Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议注意句子结构的完整性和连贯性，避免断句。可以适当扩展理由，使回答更自然流畅。

Exemplo: I'm a university student majoring in Human Resource Management. I chose this field because my dad works in this area, and he believes he can share his experience with me to help improve my skills.

Sugestão: 回答中有语法错误和表达重复，建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯，同时避免重复描述。

Exemplo: I'm currently studying at Xinjiang Agricultural University, which is surrounded by beautiful mountains and streams. I really enjoy studying here because of the peaceful environment and the lovely campus.

Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和断句问题，建议注意句子结构完整性，使用适当的连接词使表达更流畅。

Exemplo: Yes, it is a very beautiful and peaceful place because my campus is surrounded by green spaces and quiet areas, which help me focus on my studies. Moreover, it offers excellent facilities for students.

Sugestão: 回答较为完整，但有重复词汇和时态错误，建议注意时态一致性和避免重复表达，使回答更自然。

Exemplo: Yes, I really like studying here because the environment is pleasant and comfortable, and the people are friendly, which makes the place enjoyable. I hope to continue working here in the future after I finish my studies.

Sugestão: 回答内容具体且连贯，但可以使用更多连接词丰富句子结构，使表达更自然。

Exemplo: In the future, I want to work in the social media industry because I enjoy connecting with people online and creating interesting content. Additionally, I hope to find a high-paying job so that I can support my family and live a comfortable life.

× I choose this field because my dad.

✓ I chose this field because of my dad.

这里描述的是过去的选择行为，应该使用过去时态'chose'，而不是现在时态'choose'。

× Engaged this kind of work and he thinks he can share the experience with me to improve my skills.

✓ He engaged in this kind of work and he thinks he can share the experience with me to improve my skills.

原句缺少主语，导致句子结构不完整。需要加上主语'He'，并且动词'engaged'后面应加介词'in'构成固定搭配'engaged in'。

× It is a very beautiful place, is surrounded by mountains and streams.

✓ It is a very beautiful place, surrounded by mountains and streams.

原句中逗号后重复使用'is'，造成语法错误。应省略第二个'is'，使用过去分词'surrounded'作后置定语。

× I really enjoy studying here because this peaceful environment and my campus are very beautiful too.

✓ I really enjoy studying here because the peaceful environment and my campus are very beautiful too.

'this peaceful environment'应使用定冠词'the'，因为特指已知的环境。

× Yes, it is a very beautiful and peaceful. Place because my campus is surrounded by green spaces and quiet area which can makes me focus on my studies.

✓ Yes, it is a very beautiful and peaceful place because my campus is surrounded by green spaces and quiet areas which can help me focus on my studies.

'peaceful.'后不应有句号，且'Place'不应大写。'quiet area'应为复数'quiet areas'，且'makes'应改为'help'以符合主语复数。

× quiet area which can makes me focus on my studies.

✓ quiet areas which can help me focus on my studies.

'quiet area'应为复数形式'quiet areas'，且'makes'应改为'help'，因为主语是复数，动词应与之匹配。

× I hope I can continue working there here in the future after I finished all of my study.

✓ I hope I can continue working there in the future after I finish all of my studies.

'there here'重复，应去掉'here'。'finished'应改为现在时'finish'以符合将来时间表达。'study'应为复数'studies'。

× after I finished all of my study.

✓ after I finish all of my studies.

这里表达的是将来完成的动作，应该用现在时态'finish'，而不是过去时态'finished'。

× I hope to find a high paying job so that I can support my family and have a comfortable life.

✓ I hope to find a high-paying job so that I can support my family and have a comfortable life.

'high paying'应使用连字符连接，构成复合形容词'high-paying'。