Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 선택을 고쳐 자연스럽게 말하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어 동사 시제와 형태(예: "watch" 대신 "watching" 또는 "watch"의 위치), 관사 사용, 어순을 정리해야 합니다. 또한 한두 문장으로 핵심을 바로 말한 뒤, 필요하면 한 문장으로 이유를 덧붙이는 연습을 하세요. 연결어(for, because)를 정확히 쓰고 불필요한 단어는 줄이십시오.

예시: I usually visit my school website because I need to check homework assignments and watch lecture videos. It helps me keep track of deadlines and review lessons I missed.

제안: 문장 구조와 단어 선택(예: 'for subject that I have or interest', 'I have many time watching')을 명확히 고쳐야 합니다. 표현을 간결하게 하고 하나의 주제문과 한두 개의 구체적 이유를 제시하세요. 시간 표현과 관사 사용을 연습하고 관련 어휘(subjects, interests, tutorials)를 사용하세요.

예시: My favourite website is YouTube because I can watch educational videos on subjects I study and topics I’m interested in. I often spend spare time there learning new things or watching tutorials.

제안: 내용은 괜찮지만 문법(주어-동사 일치: 'meets'→'meet')과 어순을 다듬으면 더 자연스럽습니다. 연결어(when, but, so)를 적절히 사용한 것은 좋습니다. 구체적인 예시(예: 추천 알고리즘, 맞춤형 피드)를 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: When I was younger, websites offered a wider variety of videos, but now content is more personalized through recommendation algorithms, so I mainly see videos that meet my interests.

제안: 문법 오류('have their time staying at their home alone', 'they their use')와 어순을 고쳐야 합니다. 이유를 더 명확하고 간결하게 말하고, 관련 어휘(popular, increase, streaming, social media)를 사용하세요. 하나의 주제문과 한두 개의 구체적 이유로 구성하세요.

예시: I think YouTube is the most popular site in my country because many people spend more time at home and use it for entertainment and learning, so its usage has increased.

제안: 문장이 장황하고 일부 반복이 있습니다('websites' 여러 번). 'prefer X to Y' 구조를 정확히 사용하고 이유를 간결히 정리하세요. 구체적 비교(예: speed, searchability, credibility)와 예시를 추가하면 좋습니다.

예시: I prefer getting information from websites rather than books because websites are more accessible and faster to search. However, I still use books when I need detailed, reliable information.

제안: 의미는 전달되지만 어휘 선택과 문장 간결성이 필요합니다('entities entries'는 부적절). 블로그 내용(예: diary-style posts, shopping lists, school experiences)을 명확히 하고 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하세요. 현재 시제와 동명사/분사 사용을 점검하세요.

예시: Yes, I already run a personal blog where I post diary-style entries, shopping lists, and stories about my school experiences. I enjoy sharing my life and receiving comments from readers.

제안: 문장이 끊겨 있고 연결이 어색합니다('my.' 오류). 구체적으로 무엇을 배웠는지(예: study techniques, subject knowledge, time management)와 어떻게 도움이 되었는지 설명하세요. 한두 문장으로 핵심을 말하고 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하세요.

예시: When I was in high school, I used Mega Study a lot; its lecture videos helped me understand difficult topics and improved my exam preparation. Watching those lessons taught me study techniques and gave me clear explanations.

× I visit my school website most because I have to check my homework assignments and was the lecture videos.

✓ I visit my school website most because I have to check my homework assignments and watch the lecture videos.

The original sentence contains 'was the lecture videos' which is not a verb phrase and leaves the clause without a proper verb. Replace 'was' with the base verb 'watch' to correctly express the action. Also maintain parallel structure: 'check' and 'watch' are both base verbs following 'have to'. Improve by ensuring verbs are appropriate and parallel.

× My favorite website is YouTube because on YouTube I can watch the videos for subject that I have or interest.

✓ My favorite website is YouTube because on YouTube I can watch videos for subjects that I have or am interested in.

The original has incorrect or missing prepositions and articles: 'the videos for subject' should be 'videos for subjects', and 'have or interest' is ungrammatical. Use 'am interested in' to express interest. Also pluralize 'subject' to match general meaning and remove unnecessary 'the'.

× I have many time watching YouTube videos.

✓ I spend a lot of time watching YouTube videos.

The original uses 'have many time' which is incorrect present tense/collocation. Use the present simple 'spend' with the phrase 'a lot of time' plus the -ing form 'watching' to indicate habitual action. This corrects tense and collocation.

× When I was younger there were relatively a variety of videos on websites, but these days the content is more personalized and tailored to my preferences, so I mainly see videos that meets my interest.

✓ When I was younger there were a relatively wide variety of videos on websites, but these days the content is more personalized and tailored to my preferences, so I mainly see videos that meet my interests.

Errors include word order and adjective choice ('relatively a variety' -> 'a relatively wide variety') and subject-verb agreement: 'videos that meets' should be 'videos that meet' because 'videos' is plural. Also 'my interest' should be plural 'my interests' to match typical usage. Maintain past reference for 'was younger' and present tense for current habits.

× I think YouTube is the most popular in my country because these days many people have their time staying at their home alone so they their use on YouTube is increasing.

✓ I think YouTube is the most popular in my country because these days many people spend time staying at home alone, so their use of YouTube is increasing.

Problems: 'have their time' is unnatural — use 'spend time'; 'at their home' -> 'at home'; duplicated 'they their' is an error; 'use on YouTube' should be 'use of YouTube'. Also ensure plural agreement and natural collocations.

× I think most people prefer getting information from websites to from books because websites are more accessible than books and websites are time saving because if I want some books I have to go to a bookstore.

✓ I think most people prefer getting information from websites rather than from books because websites are more accessible and save time; if I want certain books I have to go to a bookstore.

Use 'prefer A rather than B' instead of 'prefer A to from B'. 'Time saving' should be 'save time' or 'time-saving' adjective. 'Some books' is vague; 'certain books' is more natural. Also streamline repetition of 'websites' for clarity.

× Actually I already have my own website which is my personal blog. There I put so many entities entries such as diary style or shopping list or school experience.

✓ Actually I already have my own website, which is my personal blog. There I post many entries such as diary-style posts, shopping lists, or school experiences.

Errors include 'There I put so many entities entries' — 'put' is not the best verb for posting content; use 'post' or 'write'. 'Entities entries' is incorrect; use 'many entries'. Use hyphenated adjective 'diary-style' and pluralize list items for consistency. Add commas and adjust articles for clarity.

× I enjoy it because sharing my experiences and getting comments.

✓ I enjoy it because I can share my experiences and get comments.

Original lacks a finite verb in the clause: 'sharing my experiences and getting comments' is a verbless clause. Add 'I can share' and 'get' to form complete clauses. Alternatively, use 'enjoy sharing my experiences and getting comments.' Ensure subject and verb present.

× When I was a high school student, my.

✓ When I was a high school student, my most used website was Mega Study, which helped many students study by watching lecture videos.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. Complete the sentence by stating the subject and verb: 'my most used website was Mega Study.' Use past tense 'was' and 'helped' to match the past context and correct relative clause structure.

× The most used website is Mega Study which helps many students study by watching their lecture videos. So I studied from watching them.

✓ The website I used most was Mega Study, which helped many students study by watching its lecture videos, so I learned by watching them.

Tense consistency: in the context of being a high school student, use past tense 'used' and 'helped.' 'Their lecture videos' is unclear; use 'its lecture videos' to refer to the website. 'I studied from watching them' is awkward; 'I learned by watching them' is more natural. Ensure pronoun reference is clear and tense is consistent.