Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid informal contractions like ''Cause' and redundant phrases such as 'I really want, I really would like'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy parties because they are great opportunities to meet new people and socialise.

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but contains some unclear phrases like 'You really?'. Also, the sentence about birthdays could be clearer and more structured. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid minor grammatical errors.

예시: When I was a child, we didn't have many parties. I usually had one or two parties a year, mainly to celebrate my birthday or my best friend's birthday. I always enjoyed these occasions because they were a great chance to spend time with friends and have fun.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a proper structure and supporting details. Try to provide a full sentence with clear information, including when and where the party was, and perhaps what kind of party it was.

예시: Yes, I organised a party for my 25th birthday in 2015 at a place called Tempe. It was a memorable event with close friends and family.

× I absolutely enjoy parties. 'Cause I really want, I really would like to meet new people on general, in general and I think parties are the best places to do it.

✓ I absolutely enjoy parties because I really want to meet new people in general, and I think parties are the best places to do it.

The sentence starts with the informal contraction ''Cause' which is inappropriate in formal speech. Also, 'on general' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'in general'. The conjunction 'and' should connect two complete ideas properly. Replacing ''Cause' with 'because' and correcting 'on general' to 'in general' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When I was a kid we didn't have many parties. You really? I had a party once or twice a year, mostly to celebrate my birthday to my best friends birthday.

✓ When I was a kid, we didn't have many parties. Really? I had a party once or twice a year, mostly to celebrate my birthday or my best friend's birthday.

The phrase 'You really?' is incorrect and should be 'Really?' as an interjection. Also, 'to my best friends birthday' lacks possessive apostrophe and the preposition 'to' is incorrect; it should be 'or' to indicate alternatives. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I always enjoyed those occasions because they were a great chance to spend the time with friends and have fun.

✓ I always enjoyed those occasions because they were a great chance to spend time with friends and have fun.

The phrase 'spend the time' is less natural here; 'spend time' is the correct collocation when referring to time spent generally. Removing 'the' before 'time' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I have organized my 25th years 2015 Tempe.

✓ Yes, I organized my 25th birthday party in Tempe in 2015.

The original sentence is unclear and lacks proper structure. 'My 25th years 2015 Tempe' is not a correct phrase. The corrected sentence clarifies that the student organized their 25th birthday party in Tempe in 2015, using proper noun phrases and prepositions for clarity and grammatical correctness.