History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, and avoid repetition. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and add a brief detail if necessary.

예시: Yes, I have studied history. It was part of my 10th-grade curriculum, and I found it quite interesting.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to speak more fluently and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples.

예시: I learn history in a practical way. For example, I often make models of past buildings and the living styles of people, which helps me understand history better.

제안: Your answer has good points but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide more specific details. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure.

예시: There are several benefits to learning history. Firstly, it helps us understand how our ancestors lived and the struggles they faced. Additionally, we can learn from their mistakes to avoid repeating them.

제안: Your answer is brief and contains grammatical errors. Try to expand your response with clear reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, check your grammar and word choice.

예시: Yes, I believe learning history is important because it allows us to learn from past mistakes and improve our present society.

× Yes, I have studied history it It is a subject in our 10th class curriculum I. I learned.

✓ Yes, I have studied history. It is a subject in our 10th class curriculum.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with unclear structure and repetition. It should be split into two clear sentences to improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I learn history in very practical way.

✓ I learn history in a very practical way.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very practical way'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article.

× Uh, I often I made some models, uh, based upon the, uh, past, uh, like past buildings or living style of, uh, people.

✓ Uh, I often make some models based upon the past, like past buildings or the living style of people.

The use of 'made' (past tense) conflicts with 'often' which indicates habitual action, so present tense 'make' is appropriate. Also, unnecessary fillers and repeated words were removed for clarity.

× Uh, so it, it helped me to.

✓ Uh, so it helps me to understand better.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× There are thorough reasons of learning history.

✓ There are many reasons for learning history.

The word 'thorough' is incorrectly used here; 'many' is the correct quantifier for countable 'reasons'. Also, 'of' should be 'for' in this context.

× First reason is that we learn about the, uh, our ancestor, uh, how they lived and how they struggle.

✓ The first reason is that we learn about our ancestors, how they lived and how they struggled.

The singular 'ancestor' should be plural 'ancestors' to match 'they'. Also, 'struggle' should be past tense 'struggled' to maintain tense consistency.

× Uh, they feast and also we know about the mistakes.

✓ They faced difficulties and also we know about their mistakes.

The word 'feast' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'faced'. Also, 'the mistakes' should be 'their mistakes' to indicate possession.

× We can improve our present by the mistake of past.

✓ We can improve our present by the mistakes of the past.

'Mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' because generally multiple mistakes are learned from. Also, 'the past' requires the definite article 'the'.

× And we can developed our presentation.

✓ And we can develop our presentation.

After modal verb 'can', the base form of the verb 'develop' should be used, not the past tense 'developed'.