Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some language errors, such as 'I don't like Portuguese' which seems unrelated. Try to be more precise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'You feel me?' in IELTS speaking. Focus on clear, natural English with relevant vocabulary.

예시: No, I don't enjoy parties very much because I prefer quiet environments. I am not fond of large crowds and loud noises. Instead, I like spending time with a small group of close friends where we can talk comfortably. This setting helps me feel relaxed and composed. Therefore, I usually avoid big parties.

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but could be clearer and more structured. Avoid filler phrases like 'if my mind serves me right' and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'to to make a party' and improve vocabulary by saying 'improve my social skills' instead of 'to be more like sociable'.

예시: I had about three parties when I was a child, all of which were birthday celebrations. My parents encouraged me to organize these parties so I could invite my friends and improve my social skills. Although I was young, these experiences helped me become more comfortable communicating with others.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains some repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to avoid repeating 'organize a party' multiple times and use clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid informal expressions like 'to be honest'.

예시: No, I have never organized a party because I have never been fond of them. Perhaps when I was very young, my parents arranged parties for me since I was just a toddler. I do not recall organizing any parties myself.

× It's just more better for me to to stay composed, you know?

✓ It's just better for me to stay composed, you know?

The phrase 'more better' is incorrect because 'better' is already a comparative adjective and does not need 'more'. Using both together is redundant. The correct form is simply 'better'. Also, the repeated 'to' is a typographical error and should be corrected.

× I prefer to be with my friends in a small circle without any noises and a crowd.

✓ I prefer to be with my friends in a small circle without any noise or a crowd.

The word 'noises' is usually uncountable when referring to general sound, so 'noise' is correct here. Also, 'and a crowd' suggests both noise and a crowd together, but the intended meaning is to avoid either noise or a crowd, so 'or' is more appropriate.

× When I was a kid if my mind serves me right, I've had maybe like 3 different parties and all of them were birthday parties.

✓ When I was a kid, if my mind serves me right, I had maybe like 3 different parties and all of them were birthday parties.

The phrase 'I've had' (present perfect) is not appropriate when referring to a specific time in the past ('when I was a kid'). The simple past tense 'I had' should be used to indicate completed actions at a definite past time.

× My mom and my dad forced me to to make a party just to invite my friends and to be more like sociable and to have a better communication skills.

✓ My mom and my dad forced me to have a party just to invite my friends and to be more sociable and to have better communication skills.

The phrase 'make a party' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a party'. Also, 'more like sociable' is awkward; 'more sociable' is correct. 'A better communication skills' is incorrect because 'skills' is plural and should not have 'a' before it; 'better communication skills' is correct.

× Maybe when I was a kid I've organized, but I don't remember.

✓ Maybe when I was a kid I organized, but I don't remember.

Using present perfect 'I've organized' with a specific past time 'when I was a kid' is incorrect. The simple past tense 'I organized' should be used for actions completed at a definite time in the past.

× I didn't like parties at the 1st place to organize a party.

✓ I didn't like parties in the first place to organize a party.

The correct prepositional phrase is 'in the first place', not 'at the first place'. Also, '1st' should be written as 'first' in formal writing.