Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子表达上有逻辑性但多处语法和用词错误，信息较具体但组织不够紧凑。评分依据：1) 直接回答问题并给出主题句：完成；2) 支持细节：有演员、情节和歌曲三个细节，但表达混乱；3) 连词使用不足，句子冗长或碎片化；4) 词汇较简单且常有搭配错误（例如 'acts and girls that got the chocolate' 不通顺）。改进建议： - 用一到两句直接概述广告并说明印象最深的原因； - 修正语法（时态与主谓一致），使用恰当的搭配（e.g. ‘starred Angela Baby’, ‘a romantic storyline’）； - 用连词使信息更连贯（e.g. ‘because’, ‘and’, ‘which’）； - 保持总句数不超过五句并尽量精简。

예시: I remember a Dove chocolate advertisement from my childhood that starred the Chinese actress Angela Baby. It told a short romantic story about a boy giving chocolates to a girl, and the whole scene was set to a very memorable song. Because of the music and the sweet storyline, the ad stayed in my mind for years.

제안: 内容回答不够准确且有多处表达错误。评分依据：1) 回答了问题但用词不当（‘chains’ 应为 ‘trains’ 或 ‘stations’）；2) 支持细节存在但组织松散，重复啰嗦；3) 连词和句子结构混乱，存在冗余（如 ‘you can see it’s a lot of posters’）；4) 词汇单一且句法错误频繁。改进建议： - 首先直接回答是或否并概括地点； - 使用清晰具体的例子（e.g. ‘bus stops and stations have many posters and digital ads’）； - 用连接词让原因更连贯（e.g. ‘because’, ‘so’）； - 避免重复与冗长表达，保持句子简洁。

예시: Not so much on trains, but I often see advertisements at bus stops and stations. For example, there are usually many posters and digital screens at bus stations, and since people wait there, they tend to notice the ads.

제안: 观点明确但表达混乱且有语法错误。评分依据：1) 直接回应喜欢广告：完成；2) 支持理由存在（情感吸引力和信息价值），但表达不够精确；3) 连词使用欠佳，部分句子冗长或不通顺（如 ‘why this useful than another product’）；4) 词汇选择需改进（‘varied’ 用法不当）。改进建议： - 用一两句直接给出原因并用具体例子支持； - 修正比较结构（useful than → more useful than）和主谓一致； - 用更恰当词汇描述广告特点（e.g. ‘emotional’, ‘memorable’, ‘informative’）； - 避免重复。

예시: Yes, I like advertisements, especially when they are emotional and memorable. Such ads can make me trust a brand, and they also provide useful information about a product’s benefits, which makes it easier to decide to buy.

제안: 回答重复且表达混乱，语法与词汇问题明显。评分依据：1) 回答了偏好但重复之前内容，没有新增细节；2) 句子多处不连贯（‘showing by’, ‘I view the checks’ 等无意义短语）；3) 词汇搭配不当（‘varied’、‘view the checks’），需提高准确性。改进建议： - 简洁说明喜欢哪类广告并解释原因（故事性与音乐）； - 使用正确的短语（e.g. ‘a romantic storyline’, ‘a beautiful soundtrack’）； - 提供一两条具体原因或效果（e.g. ‘it makes me remember the product’）； - 避免重复。

예시: I prefer advertisements that tell a short romantic story and have a beautiful soundtrack. A strong storyline and elegant music make the ad memorable and create a positive feeling about the product.

제안: 回答含糊且有大量语言错误，表达不清。评分依据：1) 回答为肯定，但后续支持细节混乱且不具体；2) 有语法错误（主谓一致、复数单复数、代词使用）；3) 举例不明确（‘medicines and the like’, ‘showings, the powder’）使信息含混；4) 需要更准确且有条理的例子。改进建议： - 直接肯定并说明常见广告类型和位置（e.g. banner ads, pop-ups, sponsored videos）； - 用具体例子说明影响或用途（e.g. ads for apps, online shopping, health products）； - 注意语法与句子简洁性，避免口语填充词。

예시: Yes, I see many ads on my phone and computer, such as banner ads, pop-ups and sponsored videos. For example, I often encounter ads for mobile apps, online stores and health products when I browse websites.

× I remember an advertisement of the Dove chocolates.

✓ I remember an advertisement for Dove chocolates.

这里介词用错。英文中常用 "advertisement for" 表示为某产品做的广告，而不是 "advertisement of"。建议记忆固定搭配："advertisement for + 产品/品牌"。

× At that time they invited a Chinese famous actress called Angela Baby.

✓ At that time they invited a famous Chinese actress called Angelababy.

