Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答は直接的であるべきですが、文法の誤り（例えば、"I am working"は"I have been working"が適切）や冗長な表現を避ける必要があります。また、文を5文以内にまとめ、より自然で効果的な表現を心がけましょう。

Exemplo: I have been working at a prestigious Japanese news agency for 10 years. I mainly cover stories about science and technology advancements. This job excites me because I learn about cutting-edge developments every day.

Sugestão: 質問に対して直接的に答え、文法の誤り（"I will call to"は不自然）を修正しましょう。また、冗長な表現を避け、5文以内で簡潔に答えることが重要です。

Exemplo: I work at Nikkei Inc., one of the most well-known newspaper companies in Japan. I mainly cover science and technology stories. This job excites me because I can report on cutting-edge developments.

Sugestão: 回答が少し不明瞭で、文法や語順の誤りがあります。より明確で自然な表現を使い、論理的なつながりを示す接続詞を活用しましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is a good place to work because the management values results over working hours. I enjoy the freedom to conduct interviews every day, which makes my job very enjoyable.

Sugestão: 否定の回答は直接的で良いですが、文法の誤り（"the atmosphere of the team are"は"the atmosphere of the team is"）や冗長な表現を避け、より具体的な理由を簡潔に述べましょう。

Exemplo: No, I don't like my current workplace because the team atmosphere is not very good. Although I try to improve it, changing people's attitudes is difficult, so I often have hard days.

Sugestão: 回答はやや冗長で、文法の誤りがあります。より明確で簡潔に、具体的な理由を述べることが望ましいです。

Exemplo: I want to continue working at my current workplace because it offers opportunities to gain recognition in political and administrative affairs. Therefore, I believe it is a good place to stay.

× I am working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agency for 10 years and I mainly covering these stories about science and technology advancement.

✓ I have been working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agencies for 10 years and I mainly cover stories about science and technology advancement.

The sentence incorrectly uses present continuous 'am working' for an action that started in the past and continues to the present; present perfect continuous 'have been working' is appropriate. Also, 'covering' should be 'cover' to match the present simple tense for habitual actions. 'News agency' should be plural 'news agencies' because 'one of the' implies among multiple agencies.

× I am working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agency for 10 years and I mainly covering these stories about science and technology advancement.

✓ I have been working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agencies for 10 years and I mainly cover stories about science and technology advancement.

The preposition 'at' is correct for workplaces, but 'for 10 years' indicates duration and is correctly placed. No preposition error here; the main issue is tense and plural form.

× I am working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agency for 10 years and I mainly covering these stories about science and technology advancement.

✓ I have been working at one of the most prestigious Japanese news agencies for 10 years and I mainly cover stories about science and technology advancement.

'News agency' should be plural 'news agencies' because 'one of the' refers to a member of a group, which must be plural.

× Every day I feel very excited and stimulated by listening to them.

✓ Every day I feel very excited and stimulated by listening to them.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I will call to Nikki Inca, which is one of the most well known newspaper companies in Japan and I mainly cover the stories about science and technology developments and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with the cutting edge developments.

✓ I work for Nikkei Inc., which is one of the most well-known newspaper companies in Japan. I mainly cover stories about science and technology developments, and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

'I will call to Nikki Inca' is incorrect; the student likely means 'I work for Nikkei Inc.' Also, 'Nikki Inca' is corrected to 'Nikkei Inc.' for proper noun. The sentence is long and run-on; splitting into shorter sentences improves clarity. 'Well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known'. 'The stories' changed to 'stories' for general reference. 'Cutting edge' should be hyphenated as 'cutting-edge'.

× I will call to Nikki Inca, which is one of the most well known newspaper companies in Japan and I mainly cover the stories about science and technology developments and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with the cutting edge developments.

✓ I work for Nikkei Inc., which is one of the most well-known newspaper companies in Japan. I mainly cover stories about science and technology developments, and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

'Call to' is incorrect here; the correct preposition with 'work' is 'for'. Also, 'get in touch with' is correct.

× I will call to Nikki Inca, which is one of the most well known newspaper companies in Japan and I mainly cover the stories about science and technology developments and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with the cutting edge developments.

