Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use correct vocabulary and verb forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain cause and change. Replace ‘car sick’ with ‘car sickness’ or ‘motion sickness’. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘but’ appropriately and avoid repetition.

예시: I didn’t enjoy car journeys as a child because I suffered from motion sickness, so I often avoided trips with my parents. However, I don’t have that problem anymore, so I enjoy traveling by car now.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons. Use correct terms (e.g., ‘4x4’ or ‘four-wheel drive’) and avoid vague or incorrect comparisons. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘also’ but avoid filler words (‘umm’). Give one or two concise, relevant reasons.

예시: I prefer four-wheel-drive vehicles because they look sturdy and are larger than typical sedans. Also, I like watching them handle rough roads, which makes them more appealing to me.

제안: Give a clear, natural topic sentence and a calm, specific reason. Avoid informal fillers (‘blah blah’) and overly long hypothetical clauses. Use linking words like ‘because’ and add a short supporting detail about control or comfort.

예시: I prefer to be the driver because I feel more in control and less anxious about others’ driving. For example, when I drive I can maintain a safe speed and pay attention to pedestrians.

제안: Structure the answer: topic sentence + brief details. Use correct tense and avoid contradictions. Replace ‘check my phones’ with ‘check my phone’ and avoid fillers. Mention safe activities and link past and present with words like ‘used to’ and ‘now’.

예시: I used to check my phone during traffic jams, but now I avoid using it while driving for safety. Instead, I usually listen to music or relax and think to pass the time.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion and give specific, concise reasons. Use correct grammar and more formal vocabulary (e.g., ‘colleagues will remember’). Avoid repetition and filler words. Provide one clear preference and reason.

예시: Yes, I think car colours matter because bright colours are more memorable and easier to spot in a parking lot. However, I prefer neutral colours such as white, grey or black because they look timeless and are easier to resell.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Use correct articles and more formal phrasing (‘an expensive car’, ‘because we only live once’). Avoid slang (‘wanna’) and add a brief condition or plan.

예시: I might buy an expensive car in the future if I can afford it, because I find high-end models attractive and it would be a treat. If my financial situation improves, I would consider purchasing one as a reward.

× Actually, I really didn't enjoy traveling with a car because I had a car sick, so I really didn't want to go with my parents whenever they used their car for traveling.

✓ Actually, I really didn't enjoy traveling by car because I had car sickness, so I really didn't want to go with my parents whenever they used their car for traveling.

The phrase 'traveling with a car' is unnatural; use 'traveling by car'. 'A car sick' mixes article and noun incorrectly; the correct noun is 'car sickness' (uncountable) so no article. Use consistent preposition 'by' for means of transport. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× But nowadays I don't have a car sick anymore, so I'm enjoying these days.

✓ But nowadays I don't get car sick anymore, so I'm enjoying these days.

'I don't have a car sick' is incorrect; 'get car sick' or 'be car sick' are correct. Present simple 'don't get' shows general condition. 'I'm enjoying these days' is acceptable but 'I'm enjoying life these days' or 'I'm enjoying my travels these days' would be clearer. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I do like 4 wheel drive because I think it looks really cool because normally it's bigger than a Saturn cars so I like umm 4x4.

✓ I do like four-wheel-drive vehicles because I think they look really cool; normally they're bigger than Saturn cars, so I like 4x4s.

Use plural 'vehicles' and plural verb 'they' to agree. 'Saturn cars' is fine plural but previously 'a Saturn cars' was incorrect. Use '4x4s' as plural. Also write 'four-wheel-drive' as a compound adjective. This fixes singular/plural agreement and article use. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Also it's cool to watch they draw, they drive on the road.

✓ Also it's cool to watch them drive on the road.

Use objective pronoun 'them' after 'watch', not 'they'. Remove incorrect word 'draw' which seems to be a mispronunciation of 'drive'. Ensure verb 'drive' follows object directly. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I prefer to be a driver because I feel like whenever I'm a passenger I'm worrying too much or what if this driver didn't see a person across the road if he hit blah blah.

✓ I prefer to be the driver because I feel like whenever I'm a passenger I worry too much, worrying about what if the driver doesn't see a person crossing the road and hits them.

Use 'the driver' when referring to a specific role. 'I'm worrying' should be simple present 'I worry' for habitual feelings. 'Didn’t see' is past; use present 'doesn't see' for hypothetical/general situations. Use 'crossing the road' not 'across the road'. Replace vague 'blah blah' with 'hits them' or similar. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× I used to check my phones to be honest but these days I don't use my phone while I'm driving the car even if umm with the traffic jam so I just listen to music or just thinking about anything.

✓ I used to check my phone, to be honest, but these days I don't use my phone while I'm driving, even in a traffic jam, so I just listen to music or just think about anything.

Use singular 'phone' unless referring to multiple devices. Insert commas for clarity. 'While I'm driving the car' -> 'while I'm driving'. 'Even with the traffic jam' -> 'even in a traffic jam'. 'Just thinking' should be 'just think' for parallel structure with 'listen'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× For example, if you have a like bright colors, kind of your colleagues gonna remember your car.

✓ For example, if you have bright colors, your colleagues are likely to remember your car.

Remove filler words 'a like' and 'kind of'. Use 'your colleagues are likely to' instead of informal 'gonna'. This corrects quantifier/word choice and registers. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× So that's why I prefer just buying a car with like simple colors, white, grey or black.

✓ So that's why I prefer buying a car with simple colors, like white, grey, or black.

Remove extra 'just' and correct word order to 'prefer buying'. Add comma before 'or' in a list for clarity. 'Like' should precede examples, not 'with like simple colors'. This addresses article/word order issues. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I would like to buy a expensive car, yeah, because it looks really cool and then we live once in life.

✓ I would like to buy an expensive car, yes, because it looks really cool and we only live once.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound: 'an expensive car'. Replace 'yeah' with 'yes' for formality. 'We live once in life' is unnatural; correct idiom is 'we only live once.' Grammar problem type ID: 22

× So if I have more money than now, probably I wanna try expensive car.

✓ So if I have more money than now, I'll probably try to buy an expensive car.

Use future 'I'll probably' for a future intention. 'Wanna' -> 'want to' or 'will probably' in formal speech. Add 'to buy' and article 'an' before 'expensive car'. This fixes tense and article errors. Grammar problem type ID: 6}]}} PMID: 1.0