History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly and using correct grammar. For example, instead of saying 'because it is a main subject in our country to study history,' you can say 'because it is a core subject in our country.'

예시: Yes, I studied history during my junior classes because it is a core subject in our country.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to respond directly and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating the word 'history' unnecessarily. For example, you can say how you learn history and why it is important in a clear and connected way.

예시: I learn history through reading books and watching documentaries, which helps me understand the cultural and political background of my country better.

제안: Your answer has good points but lacks coherence and contains grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to connect ideas, and be specific with your vocabulary. Instead of 'older peoples,' say 'ancestors' or 'previous generations.'

예시: Learning history has many benefits. For example, it teaches us how our ancestors lived and how the world has changed over time. Also, it helps us understand the background of our country and its development.

제안: Your answer conveys the main idea but has grammatical mistakes and lacks fluency. Use correct tenses and plural forms, and connect your ideas logically. For example, mention the importance of history in understanding the sacrifices of freedom fighters in India.

예시: Yes, I believe learning history is very important because it helps us understand the sacrifices made by our ancestors. In India, many freedom fighters fought bravely to gain independence for our country.

× Yes, I studied history in my junior classes and because it is a main subject in our country to study history.

✓ Yes, I studied history in my junior classes because it is a main subject in our country.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two clauses with 'and because', which is redundant and causes confusion. Also, 'because it is a main subject' is a reason for studying history, so 'because' alone suffices. The sentence is corrected to remove redundancy and improve clarity.

× I learn history in many ways and it is important to learn history because of the Studying history help me to understand the cultural and political background of the country better.

✓ I learn history in many ways, and it is important to learn history because studying history helps me understand the cultural and political background of the country better.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error and subject-verb agreement issue. 'Studying history help me' should be 'studying history helps me' because 'studying' is singular. Also, 'because of the Studying history' is incorrect; 'because studying history' is correct. The sentence is corrected for proper structure and verb agreement.

× From history you can learn how your older peoples live their life and how the world transforms.

✓ From history, you can learn how your older people lived their lives and how the world has transformed.

'Older peoples' is incorrect; 'people' is already plural and does not take 's'. Also, 'live their life' should be 'lived their lives' to match past tense and plural. 'Transforms' should be 'has transformed' to indicate change over time. The sentence is corrected for plural forms and tense consistency.

× And through the history you can learn background of your country from where they come to this time.

✓ And through history, you can learn the background of your country from where it has come to this time.

'Through the history' should be 'through history' without 'the'. 'Background' needs the definite article 'the'. 'They come' is incorrect because 'country' is singular; it should be 'it has come'. The sentence is corrected for preposition use, article use, and pronoun agreement.

× I belong to India country and there are many freedom fighter that fight for our free.

✓ I belong to India, and there are many freedom fighters who fought for our freedom.

'India country' is incorrect; it should be 'India'. 'Freedom fighter' should be plural 'freedom fighters' to match 'many'. 'That fight' should be 'who fought' because people are referred to with 'who' and past tense is appropriate. 'Our free' is incorrect; it should be 'our freedom'. The sentence is corrected for plural forms, relative pronouns, tense, and word choice.