Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more natural: correct word choice and reduce repetition. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Avoid unclear proper nouns and incorrect words (e.g., “change”, “Cecilia”).

예시: Yes, I do. Parties are a great way to relax with friends after a busy day; for example, at birthday gatherings I enjoy catching up with people and trying different foods, which makes the atmosphere lively.

제안: Improve clarity, correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and avoid redundancy. Use one clear time-frequency phrase, then provide a specific example with coherent details and linking words. Replace incorrect words like “caffeine”, “invade”, and remove repeated words.

예시: I had parties fairly often, about once every few months for birthdays and holidays. For example, my family held small birthday parties with cake and games, and during festivals we invited relatives and neighbors, which made those times very memorable.

제안: Be precise and use correct vocabulary; keep answers concise and structured. State directly that you organized a party, then give specific actions you took and a result, using linking words. Correct words like “caffeine”, “snake”, and “storeboats”.

예시: Yes, I have. Last year I organized a small birthday party for a close friend: I prepared the guest list, chose a playlist, and arranged a mix of homemade snacks and store-bought dishes to suit different tastes, so it felt rewarding to see everyone enjoying themselves.

× I enjoy parties because they offer change to relax in the Cecilia with friends after a busy day.

✓ I enjoy parties because they offer a chance to relax with friends after a busy day.

Used wrong words and prepositions: 'change' should be 'a chance' and 'in the Cecilia' is incorrect and unclear. Remove incorrect place phrase and use 'with friends' (correct preposition for companionship). Suggestion: use 'a chance to relax with friends' for clarity.

× For example, it's birthday gathering.

✓ For example, it's a birthday gathering.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun 'birthday gathering'. Always use 'a' or 'the' with singular countable nouns unless plural or uncountable. Use 'a birthday gathering.'

× When I was a kid, I used to have parties fairly often as a child, maybe once every few months for birthday or holidays.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to have parties fairly often, maybe once every few months for birthdays or holidays.

Plural needed for recurring events: 'birthday' and 'holidays' should be plural when referring to general occurrences. Also redundant phrase 'as a child' since 'When I was a kid' already states it; remove redundancy. Ensure agreement in plurality.

× For example, my family would host a small birthday caffeine with cake and games and during festivals ahead invade relatives and the neighbors which made S accession legally in the memorable memorable.

✓ For example, my family would host a small birthday celebration with cake and games, and during festivals we would invite relatives and neighbors, which made those times very memorable.

Multiple problems: 'caffeine' is wrong word; intended 'celebration'. 'Ahead invade' is incorrect and should be 'we would invite'. 'the neighbors' -> 'neighbors' (article optional but 'invite relatives and neighbors' is natural). 'S accession legally in the memorable memorable' is garbled; corrected to 'which made those times very memorable.' This fixes word choice, verb usage, and sentence clarity.

× Yes, of course, I have organized a party before.

✓ Yes, of course, I have organized a party before.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present perfect 'have organized' is appropriate for life experience. No change required.

× Last year I earned a small birthday caffeine for a close friend, handing the guest list of food and music to create a warm atmosphere.

✓ Last year I organized a small birthday celebration for a close friend, handling the guest list and food and music to create a warm atmosphere.

Wrong verbs and nouns: 'earned' should be 'organized'; 'caffeine' should be 'celebration'. 'Handing the guest list of food and music' is ungrammatical; use 'handling the guest list and food and music' or 'arranging the food and music.' This fixes verb choice and article usage.

× For example, I choose a mix of homemade snake and a few storeboats dishes to suit different tastes.

✓ For example, I chose a mix of homemade snacks and a few store-bought dishes to suit different tastes.

Tense mismatch: 'choose' should be past 'chose' to match past context. Word choice errors: 'snake' -> 'snacks', 'storeboats' -> 'store-bought'. Also hyphenate 'store-bought' as adjective. This corrects tense and vocabulary.

× Umm, it was rewarding because seeing everyone enjoying.

✓ Umm, it was rewarding because I saw everyone enjoying themselves.

Original lacks a proper subject and verb form. 'seeing everyone enjoying' is a fragment; use 'I saw everyone enjoying themselves' or 'because everyone was enjoying themselves.' Add reflexive 'themselves' after 'enjoying' for correct structure and clarity.