History— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 중복되고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 더 자연스럽고 명확한 문장 구성을 위해 주어와 동사의 일치를 확인하고, 중복된 단어를 제거하세요.

예시: Yes, I have studied history since I was young because my school teacher taught it, and I like the subject.

제안: 문장이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 시간의 흐름을 표현할 때 시제를 정확히 사용하고, 연결어를 활용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

예시: At first, I learned history from my school teacher, but as I grew up, I started learning through online lectures, which I find more effective.

제안: 어휘 선택과 문장 구조가 다소 부자연스럽습니다. 비교급 사용 시 'more wiser' 대신 'wiser'를 사용하고, 이유를 설명할 때 연결어를 활용하세요.

예시: Knowing history makes people wiser because it teaches valuable lessons that help us live better in modern society.

제안: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 주어와 동사의 일치를 확인하고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 표현하세요.

예시: I believe learning history is very important because it helps us understand our country's past and encourages us to contribute positively to society.

× Yes, I I have ever studied history since I was young because school teacher taught them so I studied them and I like it.

✓ Yes, I have studied history since I was young because my school teacher taught it, so I studied it and I like it.

The phrase 'I have ever studied' is incorrect; 'ever' is not used with present perfect in this context. Also, 'school teacher' needs a possessive determiner 'my' and 'them' should be 'it' referring to history. The sentence mixes tenses and pronouns incorrectly, so correcting to past tense and proper pronouns improves clarity.

× 1st I learned about history in my school teacher, but I grow, I have grow up. I learn that Internet lecture so it is more effective to me.

✓ First, I learned about history from my school teacher, but I have grown up. I learn from Internet lectures, so it is more effective for me.

The phrase 'I grow, I have grow up' is incorrect; the correct past participle is 'grown'. Also, 'in my school teacher' should be 'from my school teacher'. 'I learn that Internet lecture' should be 'I learn from Internet lectures'. Prepositions and verb forms are corrected for proper tense and meaning.

× To know history makes people more wiser than before, I think, and I believe knowing history is the important point to live modern society because it gives lessons to people.

✓ Knowing history makes people wiser than before, I think, and I believe knowing history is important to live in modern society because it gives lessons to people.

The phrase 'more wiser' is incorrect because 'wiser' is already a comparative adjective; 'more' is redundant. Also, 'the important point to live modern society' is awkward; it should be 'important to live in modern society'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× As far as I'm concerned, it's a very important point to deliver the society because we know the country's history and it gives we all we do our best to leave.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, it's very important to contribute to society because we know the country's history and it motivates us all to do our best to live well.

The phrase 'deliver the society' is incorrect; 'contribute to society' is more appropriate. 'It gives we all we do our best to leave' is ungrammatical; it should be 'it motivates us all to do our best to live well'. Pronouns and expressions are corrected for clarity and correctness.