Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図は伝わりますが、文法ミスや語順の誤りが多く、語彙も限定的です。短く明確なトピック文を置き（Yes/Noや短い断言）、その後に1〜2文で具体例を述べ、接続詞（for example, because）を使って論理的に繋げてください。また時制と代名詞（her/them）を正しく使う練習をしましょう。発音や流暢さも改善すると点数が上がります。

예시: Yes, I am quite good at giving gifts. For my closest friends I usually choose books based on their favorite genres because they enjoy reading. For example, last month I gave a mystery novel to my best friend and she loved it.

제안: 内容は伝えようとしていますが、誤った語彙（horse sister? quarter boring?）や混乱した文構造が多く、意味が取りにくいです。まず簡潔に“when”に答え（e.g. on birthdays, special occasions）、続けて具体例を1文で説明し、不要な語を省きましょう。語彙は正確に選び、“experience”を説明する語（e.g. horseback riding, a concert）を使う練習をしてください。

예시: I usually give gifts on birthdays and special occasions. For example, last week we gave my sister an experience gift—a horseback riding lesson—and she was very happy.

제안: 考え方は良いですが、言葉があいまいで論理も不明瞭です。まず主旨（I consider what will make them happy）をはっきり言い、その後に理由や具体例を1〜2文付け加えてください。不要な口語表現（gonna）や曖昧なフレーズは避け、正しい動詞形と冠詞を使いましょう。また“record”の意味が不明なら別表現（I keep notes）を使ってください。

예시: I think about what will make the person happy. I often consider their hobbies and family situation, and I sometimes make a note of their interests so I can choose a suitable gift.

제안: 良い経験を述べていますが、文法と語順、語彙の選び方を改善するとより自然になります。短く明確に答え（Yes, I have.）てから具体例を2文以内で述べ、接続詞（for example, because）を使って理由を述べてください。“baking and sewing”など正確な名詞句を使い、“appreciate feelings”ではなく“I appreciation”や“I appreciation/feelings”の代わりに“my appreciation”を用いましょう。

예시: Yes, I have. I usually make handmade gifts for Mother's Day, such as cakes or sewn items. I prefer this because homemade presents show my appreciation and effort.

제안: 意見は示せていますが、矛盾した表現と不自然なフレーズが多いです。まず明確な立場（Yes or No, or It depends）を言い、その理由を1〜2文で述べてください。費用に関する語彙（expensive, affordable, meaningful）を正確に使い、“I don't want to depend on cost”や“it depends on the person”など自然な表現を練習しましょう。文を簡潔に保ち、冗長な感嘆表現は避けてください。

예시: I think it depends. Expensive gifts can impress someone, but I believe a thoughtful, meaningful present often expresses feelings more genuinely than an expensive item.

× I think so every time for my friend's birthday, I'll gonna to be a chief person to prepare for my friend's birthday.

✓ I think so. Every time it's my friend's birthday, I am the main person who prepares for it.

The sentence mixes future tense 'I'll gonna' (nonstandard) with present habitual idea. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I am the main person who prepares' or 'I usually prepare'. Remove informal 'gonna' and correct word order and article use. Suggestions: use 'I usually prepare for my friend's birthday' or 'I am the main person who prepares for my friend's birthday.'

× For my best friends, I plan I prepared some the books with her favorite.

✓ For my best friend, I planned and prepared some books she likes.

Pronoun and article use are incorrect: 'friends' should be singular if referring to one person; 'I plan I prepared' is jumbled tense; 'some the books with her favorite' is ungrammatical. Use 'planned and prepared' for past action and 'books she likes' to show preference. Suggestions: 'For my best friend, I planned and prepared some books she likes.'

× For the birthday last week I had my horse sister's birthday and we I and my horse sister gave her some experience like quarter boring with her and she looked so happy.

✓ Last week we celebrated my cousin's birthday, and my cousin and I gave her an experience like going horse riding together; she looked very happy.

Many structural errors and incorrect words: 'horse sister' is unclear—likely 'horse riding' or 'cousin'—and pronoun order 'we I and my horse sister' is wrong. 'Gave her some experience like quarter boring' is unintelligible; replace with a clear noun phrase 'an experience like going horse riding together.' Maintain past tense 'celebrated' and 'gave.' Suggestions: clarify relationship and activity, use correct word order 'my cousin and I' and noun phrases like 'an experience'.

× Umm, I'm thinking about what will makes the friends happy if I like that gift.

✓ I'm thinking about what will make my friend happy if I choose that gift.

Mixes 'will' with present singular 'makes'—after 'will' use base verb 'make.' Also pronoun number and article: 'the friends' should be 'my friend' if referring to one person; 'if I like that gift' should be 'if I choose that gift.' Suggestions: use 'what will make my friend happy' or 'what would make my friend happy.'

× It's not true about my friend. It's also like it.

✓ That is not true for my friend. She also likes it.

Vague pronoun references and incorrect phrasing 'It's also like it.' Use 'that' or 'that is' to refer to the previous idea and a clear subject 'she' for the friend. Suggestions: 'That is not true for my friend; she also likes it.'

× So are you gonna start thinking from her family or something? And I record it.

✓ So I start by thinking about her family or something, and I record it.

Question form 'Are you gonna...' is inappropriate; speaker intends statement. Informal 'gonna' should be 'going to' if used. 'Start thinking from her family' should be 'start by thinking about her family.' 'I record it' is present simple but context likely present habitual: 'I note it down' or 'I record it.' Suggestions: 'I start by thinking about her family and I note it down.'

× Yes, I did. Every time that it's not for the birthday, but every Mother's Day I made something baking and cake stuff and sewing stuff for my mom.

✓ Yes, I have. Not just for birthdays; every Mother's Day I make baked goods, cakes, and do sewing for my mom.

Tense inconsistency: 'I did' then 'every Mother's Day I made' should be present habitual 'I make' if this is a repeated action. 'Something baking and cake stuff and sewing stuff' is awkward; use 'baked goods, cakes, and sewing.' Suggestions: use present perfect 'Yes, I have' for experience and present simple for habits: 'I make... every Mother's Day.'

× It's getting if I by using that I can show my appreciate feelings.

✓ I think that by doing that I can show my appreciation.

Unclear phrasing and incorrect word forms: 'getting' is wrong, 'appreciate feelings' should be noun 'appreciation.' Use 'by doing that' or 'by giving handmade gifts' and 'show my appreciation.' Suggestions: 'By doing that, I can show my appreciation.'

× To be honest, yes, I love I don't wanna depends on the cost, but when I go an expensive gift, I was like, oh, it's so gorgeous, thank you and like that.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to depend on the cost, but when I receive an expensive gift I think, 'Oh, it's so gorgeous, thank you.'

Many structural and grammatical errors: 'I love I don't wanna depends' mixes phrases; 'depends' should be 'depend' and follow 'want to'; 'when I go an expensive gift' should be 'when I receive an expensive gift'; past 'I was like' can be present 'I think' for general reaction. Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal corrections. Suggestions: 'I don't want to depend on the cost, but when I receive an expensive gift I feel grateful.'

× So I love it.

✓ So I like it.

Small register issue: 'I love it' is acceptable but context suggests a general preference 'I like it.' If emphasizing strong feeling, 'I love it' is fine. Suggestions: choose based on intended intensity: 'I like it' (moderate) or 'I love it' (strong).