Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ваш ответ немного повторяется и содержит грамматические ошибки. Постарайтесь использовать более естественные выражения и избегать избыточности. Например, вместо "in parties it was always fun because you will fun with your friends" можно сказать "Parties are always enjoyable because I get to spend time with my friends and enjoy delicious treats."

예시: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they bring together many friends and delicious treats like cakes. Parties are always fun since I get to socialize and have a great time with my friends.

제안: Ваш ответ содержит повторения и неясные фразы, например, "I have CLO" не понятно. Также стоит использовать связующие слова для логичности. Попробуйте более чётко и связно объяснить, почему вы редко устраивали вечеринки.

예시: When I was a child, I rarely had parties because we lived in a small apartment and my family preferred quiet gatherings. Therefore, I usually spent time with only a few close friends at home.

제안: Ответ прерван и содержит грамматические ошибки. Постарайтесь завершать мысли и использовать правильные времена. Также добавьте детали, чтобы ответ был более информативным и связным.

예시: Yes, I have organized a party before. It was my close friend's birthday, and I found it quite challenging because I had to arrange cakes, sweets, and music to make sure everyone enjoyed the celebration.

× Yes, I really love parties because in parties there are a lot of people just friends and a lot of very sweet things or cakes.

✓ Yes, I really love parties because at parties there are a lot of people, just friends, and a lot of very sweet things like cakes.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'parties'; the correct preposition is 'at' to indicate location of events. Also, the sentence needed commas for clarity and 'or' should be 'like' to indicate examples.

× And in parties it was always fun because you will fun with your friends.

✓ And at parties it was always fun because you have fun with your friends.

The phrase 'you will fun' is incorrect; 'fun' is a noun, not a verb. The correct verb phrase is 'have fun'. Also, 'in parties' should be 'at parties' for correct preposition usage.

× When I was a kid I didn't usually have parties because we lived in a small apartment in my hometown, but also my family preferred quite gatherings so I rarely rarely hosted parties at home with my only close friends and I have CLO.

✓ When I was a kid I didn't usually have parties because we lived in a small apartment in my hometown, and my family also preferred quiet gatherings, so I rarely hosted parties at home with only my close friends.

The word 'quite' is incorrect; it should be 'quiet' (adjective). The phrase 'rarely rarely' is repetitive and should be 'rarely'. The phrase 'my only close friends and I have CLO' is unclear and likely incorrect; it was corrected to 'only my close friends'. Also, conjunctions were adjusted for clarity.

× Yes, in the past I organized a party. It was a birthday party of my close friend and it I can say that it's was very hard.

✓ Yes, in the past I organized a party. It was a birthday party for my close friend, and I can say that it was very hard.

The phrase 'birthday party of my close friend' should be 'birthday party for my close friend' to use the correct preposition. The phrase 'it's was' is incorrect; it should be 'it was'. Also, the conjunction 'and' was added for sentence flow.

× You should bring cakes, sweets, even music and.

✓ You should bring cakes, sweets, and even music.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' The correct structure is to list items with 'and' before the last item without trailing conjunctions. The phrase 'even music' is better placed after 'and' for emphasis.