Party— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrasing like "I love to take parties."

예시: Yes, I really enjoy attending parties, especially when I get to celebrate special occasions with my friends and family. They are a great way to relax and have fun together.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Begin with a direct response, then use linking words to add details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Be specific about frequency and types of parties.

예시: When I was a kid, we mostly had parties for birthdays and weddings. However, as I grew older, the number of parties decreased, and now I only celebrate small occasions occasionally.

제안: Try to make your answer more fluent and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to explain the situation and your feelings. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like "it was all only due to the party purposes."

예시: Yes, I organized a farewell party last month with my friends because the school didn't arrange one for us. We had a great time celebrating together with our families and friends.

× Yes, I love to enjoy different parties at any occasions or whenever we had any occasion to be happy or to be with my friends and family members.

✓ Yes, I love enjoying different parties on any occasion or whenever we have an occasion to be happy or to be with my friends and family members.

The verb 'love' is typically followed by a gerund (-ing form) rather than an infinitive ('to enjoy'). Also, 'at any occasions' should be 'on any occasion' because 'occasion' is usually singular in this context and the preposition 'on' is correct for occasions. Additionally, 'whenever we had any occasion' should be 'whenever we have an occasion' to maintain present tense consistency.

× Yes, I love to enjoy different parties at any occasions or whenever we had any occasion to be happy or to be with my friends and family members.

✓ Yes, I love enjoying different parties on any occasion or whenever we have an occasion to be happy or to be with my friends and family members.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect with 'occasions' in this context; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to occasions or events.

× I think that when I was a kid the parties were mostly of birthday occasions or mostly like a wedding occasions when we used to celebrate these occasions but now frequently it's reducing and it's like we had to celebrate small occasions when I'm I am an adult.

✓ I think that when I was a kid, the parties were mostly for birthdays or weddings when we used to celebrate these occasions, but now they are less frequent and I celebrate smaller occasions as an adult.

The phrase 'mostly of birthday occasions' is incorrect; it should be 'mostly for birthdays'. 'Wedding occasions' should be 'weddings'. 'It's reducing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'they are less frequent'. Also, 'it's like we had to celebrate' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'I celebrate'. The sentence is also long and needs commas for clarity.

× I think that when I was a kid the parties were mostly of birthday occasions or mostly like a wedding occasions when we used to celebrate these occasions but now frequently it's reducing and it's like we had to celebrate small occasions when I'm I am an adult.

✓ I think that when I was a kid, the parties were mostly for birthdays or weddings when we used to celebrate these occasions, but now they are less frequent and I celebrate smaller occasions as an adult.

'Occasions' should be plural or singular consistently; 'birthday occasions' and 'wedding occasions' are better expressed as 'birthdays' and 'weddings'. Also, 'it's reducing' is incorrect; the subject should agree in number with 'parties'.

× Yes, I have organized a party last month.

✓ Yes, I organized a party last month.

The present perfect tense ('have organized') is not used with specific past time expressions like 'last month'. The simple past tense ('organized') is correct here.

× That was our farewell party's.

✓ That was our farewell party.

The apostrophe in 'party's' incorrectly indicates possession. The correct form is the singular noun 'party' without an apostrophe.

× So me and my friends together, we organized a party for our school.

✓ So my friends and I together organized a party for our school.

The subject pronoun 'I' should be used instead of the object pronoun 'me' when it is the subject of the sentence. Also, 'my friends and I' is the correct order.

× And it was all only due to the party purposes that we enjoyed a lot in my in my with my friends and my family members.

✓ And it was only because of the party that we enjoyed a lot with my friends and family members.

The original sentence is awkward and contains repetition ('in my in my'). The phrase 'due to the party purposes' is incorrect; 'because of the party' is clearer. Also, 'enjoyed a lot in my with my friends' is ungrammatical; it should be 'enjoyed a lot with my friends'.