Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use past tense consistently when talking about past experiences and avoid redundancy. Also, make your answer more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoyed traveling by car when I was a kid. Although my family couldn't afford it often, we would go on car trips whenever our wealthy family friends visited. Those rides were the most comfortable and fun moments for me.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use clearer explanations and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: I like performance cars such as the Dodge Challenger and Porsche Carrera 911, which is actually my dream car. I enjoy them because they push the limits of what a car can do, and I find it exciting to explore the capabilities of these machines.

제안: Try to avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Also, clarify your points and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I always prefer being the driver because I like to feel in control and be aware of my surroundings. Moreover, I'm a patient driver and can handle long trips without any problem. Also, I'm inspired by Paul Walker from Fast and Furious, who is my favorite actor.

제안: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to organize your answer and provide more specific details.

예시: When there is a traffic jam, I usually try to observe the cause while listening to music to stay relaxed. If someone is with me, I might chat with them to pass the time. Staying attentive is important, as it helps me stay calm and focused.

× Yes I do. It's the most exciting part in my life.

✓ Yes I did. It was the most exciting part of my life.

The question refers to past experiences ('when you were a kid'), so the answer should be in the past tense. 'I do' is present tense and incorrect here. Also, 'part in my life' should be 'part of my life' to use the correct preposition.

× It's the most exciting part in my life.

✓ It was the most exciting part of my life.

The correct preposition to use with 'part' in this context is 'of', not 'in'. 'Part of my life' is the standard expression.

× But as our family can't afford it, we usually make car journeys when our wealthy family friends made a visit.

✓ But as our family couldn't afford it, we usually made car journeys when our wealthy family friends made a visit.

The sentence refers to past events, so 'can't' should be 'couldn't' and 'make' should be 'made' to maintain past tense consistency.

× And yeah, those were the rides I enjoyed most because they were comfortable and also fun.

✓ And yeah, those were the rides I enjoyed most because they were comfortable and also fun.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× I usually like performance cars like Dodge Challenger or Porsche Carrera 911, which is my dream car.

✓ I usually like performance cars like the Dodge Challenger or Porsche Carrera 911, which are my dream cars.

Since two cars are mentioned, the relative pronoun and verb should be plural ('which are'). Also, 'Dodge Challenger' should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× I usually like performance cars like Dodge Challenger or Porsche Carrera 911, which is my dream car.

✓ I usually like performance cars like the Dodge Challenger or Porsche Carrera 911, which are my dream cars.

Car model names typically require the definite article 'the' before them.

× And I like performance cars because they they help us explode the limits of a motor called car.

✓ And I like performance cars because they help us push the limits of a machine called a car.

The phrase 'explode the limits' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'push the limits'. Also, 'motor called car' is awkward; 'machine called a car' is clearer. The repeated word 'they' is a typo.

× And I like performance cars because they they help us explode the limits of a motor called car.

✓ And I like performance cars because they help us push the limits of a machine called a car.

The phrase 'a motor called car' is missing the article 'a' before 'car' and 'motor' is better replaced with 'machine' for clarity.

× So I would really like to explore the limits of machine.

✓ So I would really like to explore the limits of the machine.

The noun 'machine' needs the definite article 'the' to specify it.

× I always prefer being a driver because I I need to feel the control of ride and what's happening around me.

✓ I always prefer being a driver because I need to feel in control of the ride and what's happening around me.

The phrase 'feel the control of ride' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'feel in control of the ride'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typo.

× I always prefer being a driver because I I need to feel the control of ride and what's happening around me.

✓ I always prefer being a driver because I need to feel in control of the ride and what's happening around me.

The noun 'ride' requires the definite article 'the' in this context.

× And I'm a patient driver. I can drive long hours or long trips.

✓ And I'm a patient driver. I can drive for long hours or on long trips.

The phrase 'drive long hours or long trips' is missing prepositions 'for' and 'on' to be grammatically correct.

× And yeah, as I said, I'm a big fan of Paul Walker from Fast and Furious. He's my ***.

✓ And yeah, as I said, I'm a big fan of Paul Walker from Fast and Furious. He's my idol.

The sentence ends with '***' which is unclear; assuming the intended word is 'idol' or similar.

× What do you usually do when there is a traffic jam?

✓ What do you usually do when there is a traffic jam?

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I usually observe what's causing the traffic jam and also put on music and listen to music and if there's anybody with me maybe I'll talk to them.

✓ I usually observe what's causing the traffic jam, put on music, listen to it, and if there's anybody with me, maybe I'll talk to them.

The sentence is a run-on and needs commas and conjunctions to improve clarity and flow.

× So yeah, nothing much. But as I told, have to observe everything. That's that's part of Bing Driver.

✓ So yeah, nothing much. But as I said, I have to observe everything. That's part of being a driver.

'As I told' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'as I said'. 'Have to observe' needs the subject 'I'. 'That's that's' is a repetition typo. 'Bing Driver' should be 'being a driver'.