Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence saying which sites you visit now, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g. “when I was afraid at my home”). Use linking words like “and” or “then” to connect ideas and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I often visit social media and video sites. For example, I use Facebook and Instagram to message friends and share photos, and I watch tutorials and vlogs on YouTube to relax and learn new things.

제안: Answer clearly with one favourite and explain why with a specific example. Avoid listing multiple favourites and unclear phrasing. Use linking words like “because” or “so” and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: My favourite app is Snapchat because I can quickly take photos and share short updates about my day. For example, I send snaps to friends to show what I’m cooking or where I’m going.

제안: Give a clear, complete response and one concrete example of a change. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like “for example” and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, websites change frequently because developers add new features. For example, Instagram recently added Reels, so I now spend more time watching short videos than scrolling photos.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about popular site types, then give specific examples and a brief reason why they are popular. Avoid vague lists and grammar errors. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

예시: Social media and video platforms are most popular in my country because people like to connect and watch content. For example, Facebook and Instagram are used for chatting and sharing photos, while YouTube is popular for tutorials and entertainment.

제안: Answer directly with your general preference, then explain with a clear reason and one example. Use contrasting linking words like “however” or “but” to show the difference. Keep sentences well structured and concise.

예시: I usually prefer websites because I can quickly find up-to-date information on Google. However, if I need deep understanding or I don’t have internet access, I use books because they are more reliable for detailed study.

제안: Be specific about the website’s purpose and features. State your goal clearly, then give one or two concrete features or benefits. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition.

예시: Yes, I would like to create an educational website for students who struggle. It would offer video lessons, quizzes, and downloadable notes so learners can study at their own pace.

제안: Give one clear example of a useful thing you learned and one practical benefit for life or study. Avoid mixing functions (calls) with learning platforms (YouTube) in a confusing way. Use linking words like “for example” and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Websites have helped my studies by providing tutorial videos and articles. For example, I learned grammar rules and solved exam problems using YouTube lessons, which improved my grades and made studying easier.

× Well, it depends on situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

Missing article 'the' before the noun 'situation' causes sentence structure error; add 'the' to specify which situation is meant. Suggestion: use 'the' with singular concrete nouns when context identifies them.

× When I was afraid at my home, I usually prefer social media apps such as Facebook, Instagram, WhatsApp to make some calls and messages with my friends.

✓ When I am at home and feel anxious, I usually prefer social media apps such as Facebook, Instagram, and WhatsApp to make calls and send messages to my friends.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb choices: 'was afraid at my home' is awkward and mixes past with habitual 'usually prefer'. Use present simple for habitual actions and collocations 'make calls' and 'send messages to'. Also include 'and' in lists and correct preposition 'to my friends.'

× After that I watch videos on YouTube.

✓ After that I watch videos on YouTube.

This sentence is acceptable as a present habitual action; no grammatical change needed. Keep present simple to describe regular activities.

× Well, I have a keen interest in Facebook or Instagram.

✓ Well, I have a keen interest in Facebook and Instagram.

Use 'and' instead of 'or' when indicating interest in both sites; 'or' suggests choosing one. This fixes sentence meaning and structure.

× What one of the most I like Snapchat because if I do anything in my daily routine, I click the photograph immediately and send my friend some photos and show how I do.

✓ One of my favourites is Snapchat because if I do anything in my daily routine, I take a photo immediately and send some photos to my friends to show what I am doing.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order 'What one of the most I like' and wrong verbs 'click the photograph'. Rephrase to 'One of my favourites is Snapchat' and use 'take a photo', 'send ... to my friends', and present continuous 'what I am doing' for ongoing actions.

× As far as I am concerned about website, they are often changed according to the time because they add a new feature in the website and also need to update with new features.

✓ As far as I am concerned, websites often change over time because they add new features and need updates.

Articles and noun forms incorrect: 'about website' should be 'websites' or 'the website' and sentence is wordy. Use plural 'websites' and concise phrasing 'change over time', 'add new features', and 'need updates.'

× So when when I use the website I usually change my.

✓ So when I use a website, I usually change which one I use.

Sentence is incomplete and repeats 'when'. Provide a clear object: 'change which one I use' to convey switching websites. Remove duplicate 'when'.

× Well, in my country there are different kinds of websites are available such as Facebook, Instagram, YouTube, Google Chat, GP and so on.

✓ Well, in my country different kinds of websites are available, such as Facebook, Instagram, YouTube, Google Chat, GP, and so on.

Redundant 'are' causes structure error. Remove the extra 'are' and add commas in the list for clarity.

× For example, people who love to social media and they often spend time on YouTube.

✓ For example, people who love social media often spend time on YouTube.

Pronoun 'they' and infinitive structure 'love to social media' are incorrect. Use 'love social media' and omit the redundant pronoun 'they' to make the sentence concise.

× Well, it depends on my mood.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood.

Sentence is correct as is; it appropriately uses present simple for a general condition.

× Sometime I prefer to get information from websites such as Google because it is very beneficial to find any information of my study as compared to the books are more convenient when I not use the Internet.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to get information from websites such as Google because it is very convenient for finding study information; books are more convenient when I do not have Internet access.

Multiple tense and wording errors: 'Sometime' -> 'Sometimes'; 'beneficial to find any information of my study' -> 'convenient for finding study information'; wrong comparison structure 'as compared to the books are more convenient when I not use the Internet' -> split into two clauses and use 'do not have Internet access.'

× Yes, in a future time I would like to have my own website.

✓ Yes, in the future I would like to have my own website.

Use 'in the future' (idiomatic) rather than 'in a future time'. Keep modal 'would like' for polite future desire.

× For example, I would like to become a good teacher, so I would like to create a new app for students who are weak in study, so they can easily get information and study with the help of.

✓ For example, I would like to become a good teacher, so I would like to create an app for students who struggle with their studies, so they can easily get information and study with help.

Awkward phrases 'weak in study' and incomplete ending 'help of.' Use 'struggle with their studies', change 'a new app' to 'an app' and finish the phrase 'study with help' or 'with the help of the app.'

× Well, I when I used the website it helped me a lot in my life and study.

✓ Well, when I use websites, they help me a lot in my life and studies.

Tense mismatch: original mixes past 'used' with general statement. Use present simple 'use' and plural 'websites' and 'studies' for conventional phrasing.

× If I talk about my life, I can make some calls and message to my friend with the YouTube, Snapchat and WhatsApp and my life is more comfortable and accessible.

✓ If I talk about my life, I can make calls and send messages to my friends using YouTube, Snapchat, and WhatsApp, which makes my life more comfortable and accessible.

Errors include 'message to my friend' (should be 'send messages to my friends'), incorrect preposition 'with the YouTube' (use 'using' and no 'the'), and plural 'friends'. Rephrase for natural word order and clarity.