Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: use plural/singular correctly, remove redundancy and add a linking phrase. Also give one specific example of the type of content you check. Keep to max 4–5 sentences.

예시: I often visit social media sites because they’re entertaining and help me keep in touch with family who live abroad. For example, I use Facebook to check news, friends’ holiday photos and event updates. I also follow a few hobby groups for quick DIY ideas.

제안: Use correct tense and smoother phrasing; avoid repetitive wording. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details with linking words. Correct small grammar errors (e.g. 'when I'm trying to learn' → 'when I want to learn').

예시: My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide range of content, from tutorials to documentaries. For example, I watch step‑by‑step videos to solve difficult maths problems, and I follow cooking channels to learn new recipes.

제안: Be specific and accurate with vocabulary (e.g. 'TikTok', 'stuff' → 'products'). Use linking words and avoid overlong sentences. Give one clear consequence of the change.

예시: Yes — many websites have become more interactive and visually rich. For example, TikTok now allows comments, reactions and in‑app shopping, which makes it easier for small businesses to sell products directly to viewers.

제안: Make the sentence structure clearer and correct agreement errors (e.g. 'updates' → 'update', 'this platforms' → 'these platforms'). Use one linking phrase and a brief specific example of a popular site or influencer trend.

예시: I think social networking sites are especially popular among young people, largely because influencers and celebrities regularly post about their lives. For instance, many teens follow lifestyle influencers on Instagram and TikTok for fashion and study tips.

제안: Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use clearer, grammatically correct sentences and a linking word to compare sources. State one concrete reason and a short example of when you choose books over websites.

예시: I prefer getting information from books because they’re usually more reliable than social media. For example, when I study history I use textbooks rather than online posts, since books cite trustworthy sources and are checked for accuracy.

제안: Be concise and correct verb forms (e.g. 'I've experimented with many recipes'). Use linking words and give one clear detail about content and audience. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I’d love to have a website to share my recipes. I’ve experimented with many baking recipes, so I would post step‑by‑step instructions and photos to inspire home bakers.

제안: Improve clarity and correct grammar. Use proper nouns and remove unclear fragments (e.g. 'mild daily life', 'It's quite con'). Provide specific examples with linking words and explain a short result of learning.

예시: I’ve learned a lot from educational and productivity websites that have improved my everyday life. For example, online courses helped me improve my English speaking and expand my vocabulary, and time‑management apps taught me to organise study sessions more effectively.

× I often visit social media website because it's entertaining and I use it to connect with my family who are living abroad.

✓ I often visit social media websites because they're entertaining and I use them to connect with my family who live abroad.

Incorrect use of singular 'website' when referring to the category 'social media' requires plural 'websites'; pronouns must agree with plural noun so use 'they/they're' and 'them'. Also 'who are living abroad' is acceptable but 'who live abroad' is more natural and matches present simple for a state.

× For instance, I use Facebook to browse some news and interesting activities and updates from my friends.

✓ For instance, I use Facebook to browse news, interesting activities and updates from my friends.

'Some news' is uncountable so 'news' without 'some' is preferable. The original sentence uses correct verbs but word order and article use needed adjustment to sound natural: remove 'some' and add commas to separate items.

× My favorite website is YouTube because it offers a wide variety of content from educational sources to travel vlogs and documentaries.

✓ My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide variety of content, from educational sources to travel vlogs and documentaries.

Mainly a spelling variant (favourite) for EN-GB/AU. Added comma for clarity. Tense is correct; change is stylistic to Australian English.

× For instance, I used YouTube when I'm trying to learn tutorials for math complicated problems and also learn cooking.

✓ For instance, I use YouTube when I'm trying to learn tutorials for complicated maths problems and also to learn cooking.

Mixed tenses: 'used' (past) conflicts with 'I'm trying' (present continuous). Use present 'use' to match habitual action. 'Math complicated problems' is incorrect word order; use 'complicated maths problems'. In Australian English 'maths' is standard. Add 'to' before 'learn cooking' for parallel infinitive structure.

