Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변이 문법적으로 부자연스럽고 문장이 끊겨서 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 완성형으로 자연스럽게 연결하고, 질문에 직접적으로 답하는 문장으로 시작하세요.

Exemplo: I am currently a student preparing to study abroad in the USA. Therefore, I am studying English hard to communicate well when I go there.

Sugestão: 답변이 단편적이고 문장이 짧아 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 추가 정보를 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요.

Exemplo: I usually study at an English academy to improve my skills. I attend the academy on weekdays regularly.

Sugestão: 문장이 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문법과 어휘를 정확히 사용하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to work because many students are beginners like me, so I can gain motivation from them.

Sugestão: 문장이 매우 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 이유를 명확한 문장으로 표현하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I like the place where I work because the desk is comfortable and the atmosphere is enthusiastic.

Sugestão: 답변이 비교적 명확하지만 문장이 다소 어색합니다. 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하고, 구체적인 계획을 조금 더 명확히 표현하세요.

Exemplo: In the future, I want to establish my own fashion brand that focuses on sustainable fashion because I am very interested in this field and want to develop it by myself.

× I miss Judah right now because I'm preparing for.

✓ I miss Judah right now because I'm preparing to study abroad in the USA.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear object after 'preparing for'. The phrase 'preparing for' should be followed by a noun or gerund. Here, 'to study abroad in the USA' completes the thought properly.

× Study abroad in the USA so.

✓ I am preparing to study abroad in the USA, so

This is a sentence fragment. It lacks a subject and verb. It should be combined with the previous or following sentence to form a complete sentence.

× I'm learning English really hard to.

✓ I'm studying English really hard to

The verb 'learning' is correct but 'really hard to' is awkward. 'Studying' fits better with 'really hard'. Also, 'to' should be followed by a verb, so the sentence should continue or be rephrased.

× Communicate well when I go to USA.

✓ so that I can communicate well when I go to the USA.

This is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a conjunction and include a subject and modal verb for clarity.

× I usually study. In Academy, especially English Academy to improve my English skills.

✓ I usually study at an academy, especially an English academy, to improve my English skills.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'at' is used for institutions. Also, articles 'an' are needed before 'academy'.

× I always go to Academy. Oh. Week days.

✓ I always go to the academy on weekdays.

Fragmented sentences should be combined. 'Oh.' is unnecessary. 'Week days' should be one word 'weekdays' and preceded by the preposition 'on'.

× Yeah, it's totally cool place to worry because there are many students who are starting horse so.

✓ Yeah, it's a totally cool place to work because there are many students who are starting courses, so

'Worry' is incorrect; likely meant 'work'. 'Starting horse' is incorrect; likely meant 'starting courses'. Also, 'place' needs an article 'a'.

× I can. Gain. Motivation from them.

✓ I can gain motivation from them.

Fragmented sentences should be combined into one complete sentence.

× Yeah, I like the place where are you work because.

✓ Yeah, I like the place where you work because

Incorrect word order 'where are you work' should be 'where you work'.

× The task is made of. Word. So I feel. Comfortable from the desk when I work.

✓ The tasks are made of words, so I feel comfortable at the desk when I work.

Fragmented sentences should be combined. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to match context. 'Made of word' is incorrect; 'made of words' is correct. 'Comfortable from the desk' should be 'comfortable at the desk'.

× And atmosphere is also enthusiastic.

✓ And the atmosphere is also enthusiastic.

Missing article 'the' before 'atmosphere'.

× In the future, I want to establish my own fashion brand design which prefers sustainable fashion because I'm really into sustainable fashion right now, so I want to develop. By myself.

✓ In the future, I want to establish my own fashion brand that focuses on sustainable fashion because I'm really into sustainable fashion right now, so I want to develop it by myself.

Fragmented sentences should be combined. 'Brand design which prefers' is awkward; 'brand that focuses on' is better. 'Develop by myself' needs an object 'it' and should be one sentence.