Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "I have graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I am currently looking for a suitable job because I prefer meaningful employment."

Exemplo: I have graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I am currently looking for a suitable job because I prefer meaningful employment that matches my skills.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repeating previous information. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "I am not working currently because I am pursuing a master's degree. However, I hope to find a suitable job after graduation."

Exemplo: I am not working currently because I am pursuing a master's degree. However, I hope to find a suitable job after graduation.

Sugestão: Be clear and coherent in your answer. Start with a direct response, then explain your opinion with specific reasons. Use linking words to organize your ideas. For example, "Regarding my university, I think it is average because the facilities are limited and the teaching quality could be better."

Exemplo: Regarding my university, I think it is average because the facilities are limited and the teaching quality could be better.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating previous answers. Instead, answer the question directly and add new information if possible. For example, "Since I am not working yet, I cannot comment on a workplace. However, I hope to work in a positive environment that supports growth."

Exemplo: Since I am not working yet, I cannot comment on a workplace. However, I hope to work in a positive environment that supports growth.

Sugestão: Make your answer complete and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons and personal feelings. For example, "After completing my master's degree, I want to become a diplomatic attaché at the Ministry of Foreign Affairs because I enjoy representing Egypt and have been interested in this career since I was young."

Exemplo: After completing my master's degree, I want to become a diplomatic attaché at the Ministry of Foreign Affairs because I enjoy representing Egypt and have been interested in this career since I was young.

× Actually I am a graduated from faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I didn't find the job until now.

✓ Actually I graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I haven't found a job until now.

The phrase 'I am a graduated' is incorrect because 'graduate' is a verb, not an adjective. The correct past tense form is 'I graduated'. Also, 'didn't find the job until now' should be in present perfect tense 'haven't found a job until now' to indicate an action continuing up to the present.

× Actually I am a graduated from faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I didn't find the job until now.

✓ Actually I graduated from the Faculty of Economics and Political Science, but I haven't found a job until now.

The phrase 'faculty of Economics and Political Science' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Faculty' because it refers to a specific faculty.

× But I wish to find a good job and suitable job for me.

✓ I wish to find a good and suitable job for me.

Starting a sentence with 'But' is informal and unnecessary here. Also, 'good job and suitable job' is repetitive; combining them as 'good and suitable job' is clearer.

× Becauses uh, I don't like to be an employment person.

✓ Because, uh, I don't like to be an employee.

The word 'employment person' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'employee' to refer to someone who is employed.

× I didn't find the job until now.

✓ I haven't found a job until now.

The phrase 'until now' is better used with present perfect tense 'haven't found' rather than past tense 'didn't find' to express an action continuing to the present.

× I hope one day I will find the right job for me.

✓ I hope one day I will find the right job for me.

This sentence is correct; no modal verb error.

× If I'm going to talk about my. College or my university on pursuing a masters degree?

✓ If I'm going to talk about my college or my university while pursuing a master's degree,

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'On pursuing' should be 'while pursuing' to indicate simultaneous action. Also, 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree'.

× I think my university is good but not good enough for me and it is not that bad.

✓ I think my university is good but not good enough for me, and it is not that bad.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate independent clauses for clarity.

× I think I will give it a rate 5 out of 10 or actually 4.

✓ I think I will give it a rating of 5 out of 10 or actually 4.

The phrase 'give it a rate 5' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'give it a rating of 5'.

× As I mentioned, I don't work until now, but if I'm gonna talk about my university, I already say that all everything about it.

✓ As I mentioned, I don't work at the moment, but if I'm going to talk about my university, I have already said everything about it.

'Don't work until now' is incorrect; 'don't work at the moment' is better. 'Gonna' is informal; 'going to' is preferred. 'I already say' should be 'I have already said' for correct tense.

× Besides pursuing my masters degree, I want to be a. Diplomatic attache in the Ministry of Foreign Affairs in Egypt.

✓ Besides pursuing my master's degree, I want to be a diplomatic attaché in the Ministry of Foreign Affairs in Egypt.

'Masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. Also, 'attache' should be 'attaché' with an accent. The period after 'a.' is incorrect and removed.

× I like the job ecause I think I'm good represent Egypt approach and.

✓ I like the job because I think I can represent Egypt's approach well.

'Because' was misspelled as 'ecause'. 'I'm good represent' is incorrect; it should be 'I can represent'. 'Egypt approach' should be 'Egypt's approach' to show possession.

× I like this job since I was younger and the.

✓ I have liked this job since I was younger.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. 'I like this job since I was younger' should be in present perfect tense 'I have liked' to indicate duration from past to present.