Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly state the relationship, then add one specific detail about how you know them. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "very long time" and "over a decade" both convey duration). Use one or two linking words for clarity.

예시: Yes. I have a close group of friends whom I've known for over ten years since we worked together at my first company, and we still meet regularly.

제안: Organize activities into categories and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, "we usually" / "for example") and be specific about frequency or typical plans. Remove repetition like "we always eat food."

예시: We usually hang out and do outdoor sports or relax at home. For example, we often play basketball on weekends, go hiking sometimes, and watch Netflix together — next week we're planning a hike on a mountain near Luzon.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence listing the common meeting places, then give one brief reason or example. Avoid repetitive closing phrases like "we hang out together" which add little new information.

예시: We usually meet at basketball courts, parks, coffee shops or malls, and sometimes at my or a friend's house when we want to relax after sports.

제안: Correct grammar and be more concise. Use linking words to explain cause and result (e.g. "because" and "so"). Replace unclear phrase "already lesson" with "has lessened" or "is limited."

예시: I usually go out with them about once a week because we now have different jobs and responsibilities, so our time together has become limited.

제안: Give a concise main statement and add one specific example that shows importance. Avoid vague endings like "So it's a relationship that I must say."

예시: My friends are extremely important to me because they've supported me through difficult times; for instance, they helped me move and offered emotional support when I changed jobs.

제안: Make a clear preference (or explain you have no strong preference) and give a short reason with a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing like "I definitely want either of the two."

예시: I don't have a strong preference: I enjoy both. For example, I like groups for lively activities, but one-on-one meetups are nicer for deep conversations.

제안: Good answer—concise and personal. Improve by adding a short specific example of what you do when friends visit to illustrate why you feel relaxed.

예시: Yes, I often invite friends over because I feel relaxed at home; for example, we usually cook together, watch movies and play board games.

제안: Be more precise with tense and phrasing. Begin with a clear contrast and add one concrete example of a past vs present meeting place. Avoid awkward phrasing like "we already resigned."

예시: Yes. We used to meet mostly at the office because we were colleagues, but now we usually meet at each other's homes for birthdays or special occasions.

제안: Provide a clearer structure: state the main reason, then give two specific contrasting examples using linking words (for example, "for example," "however"). Avoid repetitive phrases like "either way or either of the two."

예시: It depends on the person's preferences: for example, some friends prefer outdoor activities like parks or courts, while others prefer quiet indoor places like coffee shops or someone's home.

× We just hang out together, uh, play basketball, watch Netflix and food trip.

✓ We just hang out together, play basketball, watch Netflix and go on food trips.

The phrase 'food trip' is a noun phrase used in Filipino English; in standard English, use the gerund or verb phrase 'go on food trips' or 'go food tripping'. Also maintain parallel structure with other verbs: 'hang out, play, watch and go'. Ensure plural 'trips' to match habitual action.

× We always eat food.

✓ We always eat a lot of food.

Sentence is grammatically correct but stylistically awkward and redundant ('eat food' is obvious). Improving by adding 'a lot of' clarifies meaning. This addresses present participle/form usage by refining object and making sentence natural.

× Next week we're going to a mountain near Luzon.

✓ Next week we're going to a mountain in Luzon.

Use 'in Luzon' for locations on the island. 'Near Luzon' implies the mountain is outside the island; if the mountain is on Luzon, 'in' is correct. Choose preposition to match intended location.

× and we even stayed at my own place, sometimes at my buddy's own place.

✓ and we even stayed at my place, and sometimes at my buddy's place.

The reflexive 'own' is unnecessary and unnatural here. Use simple possessive constructions 'my place' and 'my buddy's place'. Also add conjunction for clarity and parallelism.

× So the time together, our time together already lesson.

✓ So our time together has already lessened.

'Lesson' is a noun; the intended verb is 'lessen' in present perfect to indicate a change continuing to present. Use 'has already lessened' to be grammatically correct and fit context.

× They are totally important because they have been part of my life for a very long time and whenever I need someone to talk to, they're there for me and whenever they need me, I'll be there for them too.

✓ They are very important because they have been part of my life for a very long time, and whenever I need someone to talk to, they're there for me, and whenever they need me, I'm there for them too.

'Totally important' is informal; 'very important' is more natural. Maintain tense consistency: use 'I'm there' instead of future 'I'll be' to match ongoing reciprocal support. Also improve punctuation for readability.

× I definitely want either of the two because with the group friends that I have right now, I'm so close with them, so even when I just spend time with one of them, it still feels good because we always have something to do.

✓ I would definitely choose either one because with the group of friends I have now I'm very close to them, so even when I spend time with just one, it still feels good because we always have something to do.

'Want either of the two' is awkward; 'choose either one' or 'prefer either' fits better. 'Group friends' should be 'group of friends'. Use 'close to them' (correct preposition). Simplify 'just spend time with one of them' to 'spend time with just one' for natural word order.

× I love inviting friends to come over my place because whenever we are together at home, I feel so relaxed and I feel that I am completely the person that I am when I'm with them.

✓ I love inviting friends to come over to my place because whenever we are together at home, I feel so relaxed and that I can be completely myself when I'm with them.

Use 'come over to my place' (include 'to'). 'Completely the person that I am' is awkward; use 'completely myself' or 'be myself' for natural phrasing.

× We used to be workmates, but we still communicate with each other even though we already resigned from that company.

✓ We used to be workmates, but we still communicate with each other even though we have already resigned from that company.

When referring to a past action with present relevance, use present perfect 'have resigned' rather than simple past 'resigned'. This fits 'we still communicate' which is present.

× We remain close and right now we meet at each other's homes whenever there's a birthday to celebrate or any events out of our work.

✓ We remain close, and right now we meet at each other's homes whenever there's a birthday to celebrate or any events outside of work.

Use 'outside of work' rather than 'out of our work' for natural prepositional phrase. Add comma before 'and' to join independent clauses correctly.

× Well, I think it depends upon the friend that you're going to meet because some of my friends love hanging out and for some they just want to stay indoors.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the friend you're going to meet because some of my friends love hanging out, while others just want to stay indoors.

'Depend upon' is acceptable but 'depend on' is more common. 'For some' is incomplete; use 'while others' to contrast. Remove unnecessary 'that' for natural speech.

× But either way or either of the two, I'm so happy spending time with them.

✓ But either way, I'm very happy spending time with them.

'Either way or either of the two' is redundant and awkward. Use 'either way' to convey the meaning. Replace informal 'so happy' with 'very happy' if formality desired.