Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct, combine short fragments into full sentences, and add a specific detail or example. Use a clear topic sentence then one or two supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping and have liked it since I was a child. For example, when I was young I loved going to the market with my family because I could choose toys and snacks. Also, I find shopping relaxing and a good way to discover new products.

제안: Correct grammatical errors and be more specific about how and why you compare prices. Use linking words to connect reasons and methods. Avoid vague phrases like 'anything'.

예시: Yes, I often compare prices because I have a limited budget. For instance, I check prices on several online stores and then visit a few local shops to see if there are discounts. By doing this I can find the best deal and save money.

제안: Clarify your response and fix pronunciation/word choice errors ('hard to make noise' → 'hard to make choices'). Structure with a topic sentence then explain with specific situations and linking words like 'because' or 'when'.

예시: Yes, it can be difficult for me to make choices when shopping, especially if there are many similar items. When my budget is tight, I spend more time comparing features and prices; however, when I have enough money I decide more quickly.

제안: Avoid absolute answers; give a balanced opinion and provide reasons and examples. Improve grammar and vocabulary ('expensive products have better quality and features') and use linking words like 'however' or 'often'.

예시: I don't think expensive products are always better, although they often have higher quality or more features. For example, a premium phone may last longer and have a better camera, but sometimes a mid-range model offers similar performance at a much lower price.

× Yes I do. I like shopping. Since I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I do. I have liked shopping since I was a kid.

Original fragments: 'I like shopping. Since I was a kid.' The second part is a sentence fragment and the tense is better expressed with present perfect for a past-to-present state. Combine into one coherent sentence using present perfect: 'I have liked shopping since I was a kid.' Add commas and correct punctuation.

× Shopping was really fun for me because you could buy anything you want.

✓ Shopping was really fun for me because you could buy anything you wanted.

Mixes past modal 'could' with present simple 'you want'. Use past tense 'wanted' to match 'was' and 'could.' Change 'want' to past form 'wanted' for tense consistency.

× Yes I do. I compare anything because I don't had enough money to buy anything.

✓ Yes, I do. I compare prices because I don't have enough money to buy everything.

Uses wrong verb form 'don't had' (should be 'don't have'). Also 'compare anything' is unnatural; use 'compare prices'. 'Anything' at end becomes 'everything' to convey general purchases. Correct auxiliary present 'do' with base verb 'have'.

× Yeah, I always compare price with online shop, offline shop.

✓ Yeah, I always compare prices between online shops and offline shops.

Use plural 'prices' and plural 'shops' for general statements. Use preposition 'between' to compare two categories. 'Online shop, offline shop' is awkward; change to 'online shops and offline shops.'

× Yes. Is it? Sometimes it's hard to make noise and sometimes it's easy.

✓ Yes. Sometimes it's hard to make a choice and sometimes it's easy.

'Is it?' is unnecessary and confusing in response. 'Make noise' is incorrect collocation; intended meaning is 'make a choice.' Use correct noun phrase 'make a choice.' Add article 'a.'

× It's hard when I low on budget and it's easy to choice when I have enough budget to buy.

✓ It's hard when I am low on budget, and it's easy to choose when I have enough money to buy things.

Missing verb 'am' after 'I' ('I am low on budget'). Use 'choose' (verb) not 'choice' (noun). Use 'money' instead of repeating 'budget' and add 'to buy things' for clarity. Add comma and conjunction for sentence structure.

× Yes I do expensive product have quality and uh feature.

✓ Yes, I think expensive products have better quality and more features.

Missing verb 'do' used incorrectly; sentence needs subject 'I think' or 'yes' plus clause. Use plural 'products' to generalize and add comparative 'better' for quality. Add 'more' before 'features.'

× It's always very. Interesting then the cheaper one.

✓ They are often much more interesting than the cheaper ones.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'It's always very. Interesting then the cheaper one.' Use correct comparative structure 'more interesting than' and plural agreement 'ones.' Replace 'It' with 'They' referring to products.

× I love expense.

✓ I like expensive things.

'Love expense' is incorrect collocation. Use adjective 'expensive' with noun 'things' or 'products.' 'Love' can remain but 'expensive' must modify a noun: 'I love expensive products' or milder 'I like expensive things.'