Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but avoid redundancy such as "I find it very rewarding" after already stating you enjoy your job. Also, use plural form "patients" instead of "patient" for accuracy. Try to keep your answer concise within 4-5 sentences.

Exemplo: I'm currently working as a registered nurse at St. John's Hospital in Bangalore. I enjoy my job because it allows me to help patients directly, which is very rewarding. Moreover, working in healthcare provides me with valuable experience and daily opportunities to develop my skills.

Sugestão: Good content but watch for grammar errors like missing articles "a doctor" and plural forms "patients". Use linking words like "for example" or "also" to improve coherence. Try to be more specific about your role and responsibilities.

Exemplo: I work at St. John's Hospital in Bangalore, where I have gained valuable experience in patient care. For example, I communicate effectively with patients and address their concerns with empathy. I also assist a doctor during medical procedures and manage patient records.

Sugestão: There are some grammatical errors such as "walk" instead of "work", "offer" instead of "offers", and incomplete sentence at the end. Try to use linking words like "because" and complete your thoughts. Also, avoid vague phrases and be more specific about what makes it a good place.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. It's a very good place to work, especially for medical professionals. The hospital offers excellent opportunities for learning and professional development because it has helped me gain extensive knowledge about patient management and healthcare practices. Moreover, the supportive work environment motivates me every day.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but watch subject-verb agreement like "which create" should be "which creates". Also, try to add a linking word like "therefore" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, certainly. I'm very happy with my workplace because all my colleagues and management are extremely supportive and helpful. For example, they always assist both nurses and doctors whenever needed, which creates a positive and cooperative environment.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, avoid repeating "better" twice; use synonyms to show vocabulary range. Also, you can add a linking word like "because" to explain your reason more naturally.

Exemplo: Currently, I'm planning to pursue higher education in healthcare because it will enhance my knowledge and skills. This will help me provide improved care to patients and develop greater empathy, which I believe is essential for my future career.

× I really enjoy my job because it allows me to help my patient directly, which I find it very rewarding.

✓ I really enjoy my job because it allows me to help my patients directly, which I find very rewarding.

The word 'patient' should be plural 'patients' because the nurse helps multiple patients, not just one. Also, 'which I find it very rewarding' has an unnecessary pronoun 'it'. Removing 'it' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× In addition, I assist doctor during medical procedures and manage patient records.

✓ In addition, I assist doctors during medical procedures and manage patient records.

The word 'doctor' should be plural 'doctors' because the nurse assists multiple doctors. Also, the preposition 'during' is correct here, but the article 'the' before 'doctor' is missing; however, pluralizing 'doctor' removes the need for 'the'.

× Yes, definitely it's a very good place to walk specially for the medical professionals.

✓ Yes, definitely it's a very good place to work especially for the medical professionals.

The word 'walk' is a typo and should be 'work' to make sense in context. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially' to correctly express emphasis.

× This hospital offer excellent opportunities for learning and professional development as it has helped me gain extensive knowledge about patient management and healthcare practices.

✓ This hospital offers excellent opportunities for learning and professional development as it has helped me gain extensive knowledge about patient management and healthcare practices.

The subject 'hospital' is singular, so the verb should be 'offers' instead of 'offer' to agree in number.

× Moreover, the supportive work environment make it.

✓ Moreover, the supportive work environment makes it.

The subject 'work environment' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make' to agree in number. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'makes it' should be followed by what it makes, but as per instruction, only grammar correction is done.

× For example, they always assist both nurses and doctors whenever needed, which create a positive and cooperative environment.

✓ For example, they always assist both nurses and doctors whenever needed, which creates a positive and cooperative environment.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'environment' (singular), so the verb should be 'creates' instead of 'create' to agree in number.