Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and word choice; be concise and directly answer with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct key vocabulary (gifts, not games) and pronouns; avoid redundancy.

예시: Not really. I'm not very good at choosing gifts because I often feel overwhelmed by options and worry the present won't match the recipient's taste. Therefore, I usually ask friends or family for advice before buying, which helps me pick something more suitable.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence naming occasions, use correct articles and plural forms, and provide one specific example with logical linking. Avoid unclear phrases and redundant explanations.

예시: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as New Year, Thanksgiving and Christmas. For example, on New Year's Eve I often give small lanterns to each family member to celebrate and share good wishes.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and link supporting details coherently. Use correct tense and pronouns, and be specific about how you learn preferences (e.g., comments, social media). Keep sentences concise and use linking words (for example, because).

예시: I mainly consider the recipient's preferences and hobbies so the gift will be useful. For example, last month I gave a friend a handbag because she mentioned she liked fashion and needed a new bag, so I knew it would be appreciated.

제안: Good content and specificity. Improve grammar and sentence flow: use correct tense forms, articles, and avoid extra words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details with linking words.

예시: Yes, I made a bar of handmade soap for a friend because she wanted something special and practical. I chose gentle ingredients and a vanilla scent because she likes sweet fragrances, and she appreciated the thoughtful, personal present.

제안: Express opinion clearly with a concise topic sentence and support it with a specific example. Correct vocabulary (presence → presents), grammar, and phrasing. Use linking words like because and for example to connect ideas.

예시: No, I don't think expensive gifts are the best way to show feelings because thoughtful or practical presents are more meaningful. For example, I once gave a friend a handmade photo album filled with memories, and she really appreciated the personal touch.

× No, I'm not very good at giving games.

✓ No, I'm not very good at giving gifts.

The student used 'games' but context and question ask about 'gifts'. This is a vocabulary choice error rather than grammar; replace with the correct noun 'gifts' to match meaning.

× I'm inexperienced and often feel overwhelmed about choosing something meaningful and practical.

✓ I'm inexperienced and often feel overwhelmed when choosing something meaningful and practical.

Use 'when choosing' to introduce the action that causes feeling overwhelmed. 'About choosing' is not idiomatic here. This change makes the sentence structure natural and correct.

× And what's more, I also worry about the present I give.

✓ And what's more, I also worry about the present I give.

No grammatical change needed for structure, but 'present' is acceptable. However if intended meaning is 'gift', use 'gift' instead of 'present' for clarity. This is a vocabulary suggestion rather than grammatical correction.

× It may doesn't create her to someone's taste.

✓ It may not be to someone's taste.

Incorrect auxiliary combination: 'may doesn't' mixes modal 'may' with 'doesn't'. Use 'may not' plus adjective phrase 'be to someone's taste'. This corrects modal+verb usage and verb form.

× So as a result I always ask others for advice.

✓ As a result, I always ask others for advice.

'So as a result' is redundant; use 'As a result' or 'So'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. This improves sentence flow and correctness.

× I usually give kids on special occasions, for example the New Year's, Thanksgiving days and also the Christmas days.

✓ I usually give gifts to children on special occasions, for example New Year, Thanksgiving and Christmas.

Use 'give gifts to children' (give something to someone). 'Kids' is informal; 'children' preferred. Remove plural 'days' from holidays and articles like 'the' before holiday names. Also correct noun choice 'gifts'.

× I found this Ridge to show people you cared and to spread out the happiness.

✓ I find this a good way to show people you care and to spread happiness.

Tense and word choice: use present simple 'find' for habitual truth. 'Ridge' is incorrect word; use 'way'. 'You cared' should be 'you care'. 'Spread out the happiness' is awkward; use 'spread happiness'.

× For example, I used to give a small lanterns on New Year's Eve for till the each family members to as.

✓ For example, I used to give small lanterns to each family member on New Year's Eve.

Remove incorrect words and reorder: use plural 'lanterns' without 'a', preposition 'to' before the recipient, singular 'member' with 'each', and place 'on New Year's Eve' correctly. This fixes article, preposition and word order errors.

× The main factor I consider is the recipient's preference.

✓ The main factor I consider is the recipient's preference.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; present simple is appropriate for general statements. No change needed.

× I based my choice on your taste.

✓ I base my choice on their taste.

Pronoun mismatch: 'your' addresses the examiner but the student means the recipient. Use 'their' (singular they) or 'the recipient's'. Also change tense to present 'base' for habitual action.

× Hobbies very crowded so that the gift is still actually well used.

✓ If the recipient has common hobbies, the gift is more likely to be useful.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrase to convey meaning: link condition 'if the recipient has common hobbies' with result 'the gift is more likely to be useful' using proper structure and word choice.

× For example, last month I give my friends a handbag because she like fashion and she had mentioned that she needed a new bag.

✓ For example, last month I gave my friend a handbag because she likes fashion and had mentioned that she needed a new bag.

Use past tense 'gave' for the action 'last month'. Use singular 'friend' to match 'she'. 'She like' should be 'she likes' (present simple to state preference) or 'she liked' if referring to past. 'Had mentioned' is acceptable to show prior mention.

× Yes, I made a bar of handmade soap for a friend because she said that she wants something special practical for everyday use.

✓ Yes, I made a bar of handmade soap for a friend because she said that she wanted something special and practical for everyday use.

Sequence of tenses: reporting speech 'she said' is past, so 'wants' should be 'wanted'. Also add 'and' between adjectives and correct adjective order 'special and practical'.

× I choose the gentle ingredients and all the of vanilla scent since she liked a sweet fragrance and she appreciated the personal thoughtful gift.

✓ I chose gentle ingredients and used vanilla scent since she liked sweet fragrances and appreciated the thoughtful, personal gift.

Use past tense 'chose' to match context. Fix article and word order: 'used vanilla scent', remove 'all the of'. Use plural 'fragrances' or 'a sweet fragrance'. 'Thoughtful, personal' is the correct adjective order. This corrects tense, articles and adjective order.

× No, I don't think costly gifts are the better ways to express my emotions.

✓ No, I don't think costly gifts are the best way to express my emotions.

Use comparative/superlative correctly: 'the better ways' is wrong. Use 'the best way' or 'better ways'. Also 'costly gifts' and 'way' should agree in number; 'gifts are the best way' is acceptable as general idea.

× Practical, thoughtful presence are the more suitable ways to convince our feelings.

✓ Practical, thoughtful presents are a more suitable way to convey our feelings.

Use 'presents' (gifts) not 'presence'. Subject-verb agreement: 'presents are' or rephrase as singular 'a more suitable way'. 'Convince our feelings' is incorrect; use 'convey our feelings'.

× For example, I want to give a friend a handmade photo albums fill their own memories and she really appreciated the personal gift.

✓ For example, I wanted to give a friend a handmade photo album filled with their memories, and she really appreciated the personal gift.

Adjust tense to past 'wanted' if referring to completed action, singular 'album', and use past participle 'filled' to show content. 'Their own memories' simplified to 'their memories'. Add conjunction comma for clarity.