Stories— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は肯定から始まり、体験を述べていますが、文法ミス（冠詞や時制、不定詞の使い方）、冗長さ、および具体性の欠如があります。改善点：1) 正しい冠詞と単複・時制を使う（例: “the library”, “at that time”）。2) 一文を主題文＋1〜2文の詳述にまとめ、最大5文に収める。3) 具体的な例（好きな本のタイトルや場面）を加えて内容を豊かにする。4) 接続詞（and, so, because）を自然に使い、論理の流れを良くする。

예시: Yes, I loved stories when I was a child. I often went to the library at that time and read many picture books and fairy tales. For example, I remember being fascinated by the adventures in The Chronicles of Narnia, especially the magical worlds. Because those stories were vivid, they encouraged me to read more and imagine new things.

제안: 答えは選好を示していますが、文法的誤りと不明瞭な表現が多く、理由の説明も曖昧です。改善点：1) 動詞の形や語順を修正する（例: “I prefer listening to stories to reading them.”）。2) 理由を一つ明確にし、接続詞でつなぐ（because / so）。3) 時制や語の重複を避ける。4) 具体的な状況（通勤中や家事中に聞くなど）を加えると説得力が増す。

예시: I prefer listening to stories rather than reading them. Because I work early in the morning and have little free time, I often listen to audiobooks during my commute. For example, I usually play short story podcasts on the train, which helps me enjoy stories without sitting down to read.

제안: 否定と理由を述べていますが、文法や語彙の選び方に問題があり、最後の部分は意味が不明瞭です（“express the condolence or sympathy”や“got reliance by others”は適切でない）。改善点：1) 短く明確に否定し、その理由を具体的に述べる。2) 不適切な語（condolenceなど）を置き換える（例えば “empathize”）。3) 文を整理して論理的に続ける。4) 例を加えると信憑性が上がる。

예시: No, I never wrote stories as a child. I was better at reading and listening to stories than writing them. I often talked about the plots with my friends and could explain characters' feelings, which made others ask for my opinion. For instance, I used to tell classmates what I thought about a story's ending during lunch breaks.

제안: 好みを述べていますが、語順や語の選択に問題があり説明が不完全です。改善点：1) 名詞・形容詞の組み合わせを正しく使う（“real documentaries”や “non-fiction”）。2) 文を完結させ、具体例（興味のあるテーマや具体的な番組名）を加える。3) 接続詞で理由を示すと説得力が増す。4) 1〜2の短い詳細で十分。

예시: I prefer non-fiction stories and documentaries to fiction. I enjoy learning about real things, such as the construction of famous buildings or engineering projects, because they show how things are made. For example, I like watching documentaries about skyscrapers’ design and the challenges engineers face during construction.

× Yes I do. I used to love stories and reading many books in that time.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to love stories and read many books at that time.

The student mixed present and past tense: 'Yes I do' conflicts with 'I used to.' Use past tense 'Yes, I did' or keep present consistently. 'Reading many books' should be parallel with 'used to love' so use base verb 'read'. Use 'at that time' instead of 'in that time.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use parallel verb forms.

× I often went library and read these stories in detail and impressed by the story of those.

✓ I often went to the library and read those stories in detail, and I was impressed by them.

Missing preposition 'to' with 'went to the library.' 'These stories' should match past context: use 'those stories.' 'Impressed by the story of those' is ungrammatical—use passive 'I was impressed by them.' Also add conjunction and comma for clarity.

× I prefer to listening to stories for superior to reading it.

✓ I prefer listening to stories to reading them.

'Prefer' is followed by gerund without 'to' (or 'to' + infinitive structure different). Correct pattern: 'prefer A to B' or 'prefer to do A rather than do B.' Use plural 'them' for 'stories' and remove extra 'for superior.' Suggestion: use 'prefer listening to stories to reading them.'

× I have less time to read books or stories because I I'm working hard in the the morning job so I want to refer.

✓ I have less time to read books or stories because I work hard at my morning job, so I prefer listening.

Tense and structure are mixed: 'I'm working hard in the the morning job' should be simple present 'I work hard at my morning job.' 'I want to refer' is unclear; likely intended 'prefer' or 'rely on listening.' Suggest using 'so I prefer listening.' Remove duplicate 'the.'

× No, I didn't. I'm not a good at writing story.

✓ No, I didn't. I'm not good at writing stories.

Combine tense and article errors: 'I'm not a good at' is incorrect—use 'I'm not good at' (no article). 'Writing story' needs plural or 'a story': use 'writing stories.' Keep contraction 'I'm' if speaking about general ability.

× I was good at reading story.

✓ I was good at reading stories.

Use plural 'stories' to refer generally. 'Reading story' is ungrammatical; 'reading stories' or 'reading a story.'

× Or listen to the story and express the condolence or sympathy to others.

✓ Or listened to stories and expressed condolence or sympathy to others.

Tense should match past narrative: use past 'listened' and 'expressed.' 'Express the condolence' is unnatural; use 'expressed condolence or sympathy.' Also pluralize 'stories.'

× I got reliance by others through that.

✓ I gained others' trust because of that.

'Got reliance by others' is incorrect collocation. Use 'gained others' trust' or 'earned people's trust.' 'Because of that' is clearer than 'through that.'

× I'd like to read or listen or real documentary based on the non fiction story rather than fiction story.

✓ I'd like to read or listen to real documentaries based on non-fiction stories rather than fiction.

Use 'listen to' with object. 'Real documentary' should be plural 'real documentaries.' Use hyphen 'non-fiction' and 'stories' plural. 'Rather than fiction story' should be 'rather than fiction.' Also keep parallel structure: 'read or listen to.'

× I like to hear the story of construction of building or.

✓ I like to hear stories about the construction of buildings.

Sentence incomplete and ungrammatical. Use plural and preposition 'about' and article 'the construction of buildings.' Remove trailing 'or.' Ensure complete object after 'hear.'