Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは直接的だが、文法の誤りと不自然な表現（“I have to budget information” など）がある。内容を具体化し、適切な語彙と接続詞でつなぎ、文の数を3～4文に収めると良い。例えば職務内容や具体的に見るページ（料金表、プロジェクト概要など）を示すと説得力が増す。

예시: I often visit official websites of construction and transport companies because of my job. I usually check project descriptions and cost estimates to plan budgets. Also, I look at news and updates to keep informed about regulations and new technologies.

제안: 回答の主旨はわかるが“advertisement on the supermarket”は不自然。語彙を修正し、理由と具体例（どのような割引を探すか）を短く付け加えると良い。接続詞で文を滑らかに繋ぐこと。

예시: My favourite website is the supermarket’s online flyer because it shows current discounts and promotions. I often check it to find special offers on vegetables and weekly bundles that help me save money.

제안: 回答は肯定から始める点は良いが、文法と語彙の誤り（“pointed reward system”“get more point”）が目立つ。変化の理由や自分の行動への具体的な影響を一文ずつで説明すると良い。

예시: Yes. Recently the supermarket introduced a points-based loyalty program to encourage repeat purchases. Because of this, I now shop there more often to collect points and redeem discounts.

제안: 内容が不明瞭で文法的に不安定（余分な句読点と不完全な文）。人気のあるサイトの種類を複数挙げ、具体的にどう役立つかを説明すること。主語と動詞を明確にし、一文で完結するように。

예시: Government websites are popular in my country because many public services have been consolidated online. Citizens often use local government sites for tax information, public announcements, and administrative procedures.

제안: 主張は明確だが文法（主語と動詞の一致）や語順が崩れている。“websites have the latest information”のように正しく表現し、理由と具体例を一つ示すと良い。

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they usually have the most up-to-date content. For example, I can find the latest research articles, news updates, and online reviews much faster than in books.

제안: 意図は明確で良いが、自然な表現（‘announce my knowledge to all over the world’や文法的誤り）が必要。目的やターゲット、具体的な内容（図やルート図など）を短く述べるとより効果的。

예시: Yes. I would like to create a website about railway systems in Japan and Europe. It would explain how lines are built and connected, with diagrams and case studies for professionals and enthusiasts worldwide.

제안: 回答が曖昧で意味が取りにくい（“including cola”“discontinuation of the supermarket”など）。学んだ具体的なスキルや知識を一つか二つ挙げ、それがどのように役立ったかを明確に述べること。接続詞を使い論理的に繋げる。

예시: Websites have taught me practical design skills that helped with my studies. For instance, studying web layouts improved my sense of composition for reports, and reading customer notices from supermarkets taught me how to track product availability.

× I often visit the official website of the construction company and transport company.

✓ I often visit the official websites of construction and transport companies.

The preposition 'of' is acceptable but awkward when repeated; more importantly, the nouns should be plural to match 'official websites' if you visit more than one company site. Use plural nouns and a clearer noun phrase order: 'websites of construction and transport companies.'

× From our professional perspective, I have to budget information of transport and construction fields.

✓ From a professional perspective, I have to budget for information about the transport and construction fields.

The sentence structure is awkward. Use the article 'a' with 'professional perspective.' The verb 'budget' requires the preposition 'for' when indicating allocation, and 'information about' is the correct collocation. Also use 'the' before fields to specify them.

× My favorite website is the advertisement on the supermarket which offers us the discount or campaign to promote the product.

✓ My favorite website is the advertisement on a supermarket that offers discounts or promotional campaigns for products.

Use 'a supermarket' for a non-specific example. 'Which' is better replaced by 'that' in restrictive clauses. 'The discount or campaign' should be pluralized to 'discounts or promotional campaigns' and 'to promote the product' is clearer as 'for products.'

× I'm really looking forward to find the special discount for vegetables.

✓ I'm really looking forward to finding special discounts on vegetables.

After 'looking forward to' use the gerund form 'finding.' Use plural 'discounts' or 'a special discount' consistently, and 'on vegetables' is the correct preposition.

× Yes they are.

✓ Yes, they are.

Add a comma after an interjection or discourse marker. The original lacks punctuation; the subject-verb agreement is fine but punctuation improves readability.

× The supermarket implemented the pointed reward system to promote more the total sales of their products.

✓ The supermarket implemented a point-based reward system to further increase the total sales of its products.

'Pointed reward system' is incorrect; use 'point-based' or 'points-based.' 'To promote more the total sales' is awkward — use 'to further increase the total sales.' Also match 'supermarket' with 'its' rather than 'their.'

× I started to buy more to get more point.

✓ I started to buy more to get more points.

The noun 'point' should be plural 'points' because you receive multiple reward points. Also note that 'started to buy more' is acceptable, but 'started buying more' is an alternative.

× In my country, the. Website of each government has been merged.

✓ In my country, the websites of each government have been merged.

Remove the stray period and use plural 'websites' and plural verb 'have' to agree with the plural subject. 'Each government' with 'websites' is awkward but acceptable; alternatively: 'the websites of the different local governments have been merged.'

× The citizen should watch the website of local governments which instructs.

✓ Citizens should check the websites of local governments, which provide instructions.

Use plural 'citizens' to refer generally. 'Watch' is incorrect for reading websites; 'check' or 'visit' is better. 'Which instructs' is ungrammatical: local government websites 'provide instructions' or 'give guidance.' The relative clause must agree with plural 'websites' or with 'local governments.'

× I prefer to get information from websites rather than books, because websites has often latest information about books, provides sometimes out updated information especially.

✓ I prefer to get information from websites rather than books, because websites often have the latest information and sometimes provide updated content more quickly.

'Websites has' should be 'websites often have' (subject-verb agreement). Word order 'provides sometimes out updated information especially' is incorrect; rephrase to 'sometimes provide updated content more quickly.' Include the definite article 'the latest information.'

× Yes I would. I want to create a new website to introduce railway system of Japan and Europe.

✓ Yes, I would. I want to create a new website to introduce the railway systems of Japan and Europe.

Add comma after 'Yes.' Use plural 'railway systems' because Japan and Europe have different systems, and include the definite article 'the' before 'railway systems.'

× I want to announce my knowledge to all over the world how the railway system are constructed and connected each other.

✓ I want to share my knowledge with the world about how railway systems are constructed and connected to each other.

'Announce my knowledge to all over the world' is unnatural; use 'share my knowledge with the world.' 'The railway system are' is subject-verb agreement error: 'systems are' if plural. 'Connected each other' requires 'connected to each other.'

× Obviously, it helps me a lot.

✓ Obviously, websites have helped me a lot.

In context asking 'What have you learned from websites that help with your life or studies?' the present perfect is appropriate: 'have helped.' Replace vague 'it' with 'websites' for clarity.

× The design of the website stimulated my sense of layout of website including cola.

✓ The design of websites has improved my sense of page layout, including color schemes.

'Stimulated my sense of layout of website' is awkward; use 'improved my sense of page layout.' 'Including cola' appears to be a typo for 'color' or 'colour' and should be 'color schemes.' Use plural 'websites' or 'the website' consistently and present perfect to show ongoing effect.

× Besides the discontinuation of the supermarket also meaningful.

✓ Also, information about store closures has been useful.

The original sentence lacks a verb and proper structure. 'The discontinuation of the supermarket also meaningful' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'information about store/supermarket closures has also been meaningful/useful' and include a verb.