错误在于形容词顺序和人名书写。形容词顺序应为 "famous Chinese" 而非 "Chinese famous"；此外艺名常连写为 "Angelababy"。建议熟记形容词顺序（意见/大小/年龄/形状/颜色/出处/材料/用途），并注意专有名词正确拼写。

× She acts and girls that got the chocolate from the boy.

✓ She plays a girl who gets the chocolate from the boy.

原句句子结构混乱，动词时态与关系从句使用不当。应使用 "plays a girl" 来表达扮演角色，关系代词从句用 "who gets" 表示女孩从男孩那里得到巧克力。建议把句子拆成主谓结构清晰的短句，并注意从句中时态一致。

× It's what impressed me a lot is the songs of the advertisement.

✓ What impressed me most was the song in the advertisement.

原句中指代不清且语序不正确。正确表达应使用主语从句 "What impressed me most was..." 并用单数 "song"（广告只有一首主旋律）或复数视具体情况而定。中文建议：把英文句子结构简化为 “What ... was ...”。

× Actually, I don't see a lot on chains, but I see a lot on the bus stations.

✓ Actually, I don't see a lot on trains, but I see a lot at bus stations.

原句中单词 "chains" 应为 "trains"（题目问的是火车等交通工具）；介词 "on" 与地点搭配也不完全准确，常用 "on trains" 而对车站用 "at bus stations"。建议注意语境词汇并学习常用介词搭配（on trains, at bus stations）。

× For example, the poster, you can see it's a lot of posters on the bus station especially it's sometimes the people, they will wait at bus stations, they are very bored, so they will notice the advertisements.

✓ For example, there are many posters at bus stations. People sometimes wait there and get bored, so they notice the advertisements.

原句冗长且介词和主谓不一致。应使用 "there are many posters at bus stations" 表示存在大量海报；避免重复主语 "people" 和冗余结构。建议把复杂句拆成几句，保持主谓一致并用正确介词（at bus stations）。

× If some products they have a varied, touching and very memorable advertisement, I will buy their product because I thinks it is very interesting that you can get a lot of information from the advertisements.

✓ If some products have varied, touching and very memorable advertisements, I will buy them because I think advertisements are a very interesting way to get a lot of information.

原句有代词冗余（"products they"）、主谓不一致（"I thinks" 应为 "I think"）以及单复数和指代混乱。应删除多余代词，保证主语和动词的一致，并用复数或代词清晰指代（"them"）。建议复习主谓一致及代词用法。

× You can know these benefits, you can notice why this useful than another product.

✓ You can learn about the benefits and find out why this product is more useful than another one.

原句中动词和介词搭配错误（"know these benefits" 更自然为 "learn about the benefits"），比较结构缺少 "more" 和系动词 "is"。建议学习常见的动词搭配（learn about）和比较句型（A is more ... than B）。

× As I said before, I really like the Dove Chocolates advertisement because it is like showing by, uh, romantic story and see it as varied, very beautiful songs.

✓ As I said before, I really like the Dove chocolates advertisement because it tells a romantic story and has a varied, very beautiful song.

原句结构混乱，使用了不恰当的被动/短语（"showing by"）和不一致的并列结构。应用主动表达 "tells a romantic story" 并用 "has a ... song"。建议使用简单清晰的动词短语并保持并列成分形式一致。

× That melody is very elegant. So it's I view the checks by the story and the song of the advertisements.

✓ That melody is very elegant, so I judge the advertisement by its story and song.

原句语序和词汇选择错误（"it's I view the checks" 不通顺）。改为 "I judge the advertisement by its story and song" 更自然，注意物主代词 "its" 指代广告。建议多用自然表达如 "judge by" 或 "evaluate by" 并注意代词指代清晰。

× Yes, I think everyone's answer is yes, right? Because every time you open your iPads, you opens your computers to click on the Google website.

✓ Yes, I think everyone's answer is yes. Every time you open your iPads or your computers to go to a website, there are many advertisements.

原句存在第三人称单数动词形式错误（"you opens" 应为 "you open"）且句子冗长。此处统一使用第二人称复数或泛指的 you，动词应与之匹配。建议复习代词与动词的一致性，注意不要在泛指 you 后使用第三人称单数形式。

× There are a lot of advertisements, for example, the medicines and the like.

✓ There are a lot of advertisements, for example for medicines and similar products.

原句中名词搭配不自然，需明确 "advertisements for medicines"。建议练习 "advertisements for + 名词" 的固定结构。

× Some products, I think it's very good way to like showings, the powder.

✓ For some products, I think it's a very good way to show them, such as powder products.

原句结构混乱，语法错误并且词序不当（"like showings" 不用）。改为 "a very good way to show them" 更通顺，并用例如短语说明具体产品。建议把句子拆分并用正确的动词形式（show）和名词短语。