Stories— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by making sentences clearer and more natural. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'those stories for all real based stories which they could tell at night', say 'all their stories were based on real experiences, which they shared at night.'

예시: Yes, definitely. I enjoyed listening to stories from my grandmother and grandfather. They often shared real-life experiences, which made the stories very interesting, especially when they told them at night.

제안: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using more natural expressions. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' effectively. For example, say 'Listening is less demanding than reading, which requires more concentration and effort.' Also, replace 'more enjoying experience' with 'a more enjoyable experience.'

예시: I prefer listening to stories at night because it helps me relax after a long day. Listening is less demanding than reading, which requires more concentration and effort. Also, hearing stories allows me to imagine the scenes more vividly, making it a more enjoyable experience.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct tenses and articles. For example, say 'Yes, I wrote a story about what my parents did to support my studies. I wrote it during my summer vacation and included some beautiful drawings.'

예시: Yes, I wrote a story about how my parents supported me in my studies. I wrote it during my summer vacation and also drew some beautiful pictures to go with the story.

제안: Your answer needs clearer expression and correct grammar. Avoid confusing phrases like 'the sleep won't able to come than we.' Instead, say 'I find horror stories more exciting to hear at night because they keep me awake.' Also, use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I like listening to both horror and romantic stories. I find horror stories more exciting to hear at night because they keep me awake and make the experience thrilling.

× They both would tell us such a good story from their experience and those stories for all real based stories which they could tell at night.

✓ They both would tell us such good stories from their experience, and those stories were all real-based stories which they could tell at night.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'for all real based stories' which is grammatically incorrect. The phrase should be 'were all real-based stories' to correctly use the past participle 'based' as an adjective and to maintain proper sentence structure.

× Listening is less demanding than the reading, which requires more concentration and efforts.

✓ Listening is less demanding than reading, which requires more concentration and effort.

The definite article 'the' before 'reading' is unnecessary here because 'reading' is used in a general sense. Also, 'efforts' should be singular 'effort' when referring to the general concept of exertion.

× Also, hearing stories allows me to imagine the scenes more widely, making it more enjoying experience.

✓ Also, hearing stories allows me to imagine the scenes more vividly, making it a more enjoyable experience.

The adverb 'widely' is incorrectly used to describe 'imagine'; 'vividly' is more appropriate. 'More enjoying experience' is incorrect; it should be 'a more enjoyable experience' using the adjective form and including the article 'a'.

× Yes, I wrote a story based on my parents and mother what all things they have done to me for my study purpose and this story I was root for my summer vacation purpose where I had also draw an beautiful images.

✓ Yes, I wrote a story based on my parents and mother about all the things they had done for me for my study purposes, and this story I wrote for my summer vacation, where I also drew beautiful images.

The sentence has multiple tense and word choice errors. 'Have done' should be 'had done' to maintain past perfect tense. 'I was root' is incorrect; it should be 'I wrote'. 'Draw' should be in past tense 'drew'. 'An beautiful images' is incorrect; 'beautiful images' is plural and does not need 'an'.

× I like to hear horror stories and also romantic stories.

✓ I like to hear horror stories and romantic stories.

The phrase 'and also' is redundant; 'and' suffices. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical error.

× The horror stories are more exciting to hear at night because after hearing the stories the sleep won't able to come than we.

✓ Horror stories are more exciting to hear at night because after hearing the stories, sleep doesn't come easily to us.

The definite article 'The' before 'horror stories' is unnecessary when speaking generally. The phrase 'the sleep won't able to come than we' is grammatically incorrect and unclear; it is corrected to 'sleep doesn't come easily to us' for clarity and correctness.