Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: In English (Bhutan), try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and improving sentence structure. For example, say 'I am currently not working or studying, but I recently completed a training program initiated by our King to help young people develop their skills and knowledge.'

Exemplo: I am currently not working or studying, but I recently completed a training program initiated by our King to help young people develop their skills and knowledge.

Sugestão: In English (Bhutan), try to make your answer more concise and coherent by using linking words and correcting grammar. For example, say 'I don't have a formal job, but since I live in Thimphu, the capital of Bhutan, I help my sister in her stationery shop without getting paid.'

Exemplo: I don't have a formal job, but since I live in Thimphu, the capital of Bhutan, I help my sister in her stationery shop without getting paid.

Sugestão: In English (Bhutan), improve your answer by using clearer sentences and linking words. For example, say 'Yes, it is a good place to work because there are computers where I can watch dramas when I am bored. Also, there is a grocery shop nearby where I can buy food if I am hungry.'

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work because there are computers where I can watch dramas when I am bored. Also, there is a grocery shop nearby where I can buy food if I am hungry.

Sugestão: In English (Bhutan), try to express your dislike more clearly and avoid repetition. For example, say 'Honestly, I don't like the place where I work because there is a strong smell from the storage tanks nearby, which makes it uncomfortable.'

Exemplo: Honestly, I don't like the place where I work because there is a strong smell from the storage tanks nearby, which makes it uncomfortable.

Sugestão: In English (Bhutan), make your answer more structured and clear by using linking words and correct grammar. For example, say 'To be honest, I have not planned my future yet, but if I get the chance, I would like to start a small business and continue my studies so that I can support myself financially.'

Exemplo: To be honest, I have not planned my future yet, but if I get the chance, I would like to start a small business and continue my studies so that I can support myself financially.

× I don't work and I'm also not a student but recently I graduated from my training.

✓ I don't work and I'm also not a student but recently I have graduated from my training.

The sentence refers to a recent event that has relevance to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have graduated' is more appropriate than the simple past 'graduated'. This tense shows the action's connection to the present.

× It's a program that our food king had made for all the youths to develop their brain and educated, educate themselves.

✓ It's a program that our food king had made for all the youths to develop their brains and educate themselves.

The word 'brain' should be plural 'brains' because it refers to multiple youths. Also, 'educated' is incorrect here; the correct form is the base verb 'educate' to match the infinitive form after 'to'.

× She had a stationary shop, so I used to work there.

✓ She has a stationary shop, so I used to work there.

The shop still exists, so the present tense 'has' is appropriate instead of the past tense 'had'. 'Used to work' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× I and I used to help her, but for that work I don't get any salary.

✓ I used to help her, but for that work I don't get any salary.

The phrase 'I and I' is redundant and incorrect. It should be simply 'I'. Also, 'salary' is uncountable here, so 'any salary' is acceptable.

× Yes, my sister plays is a good place for me to work as there are like computers so that if I am bored I could watch some dramas.

✓ Yes, my sister's place is a good place for me to work as there are computers so that if I am bored I can watch some dramas.

'My sister plays' is incorrect; it should be 'my sister's place' to indicate possession. Also, 'could' is changed to 'can' to express ability in the present.

× And yeah besides her shop there are a grocery shop where I could have noodles, fast food and everything if I am hungry.

✓ And yeah, besides her shop there is a grocery shop where I can have noodles, fast food and everything if I am hungry.

'Besides' should be followed by a comma for clarity. 'There are a grocery shop' is incorrect because 'shop' is singular; it should be 'there is a grocery shop'. Also, 'could' is changed to 'can' for present ability.

× Uh, honestly, I don't like the place where I work because at that place it's like the train stinks.

✓ Uh, honestly, I don't like the place where I work because at that place it smells like the drain stinks.

'Train' is a mispronunciation or typo; the correct word is 'drain'. Also, 'it's like the train stinks' is awkward; better to say 'it smells like the drain stinks' to express the bad odor.

× All the safety tanks are connected there. It's stored there.

✓ All the safety tanks are connected there. They are stored there.

'It's stored there' is incorrect because 'it' refers to a singular noun, but 'safety tanks' is plural. The correct pronoun is 'they'.

× So the like the smell is all over that place.

✓ So the smell is all over that place.

The phrase 'the like the' is redundant and incorrect. It should be simply 'the smell'.

× To be honest, I've not planned my future, but yeah, if I ever get chance, I would like to do some small business and I'd like to study too, so that I could study and continue my business so I can take my own financial by myself.

✓ To be honest, I haven't planned my future, but yeah, if I ever get a chance, I would like to do some small business and I'd like to study too, so that I can study and continue my business so I can take care of my own finances by myself.

'I've not planned' is better as 'I haven't planned' for natural negative present perfect. 'Get chance' needs an article 'a chance'. 'Could study' is changed to 'can study' to express ability. 'Take my own financial' is incorrect; it should be 'take care of my own finances'.