Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接、连贯并避免重复与犹豫语。先给出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持，比如广告的内容、为什么印象深刻以及你的感受。注意语法（如过去式）和词汇搭配（“appeal to me”，“impressed me”）。尽量控制在不超过五句内。

예시: Yes. A biscuit commercial impressed me most when I was a child. It showed a cheerful family sharing biscuits and smiling, which made the product seem warm and comforting. Because I loved sweet snacks, the ad made me want to try the biscuits and remember it for a long time.

제안: 回答应更有条理并使用连词连接信息。先给出明确的主题句（是/否），然后说明在哪些具体位置看到广告并举例类型。避免重复同一词（如“transport”）并注意时态一致。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, trains and stations often display posters and digital screens promoting education programs, electronics and local services. These ads are usually placed near doors and platforms where many commuters can notice them.

제안: 回答需要更具体说明不喜欢的原因并用准确表达方式。用连接词（because, so, therefore）解释广告如何影响你，比如造成冲动消费或压力。注意语法（'appeal to me'改为 'tempt me' 或 'encourage me to buy'；'press me'改为 'pressure me'）。

예시: No, I don't really like advertisements because they often tempt me to buy things I don't need. For instance, flashy promotions and limited-time offers make me feel pressured to shop, which is annoying and wasteful.

제안: 表达要更准确并使用恰当词汇。可以先给出类别（welfare/charity ads），然后解释原因和广告传达的主要信息。避免语法错误（'press values'改为 'promote positive values'；'don't aim to sell'改为 'don't aim to sell products'）。

예시: I prefer public service or charity advertisements because they promote positive values rather than selling products. For example, an ad about helping disadvantaged children can raise awareness and encourage people to volunteer or donate.

제안: 回答要更流畅并减少重复。先肯定看到广告，然后说明在哪些应用或场景（short videos, social media, websites），并给出常见类别。注意语法（'when I scrolling'应为 'when I'm scrolling'；'most of the advertisement is food'改为 'most ads are for food'）。

예시: Yes, I see advertisements on my phone and computer all the time, especially when I'm scrolling short videos or browsing social media. Most of these ads are for food and snack brands, while others promote apps or online courses.

× Yes, there there was an advert advertisement impressed me most It was a biscuit advertisement and I love eating sweet food Umm it uh, appeal me so much uh, so that.

✓ Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me the most. It was a biscuit advertisement, and I love eating sweet food. It appealed to me so much.

句子结构混乱，有重复词（there there / advert advertisement）且缺少关系从句连接词，动词时态和主谓一致需要调整（impressed → impressed me the most; appeal → appealed to me）。建议：去掉重复词，使用关系从句“that impressed me the most”，把动词改为过去式“appealed”，并用适当的标点把长句拆分为短句以增强可读性。

× Yes, absolutely. I saw a lot of advertisement in the transport. Transport and in the train station. Umm, there are lots of advertisement in the world, uh, including education and some goods.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I saw a lot of advertisements on public transport and in train stations. There are lots of advertisements in the world, including those for education and various products.

名词复数与冠词使用不当（advertisement 应为可数名词的复数 advertisements），介词搭配也有误（on public transport / in train stations 更自然）。建议：将单数改为复数，使用适当介词并改写不完整句子，使表达更自然。

× No, I don't like advertisement. Many advertisement will appeal me to buy a lot of things, uh, without expectation. And uh, some advertisement may umm, press me a lot.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements. Many advertisements will make me want to buy a lot of things unexpectedly. And some advertisements may pressure me a lot.

同样存在可数名词复数与冠词问题（advertisement → advertisements）。另外动词搭配不当（appeal me to buy → make me want to buy；without expectation 表达不自然，改为 unexpectedly；press me → pressure me）。建议：把可数名词改为复数，使用正确的动词短语并用自然的副词替换不地道的表达。

× I like some new welfare advertisement. It press some good, uh, value values and it uh, don't aim to sell some goods. I like saying the, uh, welfare advertisement.

✓ I like some welfare advertisements. They promote good values and don't aim to sell products. I like those welfare advertisements.

形容词/名词搭配和主谓一致有问题（new welfare advertisement 表达不明确，welfare advertisements 更自然；It press → They promote；value values 重复；it don't → they don't）。建议：使用复数与复数动词一致，避免重复词，改用合适的动词如 promote，并将句子整理为流畅的表达。

× Yes, I always see advertisement on my phone or when I scrolling the videos and some advertisement uh will uh, in my phone and then umm most of the advertisement is food.

✓ Yes, I always see advertisements on my phone or when I am scrolling videos. Many advertisements appear on my phone, and most of them are for food.

时态和动词形式错误（see advertisement → see advertisements；when I scrolling → when I am scrolling；some advertisement will uh, in my phone 表达不完整，应为 appear on my phone；most of the advertisement is food → most of them are for food）。建议：使用现在进行时表示正在进行的动作，名词用复数，补全不完整的动词短语并保证主谓一致。