Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较自然且信息相关，但存在冗余与语法小错误（如“post new moments”可以更自然表达），句子略长且有重复意思。建议：1) 开头用一句明确的主题句；2) 使用连接词（for example, also）使细节连贯；3) 避免重复表达相同意思并注意语法时态与单复数。具体练习：把三句压缩为不超过五句、每句信息点明确。

예시: I often visit social media sites such as TikTok and WeChat. I use them mainly to catch up on news and to see my friends' updates. Also, I like watching short, entertaining videos on these platforms because they help me relax after study.

제안: 回答内容相关但表达重复且有语法与连贯问题（如“that means it is super convenient and a lot of comparison online”不通顺，句子碎裂）。建议：1) 用一两句直接说明最喜欢的网站和原因；2) 用连接词（because, so）解释具体优点；3) 避免句子碎断，注意句子完整性与名词复数形式。

예시: My favourite website is Taobao, an online shopping platform in China. I like it because it offers wide product variety and home delivery, so I can compare prices easily and avoid going to physical stores.

제안: 回答逻辑明确但有语法错误（主谓一致、重复词汇“is already is”），论述缺乏具体细节支持。建议：1) 修正语法与主谓一致；2) 提供具体例子说明为何满意或可能改进（比如界面、推荐算法、加载速度）；3) 用连接词（however, for example）丰富论证。

예시: I don't think much will change because the sites I use are already well developed. For example, their interfaces are user-friendly and loading speeds are fast, so they meet my needs well.

제안: 回答严重偏离问题并且混淆“国家”和“网站”，内容重复且语法错误多。建议：1) 直接回答“哪些类型的网站流行”，例如电商、社交、新闻和教育网站；2) 每种类型给出简短原因；3) 注意句子结构与主谓一致。

예시: In my country, popular websites include e-commerce platforms like Taobao, social media such as WeChat and Douyin, and news portals. E-commerce is popular because it offers convenience and competitive prices, while social media is used for communication and entertainment.

제안: 观点明确且比较合理，但表达有些混乱（转折“On the other hand I would say books.”与接下句矛盾），词汇重复。建议：1) 使用清晰的对比句型（On the other hand, books are...）；2) 用连接词（however, because）提升连贯性；3) 给出一到两个具体例子说明为何选择网站或书籍。

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are fast and easy to search, and they provide up-to-date content. However, books are more reliable and in-depth for academic topics, so I use them when I need thorough background information.

제안: 回答含糊且语法、逻辑混乱（多处不通顺短语如“everything I walk through”、“Their products worries from their server video”），缺乏清晰理由。建议：1) 清晰陈述观点并给出一到两个具体原因；2) 避免无意义短语并检查语法时态及词序；3) 如果可能，补充可以接受的例外或条件。

예시: I probably wouldn't create my own website because I can already find everything I need on existing platforms, which is more convenient. Only if I had a specific purpose, like selling handmade goods, would I consider making one.

× I enjoy browsing my phone to check the latest news and to see whether my friends post new moments.

✓ I enjoy browsing on my phone to check the latest news and to see whether my friends post new moments.

此句中动词browse通常与介词on或with连用，表示“在……上浏览/翻看”。原句缺少介词，听起来不自然。建议使用“browse on my phone”或“browse my phone”都可，但更常见的是“browse on my phone”。

× It is super popular in China that we can order stuff online and get the package delivered straight to your house.

✓ It is super popular in China; we can order stuff online and get packages delivered straight to our houses.

原句的从句连接和代词使用不恰当。使用“that”引导的从句在这里不合适，且“package”应与泛指复数主语一致，代词要与主语一致。改为分号或句号分开，更清晰；将“your house”改为“our houses”。

× That means it is super convenient and a lot of comparison online.

✓ That means it is super convenient and there are a lot of opportunities to compare prices online.

原句缺少谓语，使得“a lot of comparison online”不是完整的句子。需要加上“there are”或改为动名词短语并明确比较对象。建议改为“there are a lot of opportunities to compare prices online”。

× I don't have to go out and buy. Buy things physically.

✓ I don't have to go out and buy things physically.

原句被错误地拆成两句，第二句“Buy things physically”缺主语和谓语，造成不完整句。应合并为一个完整句子。

× The websites I often visit is already well developed and I believe that there is no room for further improvement.

✓ The websites I often visit are already well developed and I believe that there is no room for further improvement.

主句“The websites”为复数，应使用复数动词“are”而不是“is”。主谓一致错误，需将动词改为复数形式。

× For example, the layout and the functioning is already is easy to access, so there is no need for further changes.

✓ For example, the layout and the functionality are already easy to access, so there is no need for further changes.

“functioning”用法不当，应使用名词“functionality”。此外“is already is”重复了“is”，且主语为复数（layout and functionality），动词应为“are”。将“easy to access”放在正确位置。

× My country is called Taobao.

✓ My country is China.

学生把电商平台名当作国家写出，语义错误。此处应直接回答国家名称，例如“China”。如果原意是介绍Taobao应另起句说明。

× People can buy things online and get delivered to home directly and does what they offer us a competitive price of products.

✓ People can buy things online and have them delivered directly to their homes, and the platforms offer competitive prices for products.

原句中“get delivered to home”缺主语搭配，且“does what they offer us a competitive price of products”结构混乱。建议改为“have them delivered...”，并把“offer competitive prices”作为清晰的谓语短语。

× That means we can compare and choose the best we want.

✓ That means we can compare and choose the best ones we want.

原句缺少指代名词“ones”来替代“products/choices”，否则“the best we want”不完整。加上“ones”使句子完整流畅。

× On the other hand I would say books. They take much longer time to search and sometimes the information I gather is outdated which brings downside.

✓ On the other hand, books take much longer to search, and sometimes the information I gather from them is outdated, which is a downside.

原句断句和表达不清。“On the other hand I would say books”不完整，应直接表述“books take...”。“brings downside”搭配不当，应使用“is a downside”或“has downsides”。另外需加逗号分隔复合句。

× Really it is unnecessary to have my own website and I cannot think what kind of information I would put into it.

✓ Actually, it is unnecessary for me to have my own website, and I cannot think of what kind of information I would put on it.

“Really”用词不自然，改为“Actually”。“unnecessary to have my own website”需要加“for me”。“think what”需改为“think of what”。介词搭配“put on it”比“put into it”更常用。

× And I would say that I would just using other people's websites because it's more convenient and I can already find everything I walk through.

✓ And I would say that I would just use other people's websites because it's more convenient and I can already find everything I want there.

原句“would just using”动词形式错误，应为“would just use”。“find everything I walk through”意义不明，改为“find everything I want there”。

× Their products worries from their server video.

✓ Their products are shipped from their servers/warehouses and their videos showcase the items.

原句语法和表达严重混乱，单词搭配不当。“worries”错误，含义不明。根据可能意思，改为“are shipped from their warehouses”和“videos showcase the items”等更合理表达。