Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'We should breathe' which do not add meaning. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoyed traveling by car as a child because it was a lively time spent with my family. We often made a lot of noise, which created a fun and energetic atmosphere. Moreover, we visited many picturesque landscapes, which made the trips memorable.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains awkward phrasing and repetition. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and then specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague expressions like 'really a strange' and repeated words. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary relevant to the context.

예시: I like SUVs because they are spacious and strong, which makes them suitable for carrying many items. Additionally, I prefer hybrid and electric cars due to their positive impact on the environment.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons for your preference.

예시: To be honest, I prefer to be a passenger because I am risk-averse and feel stressed when driving for long periods. I worry about making mistakes that could cause accidents, so being a passenger is more relaxing for me.

제안: Your answer is somewhat disorganised and contains informal phrases like 'shoot the breeze' and filler words such as 'umm'. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words. Also, avoid informal language and be specific about your activities.

예시: Since I live in a small city, traffic jams are rare. However, when I do encounter congestion during travel, I usually stay patient by listening to music and chatting with my family. Sometimes, I also use my phone to browse social media.

× I recall that on that time it produced the energetic atmosphere because my family and I hung out with each other.

✓ I recall that at that time it produced an energetic atmosphere because my family and I hung out with each other.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to a specific time; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate a particular point in time. Also, 'the energetic atmosphere' should be 'an energetic atmosphere' because it is a general description, not a specific known atmosphere.

× it produced the energetic atmosphere because my family and I hung out with each other.

✓ it produced an energetic atmosphere because my family and I hung out with each other.

The definite article 'the' is used for specific known things, but here 'energetic atmosphere' is a general description, so the indefinite article 'an' is appropriate.

× We could visit picturesque landscapes during the the travel and also I have a long term.

✓ We could visit picturesque landscapes during the travel and also I have a long term.

The phrase 'during the travel' is awkward; it would be better as 'during the trip' or 'while travelling'. However, since the instruction is to correct only mistakes in the provided grammar problem list, and 'during the travel' is not strictly incorrect preposition usage, no change is made here except removing the repeated 'the'.

× One type of cars that I like to mention are SUVs because they are really a strange, they can show their strengths and also they have lots of space so we can arrange and they carry lots of things with with with each other.

✓ One type of car that I like to mention is SUVs because they are really strange, they can show their strengths and also they have lots of space so we can arrange and they carry lots of things together.

'One type of cars' is incorrect because 'type' is singular and should be followed by singular noun 'car'. Also, 'are SUVs' should be 'is SUVs' to agree with singular 'type'. The phrase 'a strange' is incorrect; 'strange' is an adjective and needs a noun or should be used without 'a'. The phrase 'with with with each other' is redundant and incorrect; 'together' is more appropriate.

× they carry lots of things with with with each other.

✓ they carry lots of things together.

The phrase 'with with with each other' is incorrect and redundant. 'Together' is the correct adverb to express carrying many things collectively.

× The other car that I like to mention since environmental issues is really important, I like to hybrid cars and electric cars.

✓ The other cars that I like to mention, since environmental issues are really important, are hybrid cars and electric cars.

'The other car' should be plural 'cars' to match 'hybrid cars and electric cars'. Also, 'since environmental issues is' should be 'since environmental issues are' because 'issues' is plural. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and correcting verb agreement.

× Uh, I'm a risk averse.

✓ Uh, I'm risk averse.

'Risk averse' is an adjective phrase and does not require the article 'a'. Using 'a' before 'risk averse' is incorrect.

× I prefer to be a passenger compared to be a driver.

✓ I prefer to be a passenger rather than a driver.

The phrase 'compared to be a driver' is incorrect. The correct comparative phrase is 'rather than a driver' to express preference between two options.

× since we live in a small cities, we don't have lots of traffic jams or congestion.

✓ since we live in small cities, we don't have lots of traffic jams or congestion.

'A small cities' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'cities' is plural. The article 'a' should be removed to correctly modify the plural noun 'cities'.

× When we go on traveling, we can experience traffic congestion.

✓ When we go travelling, we can experience traffic congestion.

'Go on traveling' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go travelling' to express the activity of travelling.

× I sometimes use my cell phones and watch umm social.

✓ I sometimes use my cell phone and watch, um, social media.

'Cell phones' should be singular 'cell phone' if referring to one device. Also, 'watch social' is incomplete; the correct phrase is 'watch social media'. The filler 'umm' is better written as 'um'.