History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りが多く、表現が不自然です。より正確な文法を使い、簡潔で明確な答えを心がけましょう。また、具体的な内容を盛り込むと良いです。

예시: Yes, I studied history in high school. I focused on Chinese and Japanese history, which I found very interesting.

제안: 「on the smartphone」や「the YouTube」などの不自然な表現を避け、より自然な言い回しを使いましょう。また、理由や具体例を加えて答えを豊かにしてください。

예시: I learned history at school and also by watching educational videos on YouTube using my smartphone. This method helps me understand topics better.

제안: 意味が伝わりにくいため、はっきりとした理由や具体例を使って説明しましょう。文法の改善も必要です。

예시: Learning history helps us gain different perspectives because we learn about various people and cultures, which makes our thinking more flexible.

제안: 答えが否定的で理由も不明瞭です。もっと明確な意見を述べ、理由を具体的に説明しましょう。文法の誤りも直す必要があります。

예시: I think learning history is important, but students should also focus on subjects like English or Japanese because they are useful for communication.

× Yes, I have in high school student.

✓ Yes, I have in high school.

The phrase 'high school student' is incorrectly used here as a time reference. The correct expression is 'in high school' to indicate the period of study. Also, 'student' is unnecessary and causes a singular/plural confusion.

× When I was high school student, I always study studied history about Chinese and Japanese such as Asia citizens, and it is very exciting for me.

✓ When I was a high school student, I always studied history about Chinese and Japanese people such as Asian citizens, and it was very exciting for me.

The phrase 'high school student' needs an article 'a' before it. 'Study' should be in past tense 'studied' to match the past time frame. 'Asia citizens' is incorrect; it should be 'Asian citizens' or 'Asian people'. Also, 'it is' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I studied in high school and on the smartphone.

✓ I studied in high school and on my smartphone.

The preposition 'on' is correct for devices, but 'the smartphone' is unnatural; it should be 'my smartphone' to indicate possession.

× I always watch the YouTube on history learning and it is very effective to learn more and more.

✓ I always watch YouTube videos about history learning and it is very effective to learn more and more.

'The YouTube' is incorrect; 'YouTube' is a proper noun and does not need 'the'. Also, 'on history learning' is unnatural; 'about history learning' or 'videos about history' is better.

× Umm learning history is very effective to umm get another perspective and there is many kinds of person so we can get something more flexible.

✓ Umm, learning history is very effective to umm get another perspective and there are many kinds of people so we can become more flexible.

'There is many kinds of person' is incorrect; 'there are' should be used for plural subjects, and 'person' should be plural 'people'. Also, 'get something more flexible' is unclear; 'become more flexible' is better.

× I don't think so. Learning history takes much time, so the student particular in student have to learn about more English or Japanese.

✓ I don't think so. Learning history takes much time, so particular students have to learn more English or Japanese.

'The student particular in student' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'particular students' to indicate some students in plural form. Also, 'learn about more English or Japanese' should be 'learn more English or Japanese'.