× Yes, definitely some websites are becoming more interactive and visually appealing than they used to be.

✓ Yes, definitely some websites are becoming more interactive and visually appealing than they used to be.

Sentence is grammatically correct; tense 'are becoming' and comparison 'than they used to be' are appropriate. No change needed, so left as is.

× For example, in Tiktok, you can now comment, react and also buy online stuffs in their e-commerce features which is quite convenient for businesses.

✓ For example, on TikTok you can now comment, react and also buy things online using its e-commerce features, which is quite convenient for businesses.

Correct preposition for platforms is 'on' not 'in'. 'Stuffs' is uncountable/incorrect; use 'things'. 'Their' should match the platform 'TikTok' so use 'its'. Reordered to use 'buy things online' and 'using its e-commerce features' for clarity; added comma before relative clause.

× Well, I believe social networking sites are becoming popular in my country especially to the younger generations due to the influence of social media influencers and their favorite celebrities who constantly updates on their daily lives on this platforms.

✓ Well, I believe social networking sites are becoming popular in my country, especially with younger generations, due to the influence of social media influencers and their favourite celebrities who constantly update their daily lives on these platforms.

Pronoun and agreement issues: 'to the younger generations' should be 'with younger generations'. 'Favorite' -> 'favourite' for AU English. 'Who constantly updates' is wrong because 'who' refers to plural 'celebrities' so use 'update'. 'On this platforms' should be 'on these platforms'. Also changed 'their daily lives' for clarity.

× Personally, I prefer to get information from books because they are more reliable as compared to, uh, social media and websites.

✓ Personally, I prefer to get information from books because they are more reliable compared with social media and websites.

'As compared to' is awkward; use 'compared with' or 'than'. Removed filler 'uh'. Tense and verbs are correct; this is a preposition/phrase choice improvement.

× It has becoming a an issue nowadays that there are a lot of misinformation and fake news on social networking sites and other platforms.

✓ It has become an issue nowadays that there is a lot of misinformation and fake news on social networking sites and other platforms.

Incorrect verb form 'has becoming' should be 'has become' (present perfect). 'a an' duplicated article; use 'an'. 'There are a lot of misinformation' mixes plural verb with uncountable noun 'misinformation' — use 'there is a lot of misinformation'.

× Yes, I'd love to have my own website. I'll probably share about my recipes because I love cooking and I experimented a lot of recipes before, especially on baking, so it's probably a good idea to share it to others so they can be inspired with my baking skills.

✓ Yes, I'd love to have my own website. I'll probably share my recipes because I love cooking and I have experimented with a lot of recipes before, especially in baking, so it's probably a good idea to share them with others so they can be inspired by my baking skills.

Several tense and phrasing issues: 'I experimented a lot of recipes before' should be present perfect 'I have experimented with a lot of recipes before' and use 'with'. 'Share about my recipes' is unidiomatic; use 'share my recipes'. 'Share it to others' incorrect pronoun and preposition — use 'share them with others'. 'Inspired with' should be 'inspired by'.

× Well, I learned a great deal from Educational and Productivity's websites that has directly improved mild daily life.

✓ Well, I learned a great deal from educational and productivity websites that have directly improved my daily life.

Incorrect capitalization and possessive: 'Educational and Productivity's websites' is wrong; use lowercase adjectives 'educational and productivity websites'. Verb agreement: 'websites' (plural) requires 'have' not 'has'. 'Mild daily life' is incorrect; likely 'my daily life'.

× For example, online courses and tutorials have taught me specific skills such as speaking English and learning about the vocabulary and grammar.

✓ For example, online courses and tutorials have taught me specific skills such as speaking English and learning vocabulary and grammar.

'Learning about the vocabulary and grammar' is wordy; use 'learning vocabulary and grammar'. Tense and verbs are fine; adjusted wording for naturalness.

× It's quite con.

✓ It's quite convenient.

'Con' is an incomplete, unclear fragment. It should be the full adjective 'convenient' to complete the sentence and convey the intended meaning.