful and calm place to work. I have been working there for about three years as a software engineer.

Sugestão: Your answer needs to be more structured and clear. Provide a direct answer first, then add specific details about the location and why you like it. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear references.

Exemplo: I work as a software engineer at IS Bliss, a company located in the center of Copendol, which is in the western part of the city. It is a peaceful and tranquil place, and I enjoy working there because it is conveniently located near my home.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better linking words and clearer sentence structures. Also, try to avoid minor grammatical errors and be more concise.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I love working with my colleagues and my boss, who is very approachable and motivating. The work is satisfying and fulfilling; for example, I once spent 18 hours solving a challenging problem, which was rewarding.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correcting minor grammatical mistakes. Also, try to complete your sentences fully.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I would love to continue working here because I have experienced significant career advancement. I have grown from a beginner software engineer to a senior level, and now I lead a senior team. The work is fulfilling, and I appreciate the good work-life balance.

Sugestão: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and linking words to improve clarity and coherence. Avoid fragmented sentences and be more specific about your plans.

Exemplo: I plan to continue working as a software engineer, preferably for multinational companies or governmental agencies. I dream of working with large organizations to learn more and contribute by developing software that benefits many people, not just a single corporation.

× I work at a company called Bliss which is situated at the center of and it is very far right from the Bunanal counter and it is very peaceful and calm to work there.

✓ I work at a company called Bliss which is situated in the center and it is very far right from the Bunanal counter. It is very peaceful and calm to work there.

The original sentence has an incomplete phrase 'situated at the center of' without specifying the location, causing confusion. Also, 'and it is very far right from the Bunanal counter' is awkward and unclear. Correct prepositions and sentence separation improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I work at a software company called IS Bliss and I work as a software engineer and it is situated at the center of Copendol which is far right which is far West from the and it is very peaceful and tranquil place.

✓ I work at a software company called IS Bliss as a software engineer. It is situated in the center of Copendol, which is far west, and it is a very peaceful and tranquil place.

The preposition 'at the center of' is acceptable but the sentence is confusing due to repetition and incomplete phrases like 'far right which is far West from the'. Also, 'very peaceful and tranquil place' needs an article 'a'. Correcting prepositions and sentence structure clarifies meaning.

× I really love working there because it is well located and it is very near from my.

✓ I really love working there because it is well located and it is very near to me.

The phrase 'near from my' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'near to' and the pronoun should be 'me' instead of 'my'. This correction fixes the prepositional and pronoun errors.

× The main thing that I love about my work are my colleagues.

✓ The main thing that I love about my work is my colleagues.

The subject 'The main thing' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to singular and plural forms.

× So I have very good relationship with my colleague and my boss, especially because he's the one I have been working there for the at least three years now because he's very approaching, he's very motivating and the work itself is very satisfying and fulfilling.

✓ So I have a very good relationship with my colleagues and my boss, especially because he's the one I have been working with for at least three years now. He is very approachable, very motivating, and the work itself is very satisfying and fulfilling.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'relationship' needs an article 'a'; 'colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to match context; 'he's very approaching' is incorrect, should be 'he is very approachable'; missing preposition 'working with'; and awkward phrasing 'for the at least three years' corrected to 'for at least three years'. These corrections address pronoun, article, preposition, and adjective usage.

× Once I invested around 18 hours to just solve the problem.

✓ Once I spent around 18 hours just solving the problem.

The verb 'invested' is less appropriate here; 'spent' is better for time. Also, 'to just solve' is awkward; using the gerund 'solving' fits better after 'spent'. This corrects verb choice and form.

× Yes, absolutely. I would love to just continue working over here because I have very good advancement in my career.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I would love to continue working here because I have made very good advancement in my career.

The modal verb 'would love to' is correct, but 'just continue working over here' is awkward; 'continue working here' is more natural. Also, 'have very good advancement' is better expressed as 'have made very good advancement' to indicate progress.

× I have seen the growth in my career from beginner level software engineer to a senior level because I'm currently leading a senior team and I'm very happy doing it.

✓ I have seen growth in my career from a beginner-level software engineer to a senior level because I'm currently leading a senior team and I'm very happy doing it.

'The growth' can be simplified to 'growth' for naturalness. Also, 'beginner level software engineer' should be hyphenated as 'beginner-level software engineer' to function as a compound adjective. These are minor grammatical improvements.

× The work is very much fulfilling and I can see the personal growth as well as work life balance that.

✓ The work is very fulfilling, and I can see personal growth as well as work-life balance.

The phrase 'very much fulfilling' is awkward; 'very fulfilling' is better. 'Work life balance' should be hyphenated as 'work-life balance'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'that' which is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× I will continue to work as a software engineer, but I think for the multinational companies or for governmental agencies because I have a dream to work it out with a big national companies and learn a lot about them.

✓ I will continue to work as a software engineer, but I hope to work for multinational companies or governmental agencies because I have a dream to work with big national companies and learn a lot about them.

The phrase 'I think for the multinational companies' is unclear; 'I hope to work for multinational companies' is better. 'Work it out with' is incorrect; 'work with' is correct. Also, 'a big national companies' mixes singular and plural; corrected to 'big national companies'. These corrections address future tense expression and article usage.

× Because I love the idea behind working and using the software for the benefit of people rather than just using for the benefit of one corporation.

✓ Because I love the idea behind working and using software for the benefit of people rather than just using it for the benefit of one corporation.

The phrase 'using the software' is better as 'using software' in general. Also, 'just using for the benefit' is missing the object 'it'. Adding 'it' clarifies the sentence. These corrections fix prepositional and article usage.