Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Votre réponse est claire et directe, mais vous pouvez améliorer la fluidité en évitant les expressions trop formelles comme "more precisely". Essayez d'utiliser des phrases plus naturelles et simples pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide.

Exemplo: I am a student currently studying management at Neoma Business School in Rouen.

Sugestão: Votre réponse contient des erreurs grammaticales et des phrases maladroites. Par exemple, "I was a sales" devrait être "I was a sales assistant" ou "I worked in sales". Aussi, évitez les répétitions et améliorez la cohérence en utilisant des mots de liaison.

Exemplo: I don't work at the moment, but I used to have a part-time job as a sales assistant in a shop. It was a great experience because I learned how to sell different products.

Sugestão: Faites attention à la concordance des temps et à la grammaire, par exemple "when I do mistakes" devrait être "when I made mistakes". Utilisez aussi des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide.

Exemplo: It was a great place to work because the manager was very friendly and helpful. She always supported me whenever I made mistakes.

Sugestão: La phrase est un peu confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Par exemple, "like the manager" n'est pas clair. Essayez de reformuler pour exprimer clairement vos sentiments et utilisez des phrases complètes.

Exemplo: Yes, I really liked the place where I worked because it had a small and cozy atmosphere, and the manager was very kind.

Sugestão: Faites attention à la grammaire, par exemple "I'm not really have" devrait être "I don't really have". Essayez aussi d'être plus précis et structuré dans votre réponse.

Exemplo: Actually, I don't have specific work plans yet, but I want to pursue a degree in Ireland so that I can work for global companies in the future.

× I don't work right now but before I had a part time job where I was a sales in a shop.

✓ I don't work right now but before I had a part-time job where I was a sales assistant in a shop.

The word 'sales' is incorrect here because it is a plural noun or adjective, but the sentence requires a singular noun to describe the job position. The correct term is 'sales assistant' or 'salesperson' to indicate the role. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective.

× It was a great experiences because I had to sell many products.

✓ It was a great experience because I had to sell many products.

The word 'experiences' is plural, but the sentence refers to a single event or period, so the singular form 'experience' is correct here.

× She helped me when I do mistakes and she was really benevolent.

✓ She helped me when I made mistakes and she was really benevolent.

The phrase 'when I do mistakes' is incorrect because the action happened in the past, so the past tense 'made' should be used instead of the present tense 'do'.

× Yes, I really love the place where I work because it was really small and cozy atmosphere like the manager.

✓ Yes, I really love the place where I work because it has a really small and cozy atmosphere like the manager.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the student currently loves the place and works there, present tense 'has' should be used instead of 'was'. Also, 'atmosphere' is a noun and needs a verb like 'has' to connect it properly.

× Actually I'm not really have a future work plans but I want to pursue a degree in Ireland so I can go to work in the global companies.

✓ Actually, I don't really have future work plans but I want to pursue a degree in Ireland so I can work in global companies.

The phrase 'I'm not really have' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I don't really have' to express negation in the present tense. Also, 'a future work plans' is incorrect because 'plans' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. The phrase 'go to work in the global companies' is better expressed as 'work in global companies' for naturalness and correctness.