Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lặp từ và tiếng “uh/um”. Trả lời cần rõ ràng với một câu chủ đề, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại quà, phản ứng của người nhận). Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (handmade photo → handmade photo album; move → movie? hoặc moment?) và sửa lỗi danh từ riêng. Giảm dài dòng và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

예시: Yes. I enjoy giving gifts because they create lasting memories and show I care. For example, I once made a handmade photo album for a close friend, and she cried with happiness when she saw it.

제안: Chú ý ngữ pháp và độ logic; tránh lỗi từ (tofu present không đúng ngữ cảnh) và câu cảm xúc không phù hợp (I love her ở phần này không cần thiết). Trình bày một câu chủ đề về thời điểm tặng quà, sau đó nêu 1 ví dụ ngắn gọn, rõ ràng. Sử dụng liên từ (for example, last year) một cách hợp lý.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as birthdays or anniversaries. For example, last year I gave my ex-girlfriend a thoughtful necklace for her birthday to show my appreciation.

제안: Cần rõ ràng về ý chính: nói bạn cân nhắc sở thích, nhu cầu, tính cách hoặc ý nghĩa của quà. Tránh lặp từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Dùng cấu trúc: topic sentence + 1–2 lý do cụ thể với linking words (because, so, for example).

예시: I consider the recipient's tastes and needs because a personal gift is more meaningful. For example, I choose practical items for busy friends and handmade items for sentimental people.

제안: Cải thiện thì động từ và từ vựng (create → created; wrote short message → wrote short messages). Tránh diễn đạt lặp và các cụm từ không chính xác (behave something personal). Nên có 1 câu chủ đề ngắn và 1 câu mô tả chi tiết cụ thể (materials, reaction).

예시: Yes. Last year I created a small handmade photo album for my girlfriend's birthday. I included captions on each page describing our memories, and she was really touched by the personal touches.

제안: Trình bày quan điểm rõ ràng (Yes/No) kèm lý do ngắn gọn và ví dụ. Tránh lặp từ và cấu trúc lộn xộn. Dùng linking words (because, therefore, for example) và từ vựng phù hợp (express emotions, build relationships).

예시: No, I don't think expensive gifts are necessary because what matters is the thought behind the gift. For example, a heartfelt letter or a small handmade item can express my emotions and strengthen our relationship.

× Uh, I'm quite good at giving gifts because I enjoy seeing other people's passion.

✓ Uh, I'm quite good at giving gifts because I enjoy seeing other people's happiness.

'Passion' is not the right semantic choice here; 'happiness' or 'joy' better conveys the emotional reaction to receiving gifts. Use nouns that match the intended meaning.

× It creates lasting memory and, uh, it's a nice way to express my love.

✓ It creates lasting memories and, uh, it's a nice way to express my love.

Use the plural 'memories' because 'lasting memory' is uncountable or unusual in this context. With countable events, plural is appropriate.

× For example, I once gave a a handmade photo and move to a Morgan friends and she cried with happiness.

✓ For example, I once gave a handmade photo and movie to a close friend and she cried with happiness.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'a a' is a typo; 'move' should be 'movie'; 'Morgan friends' is unclear and likely wrong—use 'a close friend' or the person's name; use singular 'friend' with 'a'. This correction follows article and word choice rules.

× I usually give gifts to people on special occasions such as their birthdays or our anniversary.

✓ I usually give gifts to people on special occasions such as their birthdays or our anniversary.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. (Kept to show there is no article error.)

× For example last year I bought a the tofu present for my ex-girlfriend on her birthday to show I appreciate her, appreciated her shower.

✓ For example, last year I bought a tofu-themed present for my ex-girlfriend on her birthday to show I appreciated her.

Remove the extra article 'the' before 'tofu', use 'tofu-themed' to describe the present. Change 'I appreciate her, appreciated her shower' to 'I appreciated her' to fix tense and remove nonsense 'shower' unless you meant 'shower' as in party; if so clarify 'at her birthday party'.

× I love her.

✓ I loved her.

If referring to an ex-girlfriend, past tense 'loved' is usually appropriate. If the speaker means they still love her, keep present 'love'. Choose tense to match intended meaning.

× In my opinion, I cannot I could consider my requirement and so it's the best way to show the impress for for their for for them and is the best way to appreciate from myself to the.

✓ In my opinion, I consider the recipient's needs so I can choose the best way to impress them and show my appreciation.

Original is ungrammatical with repetition and wrong word order. Rewritten to convey coherent meaning: 'consider the recipient's needs', 'impress them', 'show my appreciation'.

× Yes, I made a handmade gift for my ex-girlfriend last year for her birthday.

✓ Yes, I made a handmade gift for my ex-girlfriend last year for her birthday.

Sentence is correct; past tense 'made' is appropriate for a completed action.

× I create a small photo album with our pictures and wrote short message on each page because I wanted to behave something personal and memorable that is the best memorable in our life.

✓ I created a small photo album with our pictures and wrote a short message on each page because I wanted it to be personal and memorable — one of the best memories of our lives.

Mixed tenses: use past 'created' with 'wrote'. Add article 'a short message'. 'Behave something personal' is incorrect; use 'be personal'. 'That is the best memorable in our life' is ungrammatical; change to 'one of the best memories of our lives'.

× I think no, because when you give the present for another peoples the the best the best things it the myself express the express the emotion for for them and created the relationship.

✓ I don't think so, because when you give a present to someone, the best thing is that it allows you to express your feelings and can strengthen the relationship.

Multiple errors: 'I think no' -> 'I don't think so'; 'another peoples' -> 'someone'; 'give the present for' -> 'give a present to'; remove duplicated words; 'the myself express the express the emotion' -> 'it allows you to express your feelings'; 'created the relationship' -> 'can strengthen the relationship'. Corrections fix pronouns, articles, verb forms and word order.