History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng cần tránh sử dụng các cấu trúc câu phức tạp không chính xác và nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên tránh dùng từ 'while' ở đầu câu nếu không có mệnh đề đối lập rõ ràng. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú hơn và câu trả lời ngắn gọn, tự nhiên.

예시: Yes, I have studied history since the first grade. I find it interesting because it helps me understand my country's identity and important historical events.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như 'my teacher teach' nên là 'my teacher teaches'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không rõ nghĩa như 'historical size' hay 'umm N'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ phù hợp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I learn history at school where my teacher teaches us about important victories and historical figures. Besides that, I watch movies and documentaries related to history to deepen my understanding.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng nên tránh lặp từ như 'origin' và sử dụng từ vựng đa dạng hơn. Bạn cũng nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cụ thể hóa các lợi ích hơn nữa.

예시: Learning history benefits individuals, especially teenagers, by helping them feel proud of their heritage and understand their roots. Additionally, it allows them to honor historical figures and preserve important traditions.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'learning history play' nên là 'learning history plays'. Ngoài ra, 'preserve valuable treaties' có thể không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này, bạn nên dùng từ khác như 'heritage' hoặc 'traditions'. Hãy làm câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn.

예시: Yes, I believe learning history plays an important role in my life because it helps me appreciate my heritage and develop patriotism. It also allows me to honor important historical figures.

× Yes, of course I have learned history since I was studying in the 1st grade.

✓ Yes, of course I have learned history since I was in the 1st grade.

The phrase 'since I was studying' is incorrect because 'since' requires a specific point in time or event, not a continuous action. 'Since I was in the 1st grade' correctly indicates the starting point of learning history.

× While I find this subject quite interesting because I can have deeper understanding of my national identity as well as historical highlights.

✓ I find this subject quite interesting because I can have a deeper understanding of my national identity as well as historical highlights.

Starting the sentence with 'While' followed by 'because' creates a confusing structure. Removing 'While' clarifies the sentence and properly connects the cause and effect.

× While I learn history in my school and my teacher teach me numerous glorious victories of my country as well as historical figures and historical size.

✓ I learn history in my school and my teacher teaches me about numerous glorious victories of my country as well as historical figures and historical sites.

The verb 'teach' should be in third person singular form 'teaches' to agree with the singular subject 'my teacher'. Also, 'historical size' seems to be a typo and should be 'historical sites'. The initial 'While' is unnecessary and confusing here.

× Moreover, I also watch some movies and documentaries relating to my umm N.

✓ Moreover, I also watch some movies and documentaries related to my history.

The phrase 'relating to my umm N' is unclear and incomplete. Replacing it with 'related to my history' makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× Well, I think learning history can bring various benefits among the individuals, especially teenagers, because they can take pride in the origin and acknowledge their origin.

✓ Well, I think learning history can bring various benefits to individuals, especially teenagers, because they can take pride in their origin and acknowledge it.

The preposition 'among' is incorrect here; 'to' is appropriate when indicating benefits given to people. Also, 'the origin' should be 'their origin' to specify possession, and 'acknowledge their origin' is clearer as 'acknowledge it' to avoid repetition.

× Moreover, they can also have a chance to pay tribute to historical figures and preserve valuable tradition.

✓ Moreover, they can also have a chance to pay tribute to historical figures and preserve valuable traditions.

'Tradition' should be plural 'traditions' when referring to multiple cultural practices. This correction improves accuracy and naturalness.

× Yes, of course. I think learning history play a vital role in my daily life because I can preserve valuable treaties and take pride in my origin.

✓ Yes, of course. I think learning history plays a vital role in my daily life because I can preserve valuable treaties and take pride in my origin.

The verb 'play' should be 'plays' to agree with the singular subject 'learning history'.