Watch— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct grammar, reduce redundancy, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details linked logically. Avoid repeated words (e.g., "just") and incorrect verb forms like "change the time". Use linking words such as "because" or "so" appropriately.

예시: No, I don't usually wear a watch because I always check the time on my mobile phone, which is more convenient. For instance, when I leave the house I simply glance at my phone, so a watch feels unnecessary.

제안: Correct grammar and vocabulary errors and make the timeline clear. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Replace incorrect words ("never seen", "word") with correct forms and use linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: Yes. In high school my aunt gave me a watch because I didn't have a mobile phone then. It helped me be punctual for classes and made it much easier to manage my time.

제안: Good content and relevant vocabulary; improve fluency by fixing minor wording errors and using linking phrases to connect ideas smoothly. For example, replace "superior up craftsmanship" with "superior craftsmanship" and use "also" or "in addition" to link reasons.

예시: Many people wear expensive watches as a symbol of social status to display wealth and success. In addition, some buy luxury brands because of their superior craftsmanship and long-term value, while others simply prefer the design.

제안: Fix grammar and clarity, give a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting reasons linked logically. Remove unclear phrases (e.g., "their fan is in their back"). Use correct verb forms and articles.

예시: I don't think it's important to wear a watch because most people check the time on their phones. However, some people still wear watches for convenience or style, for example when their phone is in a bag or its battery is low.

× Yes, I never seen high school.

✓ Yes, I was never seen in high school.

The student attempted to use a past participle without an auxiliary verb. The correct past perfect or past simple passive/negative requires an auxiliary (e.g., 'was' or 'have'). However, the intended meaning likely was 'I was never seen in high school' (passive) or more naturally 'I never saw one in high school' (active). Suggestion: decide active vs passive. For active memory of events use 'I never saw one in high school.' For passive use 'I was never seen in high school.' Ensure auxiliaries are included.

× My aunt gave me a word as a present because I didn't have a mobile phone then.

✓ My aunt gave me a watch as a present because I didn't have a mobile phone then.

The sentence contains a wrong noun ('word') instead of 'watch'. This is a lexical error rather than grammar, but in context it functions like an article/noun error. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'watch' to match meaning; check words that sound similar.

× Others buy luxury brands because of their superior up craftsmanship and long term value, all simply because they prefer the design.

✓ Others buy luxury brands because of their superior craftsmanship and long-term value, and simply because they prefer the design.

The phrase 'superior up craftsmanship' is incorrect; 'up' is unnecessary. 'Long term' as a compound adjective before a noun should be hyphenated ('long-term'). The connector 'all simply' is awkward; replace with 'and simply' for clarity. Suggestion: remove stray words, hyphenate compound adjectives when used before nouns, and use clearer conjunctions.

× I don't think it's important to wear watch because most people are simply check the time on their phones, so wearing watches necessary for time keeping.

✓ I don't think it's important to wear a watch because most people simply check the time on their phones, so wearing a watch is not necessary for timekeeping.

Several issues: 'wear watch' misses the article 'a' (singular count noun). 'are simply check' mixes auxiliary 'are' with base verb; correct is 'simply check' (present tense). 'wearing watches necessary' misses verb 'is' and should maintain singular/plural consistency; 'a watch' or 'watches' both possible but keep parallelism. 'time keeping' is commonly one word 'timekeeping'. Suggestion: include correct articles, use correct verb forms, ensure presence of 'is' in noun-phrase predicates, and choose consistent singular/plural forms.

× However, some people still wear watches for convenience or style, especially when their fan is in their back or the battery is low.

✓ However, some people still wear watches for convenience or style, especially when their phone is on their back or the battery is low.

The phrase 'their fan is in their back' is incorrect and likely a miswording; 'fan' makes no sense. If the intended meaning is 'phone in their back pocket' or 'phone is on their back', preposition and noun must match. I corrected to 'phone is on their back' but if intended meaning was 'in their back pocket' use that exact phrase. Suggestion: choose the correct noun (phone) and the correct preposition for location ('in their back pocket' or 'on their back').