History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, tetapi Anda bisa membuatnya lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari kalimat negatif yang berulang dan menambahkan sedikit detail untuk memperkaya jawaban.

예시: I haven't formally studied history, but I enjoy watching educational videos about historical events on YouTube.

제안: Anda sudah memberikan jawaban yang relevan, namun perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menggunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan alami.

예시: Currently, I learn history mainly by watching YouTube videos. Recently, I have been interested in the history of Egypt, especially the era when the pyramids were built.

제안: Jawaban Anda perlu diperbaiki dari segi tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih jelas dan tambahkan contoh spesifik untuk memperkuat pendapat Anda.

예시: Learning history helps us understand a nation's origins and culture. Moreover, it teaches valuable life lessons, such as how to avoid repeating past mistakes.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah menyampaikan ide utama, tetapi perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menggunakan kata penghubung agar lebih alami dan efektif. Tambahkan contoh spesifik untuk memperkuat argumen Anda.

예시: I believe learning history is essential because it allows us to understand how people in the past behaved. This knowledge can help us improve our lives and avoid making the same mistakes they did.

× I never studied any history but I like to see videos on YouTube about history.

✓ I have never studied any history but I like to watch videos on YouTube about history.

The sentence uses 'never studied' which is simple past, but the context suggests an experience up to now, so present perfect 'have never studied' is more appropriate. Also, 'like to see' should be 'like to watch' because we watch videos, not see them.

× Right now I like to watch YouTube videos and recently I learn about Egypt history, especially when the era when the pyramids were built.

✓ Right now I like to watch YouTube videos and recently I have learned about Egyptian history, especially the era when the pyramids were built.

The phrase 'recently I learn' is incorrect because 'recently' indicates a past action with present relevance, so present perfect 'have learned' is correct. Also, 'Egypt history' should be 'Egyptian history' to use the correct adjective form.

× You can know about a nation history or how they were begin at the beginning and it teach you about life and how you avoid bad things in your life.

✓ You can learn about a nation's history or how it began at the beginning, and it teaches you about life and how to avoid bad things in your life.

'Were begin' is incorrect; the past tense of 'begin' is 'began'. Also, 'a nation history' should be 'a nation's history' to show possession. 'It teach' should be 'it teaches' to agree with the singular subject. 'You avoid' should be 'to avoid' to express purpose.

× It is essential because for me in history you learn about people in the past and how they acted and it can teach you how to improving your life and to avoid the mistake people made in the past.

✓ It is essential because, for me, in history you learn about people in the past and how they acted, and it can teach you how to improve your life and to avoid the mistakes people made in the past.

'How to improving' is incorrect; after 'how to' the base form of the verb should be used, so 'improve' is correct. Also, 'the mistake' should be plural 'the mistakes' to match the context.