Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use more natural expressions and avoid repeating phrases. Also, keep your answer concise and clear by limiting it to 3-4 sentences. For example, say "I'm an outgoing person, so I really enjoy parties because I can meet new people and have fun listening to music."

예시: I'm an outgoing person, so I really enjoy parties because I can meet new people and have fun listening to music. The lively atmosphere always makes the experience enjoyable.

제안: Your answer provides relevant details but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past, and avoid filler words like "et cetera." Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, "When I was a kid in the United States, I attended parties about once a week because there were often birthday celebrations or holiday events. I enjoyed the different atmospheres and styles at each party."

예시: When I was a kid in the United States, I attended parties about once a week because there were often birthday celebrations or holiday events. I enjoyed the different atmospheres and styles at each party.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use past tense when describing past events. Also, avoid repeating words like "prepare preparation." For example, "Yes, I have organized a party before. The first one was my birthday party. Preparing for it was challenging, but with my brother's help, everything went well, and we had a lot of fun."

예시: Yes, I have organized a party before. The first one was my birthday party. Preparing for it was challenging, but with my brother's help, everything went well, and we had a lot of fun.

× Yes, since I'm an outdoor per person so I really like parties.

✓ Yes, since I'm an outdoor person, I really like parties.

The phrase 'per person' is incorrect here; the correct term is 'person' to refer to an individual. 'Per person' is used in contexts like pricing, not to describe a person.

× The main reason why I love party because I can know more people and just go there have fun and enjoy all the music and let atmosphere.

✓ The main reason why I love parties is because I can meet more people and just go there to have fun and enjoy all the music and the atmosphere.

The sentence lacks a proper verb after 'party' and has awkward phrasing. 'Love party' should be 'love parties' (plural). 'Can know more people' is incorrect; 'can meet more people' is appropriate. Also, 'let atmosphere' is incorrect; it should be 'the atmosphere'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× So that's the main the main 2 reasons why I like going to parties.

✓ So those are the two main reasons why I like going to parties.

'Reason' should be plural 'reasons' because there are two reasons. Also, 'the main the main 2 reasons' is redundant and awkward; 'the two main reasons' is clearer. 'That's' (that is) should be 'those are' to agree with the plural subject.

× So in Taiwan, I can't remember, but back in the United States, I remember I will attend to a party maybe like once a week because there must be a a birthday party or something that they celebrate for the holidays and et cetera, that kind of thing.

✓ So in Taiwan, I can't remember, but back in the United States, I remember I would attend a party maybe once a week because there would be a birthday party or something to celebrate the holidays, and so on.

The use of 'will' is incorrect when referring to past habitual actions; 'would' is appropriate. 'Attend to a party' is incorrect; it should be 'attend a party'. Also, 'must be a a birthday party' is awkward; 'there would be a birthday party' fits better. 'Et cetera' is better replaced with 'and so on' for clarity.

× So I actually will go to party like once a week and I really enjoy the different atmosphere and the different style.

✓ So I actually would go to parties like once a week and I really enjoyed the different atmospheres and different styles.

'Go to party' should be 'go to parties' (plural). Since referring to past habitual actions, 'would go' and 'enjoyed' (past tense) are appropriate. 'Atmosphere' and 'style' can be plural if referring to different types.

× Yes, I do organise a party before.

✓ Yes, I have organized a party before.

The present tense 'do organise' is incorrect when referring to a past event. The present perfect 'have organized' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now. Also, 'organise' is British spelling; 'organized' is American spelling, but either is acceptable depending on context.

× I still remember the first party that I hold was my birthday party and starting from the prepare preparation that was super hard but I have my brother's help and so it was good and we have a lot of fun in the party like we.

✓ I still remember the first party that I held was my birthday party, and starting from the preparation, that was super hard, but I had my brother's help, so it was good and we had a lot of fun at the party.

'Hold' should be past tense 'held' to match past event. 'Prepare preparation' is redundant; 'preparation' alone is correct. 'Have my brother's help' should be past tense 'had'. 'We have a lot of fun' should be 'we had a lot of fun' to maintain past tense consistency. 'In the party' should be 'at the party' for correct preposition use.