Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to answer the question directly first, then add relevant details. For example, mention if you enjoyed car travel locally or not, instead of focusing only on international travel by plane. Also, avoid repeating 'outside my country' twice.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed traveling by car when I was a kid, especially on family trips within my city. It was fun to see different places and listen to music during the ride.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about your preference, then explain with specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I don't have a favorite type of car, but I like cars that have a modern and sleek design. For instance, sports cars often catch my attention because of their stylish look, even though I don't know much about their mechanics.

제안: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect reasons and avoid incomplete sentences.

예시: I prefer to be a passenger because I can relax and even take a nap during the journey. Moreover, I don't have to worry about driving, which can be tiring sometimes.

제안: Answer directly and use linking words to explain your actions clearly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'until the traffic jam results'.

예시: When there is a traffic jam, I usually stay calm and say a silent prayer. Then, I try to be patient because eventually, the traffic clears and I can continue my journey smoothly.

× I never traveled outside my country by a car.

✓ I never traveled outside my country by car.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'car' when talking about traveling by a mode of transport. We say 'by car', not 'by a car'.

× I was traveling outside my country using airplanes only.

✓ I traveled outside my country using airplanes only.

The past continuous 'was traveling' is not appropriate here because the action is a completed event in the past. Simple past 'traveled' is correct.

× There are many cars on the road that I enjoy their styles, but I have no idea about their function or their mechanical or technical engineering side.

✓ There are many cars on the road whose styles I enjoy, but I have no idea about their function or their mechanical or technical engineering side.

Using 'that I enjoy their styles' is incorrect because 'that' and 'their' refer to the same noun. Instead, use 'whose' to show possession: 'cars whose styles I enjoy'.

× I prefer to be a passenger instead of being the car driver because if I'm the passenger I can relax at anytime I want, I can lay down and I can sleep.

✓ I prefer to be a passenger instead of being the car driver because if I'm the passenger I can relax anytime I want, I can lie down and I can sleep.

The phrase 'at anytime' is incorrect; it should be 'anytime' without 'at'. Also, 'lay down' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'lie down' when referring to reclining oneself.

× It's best to be a passenger rather than tired driving in the.

✓ It's best to be a passenger rather than to be tired from driving.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. The phrase 'tired driving in the' is incorrect and incomplete. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× I try my best to say some prayers inside my heart and I have to be patient until the traffic jam results and then I can move smoothly to the road again.

✓ I try my best to say some prayers in my heart and I have to be patient until the traffic jam clears, then I can move smoothly on the road again.

The phrase 'inside my heart' is better expressed as 'in my heart'. Also, 'until the traffic jam results' is incorrect; it should be 'until the traffic jam clears'. Finally, 'move smoothly to the road' should be 'move smoothly on the road'.