Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答不够自然，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免使用不必要的词汇，并注意语法正确。

Exemplo: I am currently working as I have already graduated, although I would have preferred to continue studying.

Sugestão: 回答内容较为简单，存在语法和表达上的小错误。建议使用更准确的表达，并增加细节使回答更具体。

Exemplo: I work in Shenzhen, which is a metropolitan city. It offers abundant resources and higher salaries, making it a great place to work.

Sugestão: 回答不够连贯，存在语法错误和用词不当。建议使用连接词使回答更流畅，并注意词汇的准确性。

Exemplo: It depends on your priorities. If you want to advance your career quickly and earn a higher salary, Shenzhen is a great place. However, it can be challenging to find spare time there.

Sugestão: 回答表达不清晰，逻辑混乱，语法错误较多。建议直接回答问题，使用清晰的句子结构，并避免重复和模糊表达。

Exemplo: I have mixed feelings about my workplace. It has both advantages and disadvantages, so I like it sometimes but not always.

Sugestão: 回答不够具体，表达含糊且语法错误较多。建议明确表达未来计划，使用具体细节，并注意语法正确。

Exemplo: In the future, I plan to improve my technical skills as a field application engineer, but I also want to work on building better relationships with my colleagues.

× Well, I am employee nowadays unfortunately, even if I would like to stay at campus, but I have graduated.

✓ Well, I am an employee nowadays unfortunately, even if I would like to stay on campus, but I have graduated.

这里缺少冠词'an'，因为employee是可数名词，单数形式前需要冠词。

× Well, I am employee nowadays unfortunately, even if I would like to stay at campus, but I have graduated.

✓ Well, I am an employee nowadays unfortunately, even if I would like to stay on campus, but I have graduated.

stay后面应该用介词'on'表示在校园内，而不是'at'。

× Well, I am employee nowadays unfortunately, even if I would like to stay at campus, but I have graduated.

✓ Well, I am an employee nowadays unfortunately. Even though I would like to stay on campus, I have graduated.

原句中使用了两个连词'even if'和'but'，导致句子结构混乱，应拆分为两个句子或用合适的连词连接。

× We are in Shenzhen because I think it's a metropolitan city, so it's easy to get more resources and the the higher salaries.

✓ I am in Shenzhen because I think it's a metropolitan city, so it's easy to get more resources and higher salaries.

主语应为单数'I'而非复数'We'，且'the the higher salaries'中重复了'the'，应删除多余的冠词。

× We are in Shenzhen because I think it's a metropolitan city, so it's easy to get more resources and the the higher salaries.

✓ I am in Shenzhen because I think it's a metropolitan city, so it's easy to get more resources and higher salaries.

'the higher salaries'中不需要定冠词'the'，因为这里是泛指较高的薪水。

× Maybe it depends on the views.

✓ Maybe it depends on the point of view.

'depends on the views'表达不准确，常用表达是'depends on the point of view'表示取决于观点。

× For example, if you think you wanna to grow fastly and it's easy to get higher salaries or something else, I think Schengen would be a great place.

✓ For example, if you think you want to grow fast and it's easy to get higher salaries or something else, I think Shenzhen would be a great place.

'wanna to'是不正确的表达，应为'want to'或口语中'wanna'。'fastly'不是副词，正确用法是'fast'。'Schengen'是申根区，应为'Shenzhen'。

× But if you wanna have your spare time, I think it's hard to get one in Shenzhen.

✓ But if you want to have your spare time, I think it's hard to get any in Shenzhen.

'get one'不合适，应该用'get any'表示获得一些空闲时间。

× Which is a so so because just like I have told you, it depends on the different views.

✓ It is so-so because, just like I have told you, it depends on different views.

'Which'用法错误，应使用'It'作为主语。'a so so'应为'so-so'，表示一般般。

× So everything, well honestly everything owns the two faces.

✓ So everything, well honestly everything has two sides.

'owns the two faces'表达不正确，正确表达是'has two sides'表示事物有两面。

× You cannot see the good things and ignores the demerit, right?

✓ You cannot see the good things and ignore the demerits, right?

主语是'you'，谓语动词应为'ignore'，保持一致。'demerit'应为复数'demerits'。

× So for Sarah I would say I would like that.

✓ So for me, I would say I would like that.

'Sarah'应为'self'或'me'，表示说话人自己。

× It's a hard question because honestly I have saw that before but it's hard to get a great answer.

✓ It's a hard question because honestly I have seen that before but it's hard to get a great answer.

'have saw'是错误的时态搭配，应为现在完成时'have seen'。

× You know, I am AFA, the field application engineer, but for technology so easy and for relationship it's so hard.

✓ You know, I am an FAE, a field application engineer, but technology is easy and relationships are hard.

'AFA'应为'FAE'，冠词'an'用于元音开头的缩写。'for technology so easy'结构不完整，应改为'technology is easy'。

× So I don't know how to improve.

✓ So I don't know how to improve myself.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，'improve'后应加宾语如'myself'。