Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and redundancy. For example, "I worked there for about 5 years now" should be "I have worked there for about 5 years". Also, avoid repeating the same information twice. Try to use more varied vocabulary and concise sentences.

Exemplo: I have been working at a company called Bliss for about five years. I really enjoy my job as a software product engineer because my colleagues and boss are very kind and supportive. I see myself continuing to work there for a long time.

Sugestão: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes, such as "a company called is Bliss" and "near to you and park". Also, avoid repeating words like "relaxing" twice. Try to organize your answer logically and use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I work at a company called Bliss, which is located in the centre of Kupendel. It is about a 30-minute commute from my home. The area is quite relaxing because it is near a park, so I often enjoy the fresh garden scents on my way to work in the morning.

Sugestão: Your answer contains repetition and unclear expressions, such as "near to you and park" and "smell the smell". Also, the sentence structure is confusing. Try to use clear and precise language, avoid redundancy, and organize your ideas logically with linking words.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. My workplace is near Yuan Park, so I can enjoy the fresh scent of blooming flowers. I also like seeing people, especially elderly folks chatting nearby. The environment is very pleasant, and I often take walks in the park during my breaks.

Sugestão: Your answer is good and relevant, but some sentences are a bit long and could be clearer. Also, avoid repeating "so" at the beginning of sentences. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I like my workplace mainly because of my warm and approachable boss and colleagues. When I first joined, my boss helped me a lot with business ideas and how to approach stakeholders. Therefore, I really enjoy my job because of their support.

Sugestão: Your answer shows good ideas but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "multiple uses users". Try to use precise vocabulary and organize your ideas with linking words. Also, avoid vague expressions like "if I am capable"; instead, express your intentions clearly.

Exemplo: In the future, I plan to work with multinational companies to develop products that help many users in their daily lives. Additionally, I want to contribute to social work by creating organizations that provide food and shelter to children in need.

× I worked there for about 5 years now.

✓ I have worked there for about 5 years now.

The sentence refers to an action that started in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have worked' is appropriate instead of simple past 'worked'.

× most of my colleague and my boss, they're very appreciable, very kind person.

✓ most of my colleagues and my boss, they're very appreciative, very kind people.

'Colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to match 'most of'. 'Appreciable' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'appreciative'. Also, 'person' should be plural 'people' to agree with multiple subjects.

× I love working as a software product engineer and I can see myself working there for quite a long time now.

✓ I love working as a software product engineer and I can see myself working there for quite a long time.

The word 'now' is unnecessary here and disrupts the sentence flow. The present tense is correct, but 'now' should be omitted for clarity.

× I work at a company called is Bliss which is situated at the centre of Kupendel.

✓ I work at a company called Bliss which is situated at the centre of Kupendel.

The phrase 'called is Bliss' is incorrect; 'is' should be removed to form the correct structure 'called Bliss'.

× It is about 30 minute from my home and the zone is quite relaxing.

✓ It is about 30 minutes from my home and the area is quite relaxing.

'Minute' should be plural 'minutes' to match the quantity. 'Zone' is better replaced with 'area' for natural English usage.

× It is near to you and park so I can feel the smell of the garden whenever I go to work and I really enjoy going to work at morning so it is quite often from.

✓ It is near a park so I can smell the garden whenever I go to work and I really enjoy going to work in the morning; it is quite close.

'Near to you and park' is incorrect; it should be 'near a park'. 'Feel the smell' is unnatural; 'smell' is better. 'At morning' should be 'in the morning'. The last phrase is unclear and corrected to 'it is quite close' for clarity.

× My workplace is near to you and park so I can smell the smell, I can smell the flowers that is booming as well as I really love the people that is rambling around, the old people they will discuss and the environment is really great.

✓ My workplace is near a park so I can smell the flowers that are blooming. I really love the people who are rambling around; the old people discuss things, and the environment is really great.

'Near to you and park' should be 'near a park'. 'Smell the smell' is redundant; just 'smell the flowers' is correct. 'That is booming' should be 'that are blooming' to agree with plural 'flowers'. 'People that is' should be 'people who are' for correct pronoun and verb agreement.

× It is really center of the Yuan park so I can just go around the park whenever I get break so.

✓ It is really in the center of Yuan Park so I can just go around the park whenever I get a break.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'the center'. 'Get break' should be 'get a break' with the article 'a'. The sentence ending 'so' is unnecessary and removed.

× Yes, absolutely, because mainly of my boss and the colleagues, they're very warm, very approachable.

✓ Yes, absolutely, mainly because of my boss and the colleagues; they're very warm and very approachable.

'Because mainly of' is incorrect word order; it should be 'mainly because of'. Also, a semicolon or period is better than a comma before 'they're' to separate clauses.

× My boss especially helped me whenever I just joined my job because I was very inexperienced back then.

✓ My boss especially helped me when I just joined my job because I was very inexperienced back then.

'Whenever' is incorrect here; 'when' is appropriate to indicate a specific time in the past.

× So he helped me a lot regarding the business ideas and how to approach the stakeholders and so on.

✓ So he helped me a lot with business ideas and how to approach the stakeholders and so on.

The preposition 'regarding' is less natural here; 'with' is better to indicate assistance.

× I think mostly I will be working with the multi national companies where I want to create the products that will help and bolster multiple uses users and help them on a daily basis.

✓ I think mostly I will be working with multinational companies where I want to create products that will help and support multiple users and help them on a daily basis.

'Multi national' should be 'multinational' as one word. 'Uses users' is incorrect; it should be 'users'. 'Bolster' is less appropriate than 'support' in this context.

× Apart from that, personally I would be also contributing to some social work or maybe creating some agencies that would help a little kid and get them some food and shelter if I am capable.

✓ Apart from that, personally I would also be contributing to some social work or maybe creating some agencies that would help little kids and provide them with food and shelter if I am capable.

'A little kid' is less natural; 'little kids' is better for general meaning. 'Get them some food and shelter' should be 'provide them with food and shelter' for clarity and correctness.