✓ I work for Nikkei Inc., which is one of the most well-known newspaper companies in Japan. I mainly cover stories about science and technology developments, and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

'Well known' and 'cutting edge' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before nouns: 'well-known', 'cutting-edge'.

× I mainly cover the stories about science and technology developments and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with the cutting edge developments.

✓ I mainly cover stories about science and technology developments, and it makes me feel excited because I can get in touch with cutting-edge developments.

The definite article 'the' before 'stories' and 'cutting edge developments' is unnecessary when speaking generally; removing 'the' is more natural.

× Yes, I think so because the management and the executives are not interested in the amount of working oversteps and so I can go anywhere.

✓ Yes, I think so because the management and the executives are not interested in the amount of overtime work, so I can go anywhere.

'Working oversteps' is incorrect; the correct term is 'overtime work' or 'working overtime'. Also, 'interested in the amount of working oversteps' is awkward; 'interested in the amount of overtime work' is better.

× Yes, I think so because the management and the executives are not interested in the amount of working oversteps and so I can go anywhere.

✓ Yes, I think so because the management and executives are not concerned about the amount of overtime work, so I can go anywhere.

The sentence is slightly awkward; 'not interested in' is better replaced with 'not concerned about' for clarity. Also, 'the executives' can be simplified to 'executives'.

× I want to conduct an interview every day.

✓ I want to conduct interviews every day.

'Conduct an interview every day' implies only one interview daily; plural 'interviews' is more natural for habitual action.

× And so it's very enjoyable and very free to for me to work.

✓ So it's very enjoyable and very free for me to work.

The phrase 'very free to for me to work' is incorrect; 'very free for me to work' is correct. Also, 'And so' at the beginning is unnecessary.

× No, I don't, because the atmosphere of the team are involved in right now is not so good.

✓ No, I don't, because the atmosphere of the team I am involved in right now is not very good.

'The team are involved in' is incorrect; the student is involved in the team, so 'the team I am involved in' is correct. Also, 'not so good' is better as 'not very good'.

× No, I don't, because the atmosphere of the team are involved in right now is not so good.

✓ No, I don't, because the atmosphere of the team I am involved in right now is not very good.

'The atmosphere ... is' is singular and correct; 'team are' is incorrect because 'team' is singular. The sentence needed restructuring to clarify subject and verb agreement.

× And I try to improve the mood, but it's very difficult for me to change a lot about conversation or people's personality, so I always spend hard days.

✓ I try to improve the mood, but it's very difficult for me to change much about the conversations or people's personalities, so I always have hard days.

'Change a lot about conversation or people's personality' is awkward; 'change much about the conversations or people's personalities' is better. 'Spend hard days' is unnatural; 'have hard days' is correct.

× And I try to improve the mood, but it's very difficult for me to change a lot about conversation or people's personality, so I always spend hard days.

✓ I try to improve the mood, but it's very difficult for me to change much about the conversations or people's personalities, so I always have hard days.

'A lot' is less appropriate here; 'much' fits better with 'change' in negative contexts. Also, 'conversation' should be plural 'conversations' and 'personality' plural 'personalities'.

× I want to continue working in my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces which I can get a lot of acknowledgement about political issues or holding affairs.

✓ I want to continue working at my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces where I can gain a lot of recognition about political issues or current affairs.

'In my workplace' is better as 'at my workplace'. 'Which I can get a lot of acknowledgement about' is awkward; 'where I can gain a lot of recognition about' is better. 'Holding affairs' is incorrect; 'current affairs' is the correct term.

× I want to continue working in my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces which I can get a lot of acknowledgement about political issues or holding affairs.

✓ I want to continue working at my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces where I can gain a lot of recognition about political issues or current affairs.

'Work at' is the correct preposition for workplaces, not 'work in'. Also, 'workplaces where' is better than 'workplaces which' in this context.

× I want to continue working in my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces which I can get a lot of acknowledgement about political issues or holding affairs.

✓ I want to continue working at my workplace as long as possible because it seems that there are not many workplaces where I can gain a lot of recognition about political issues or current affairs.

'A lot of acknowledgement' is better expressed as 'a lot of recognition' in this context.

× So I think our workplace is not so bad.

✓ So I think my workplace is not so bad.

'Our workplace' implies shared ownership; since the student refers to their own workplace, 'my workplace' is more appropriate.