History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول أن تجعل إجابتك أكثر طبيعية وفعالية من خلال استخدام جمل مترابطة وواضحة، وتجنب التكرار. كما يمكنك توضيح سبب عدم اهتمامك بالتاريخ بشكل أكثر تحديدًا مع استخدام كلمات مناسبة للسياق.

예시: Yes, I studied history at school, focusing mainly on the history of Saudi Arabia. However, I found it quite challenging because it involved memorizing many dates and names of rulers, which made it less interesting for me.

제안: حاول أن تقدم إجابة أكثر تنظيماً باستخدام جمل مترابطة، ووضح طرق التعلم بشكل أكثر تحديدًا مع استخدام كلمات مناسبة للسياق لتجنب التكرار.

예시: I mainly learn history through my school lessons since I am not very interested in the subject. Occasionally, I see history programs on TV, but I rarely watch them, so school remains my primary source of learning.

제안: حاول أن توسع إجابتك باستخدام كلمات ربط لتوضيح الفوائد بشكل أكثر تفصيلاً، مع تقديم أمثلة أو أسباب تدعم رأيك.

예시: Learning history helps people understand their country's background and traditions, which in turn gives them a strong sense of belonging. For example, knowing about past events can make individuals feel proud of their heritage.

제안: حاول تحسين تركيب الجمل واستخدام كلمات ربط مناسبة لجعل الإجابة أكثر سلاسة ووضوحًا، مع تصحيح الأخطاء النحوية واستخدام مفردات مناسبة للسياق.

예시: Yes, I believe learning history is important because it helps people understand their country better, which fosters a sense of belonging and pride in their community. Additionally, it increases cultural awareness among individuals.

× I didn't get interested in it because it's a lot of histories, numbers and many names of the Kingdom who ruled Saudi Arabia.

✓ I didn't get interested in it because there are a lot of historical events, numbers, and many names of the kings who ruled Saudi Arabia.

The word 'histories' is incorrectly used as a plural noun here; 'history' is generally uncountable. Also, 'the Kingdom who ruled' is incorrect because 'Kingdom' is a place, not a person. It should be 'kings who ruled'. The sentence also lacks the correct use of 'there are' to indicate existence of multiple items.

× Sometimes it appears on the TV but I don't watch it, so I only learned it in school.

✓ Sometimes it appears on TV but I don't watch it, so I only learn it in school.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the student is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'learn' should be used instead of past tense 'learned'. Also, 'on the TV' should be 'on TV' (preposition correction).

× The benefits of learning history is helping people to understand their country and traditions and also providing them a sense of belonging.

✓ The benefits of learning history are helping people to understand their country and traditions and also providing them a sense of belonging.

The subject 'benefits' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× Yes, it's important because when people understanding about their country, it gives the sense of belonging and pride in their community in addition.

✓ Yes, it's important because when people understand their country, it gives them a sense of belonging and pride in their community.

The verb 'understanding' is incorrectly used instead of the base form 'understand' after 'when people'. Also, 'gives the sense' should be 'gives them a sense' to clarify the object. The phrase 'in addition' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× They become more cultural awareness.

✓ They become more culturally aware.

'Awareness' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe 'they'. The correct adjective form is 'aware', and 'cultural' should be changed to the adverb 'culturally' to modify 'aware' properly.