Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete phrases.

예시: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts to people who are special to me. Usually I choose something they like and give it on occasions such as birthdays or anniversaries, because I want them to feel appreciated.

제안: Make the opening sentence direct and remove repetition. Use a linking word to connect your reason for choosing certain occasions and add one specific example to make it more concrete.

예시: I usually give gifts to close friends and family, mainly on special occasions. For example, I often buy a personalized book for a close friend on their birthday because it shows I know their tastes.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and then explain with specific details and a brief example. Avoid unclear pronouns and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'so' or 'for example'.

예시: When choosing a gift, I always consider the recipient’s preferences and needs. For example, if my colleague loves coffee, I might buy a high-quality coffee mug so it’s both useful and thoughtful.

제안: Answer directly and briefly, then explain the reason with one or two specific details. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and unfinished thoughts about expensive items.

예시: No, I haven't given handmade gifts because I am not confident at crafting. Instead, I prefer buying meaningful items from shops, such as a nice watch for an important occasion.

제안: Express a clear opinion in the first sentence, then support it with concise reasons and an example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'besides' and avoid unclear phrasing about attending parties.

예시: I don't think expensive gifts are the best way to show feelings; what matters more is thoughtfulness. For instance, attending a friend’s birthday and writing a heartfelt card can be more meaningful than an expensive present.

× Well, let me thinking, yeah, I like to gift someone very special things which they like.

✓ Well, let me think; I like to give someone special things that they like.

The phrase 'let me thinking' incorrectly uses the -ing form after 'let me'; 'let' is followed by the base verb. Also 'gift' as a verb is uncommon; 'give' is more natural. Use 'that' instead of 'which' for essential clauses. This keeps present simple tense and a correct verb form.

× Usually I give them on their birthday or on their special day like wedding or any anniversary, usually by gifting to someone it.

✓ Usually I give them on their birthday or on special days like weddings or anniversaries.

The original has redundant and incorrect prepositions and word order ('by gifting to someone it'). Remove 'by gifting to someone it' and pluralize 'wedding' to 'weddings' for general reference. Keep 'on' with specific occasions and use a cleaner structure.

× Usually I give gifts to only my special ones I give.

✓ Usually I give gifts only to my close ones.

The phrase 'my special ones I give' is ungrammatical and misorders words. 'Only' should be placed before the object it modifies. Use 'close ones' or 'close friends/family' instead of 'special ones' for natural usage.

× I usually choose something they actually like and give it on occasion such as a birthday, weddings or anniversaries because I enjoy making them feel appreciated.

✓ I usually choose something they actually like and give it on occasions such as birthdays, weddings, or anniversaries because I enjoy making them feel appreciated.

Use plural 'occasions' when listing multiple event types and pluralize 'birthday' to 'birthdays' for general occurrences. Add commas in a list and keep 'on' with plural 'occasions'.

× I usually think about the main thing that is choice of others, what is they like or what they want.

✓ I usually think about the main thing, which is the other person's choice: what they like or what they want.

'What is they like' is ungrammatical; correct pronoun usage is 'what they like.' Use 'other person's' or 'others'' choice and reorder the clause for clarity.

× I usually gift them that thing as recently one of my birthday whose birthday he's.

✓ Recently, I gave that to someone for their birthday.

The original sentence is disordered and contains redundant elements ('one of my birthday whose birthday he's'). Simplify to a clear past event: 'Recently, I gave that to someone for their birthday.' Use past tense 'gave' for a past action.

× Well truly I did not give to anyone handmade gifts because I don't like to make a handmade gifts.

✓ Well, I have never given anyone a handmade gift because I don't like making handmade gifts.

Use present perfect 'have never given' for life experiences. 'Give to anyone' is awkward; use 'given anyone.' 'Make a handmade gifts' mixes singular/plural and verb forms; use 'making handmade gifts.'

× I usually buy them from shops to gift someone.

✓ I usually buy them from shops to give to someone.

Use 'give to someone' rather than 'gift someone' for natural English. The original's structure 'buy them from shops to gift someone' is awkward; change verb and add 'to' for the indirect object.

× That's very special thing like expensive watches and expensive.

✓ Those are very special items, like expensive watches.

'That's very special thing' mixes singular form with incorrect article. Use plural 'those are' and 'items' to match list. Remove redundant 'and expensive.'

× Well, not only expensive gives better express our feeling, it is also important to make someone feel special, especially if someone invites us on their birthday parties, not only for the gift as just they want we we should attend their parties.

✓ Well, expensive gifts do not necessarily better express our feelings; it is more important to make someone feel special. For example, if someone invites us to their birthday party, we should attend, not just give a gift.

The original has multiple structure and agreement errors. 'Expensive gives' is wrong; use 'expensive gifts.' Use plural 'feelings.' Replace awkward phrasing with clearer contrast 'do not necessarily better express' and correct prepositions: 'invites us to their birthday party.' Remove duplicated words and reorder for clarity.