Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子结构不够准确，有语法错误与用词不当（如“bring the ball of water to fish her mother's feet”），表达不够连贯。建议：1）先用一句主题句直接回答问题（例如："Yes, I remember one public service advertisement."），2）随后用一到两句具体描述发生了什么并说明原因，使用正确时态与主谓一致，3）使用连接词（e.g. and, because, which）使句子更流畅，4）控制在最多五句内，避免语气词过多。

예시: Yes, I remember a public service advertisement from my childhood. It showed a little boy carrying a bowl of water to his mother, which symbolized his care for her. The ad was very simple but emotional, and it left a strong impression on me because it emphasized family love.

제안: 表达含糊并有词汇错误（如“imposter on the world”、“screams playing”），信息不够具体。建议：1）先直接回答（Yes/No），2）紧接着用一两句具体描述在哪里能看到哪类广告（posters, screens, videos），3）说明你的观点并给出简单原因，4）使用恰当词汇如 poster, screen, short video, distract/kill time。

예시: Yes, there are many advertisements on public transport. On buses and trains you can often see posters and digital screens showing short videos. I find them a bit boring, but they are useful to kill time during a long commute.

제안: 回答不够清晰且语法错误较多（如“most advertisement with my time”）。建议：1）用明确的主题句（e.g. "Not really, I don't like most ads."），2）接着给出具体原因（e.g. they are too long, too pushy, interruptive），3）可举一两个简单例子或结果，4）保持句子简短，语法准确。

예시: Not really, I don't like most advertisements. They often feel too long or too pushy, and they interrupt what I'm doing, so I usually skip them.

제안: 回答较好，有明确偏好并给出原因，但可更精练并使用更地道的表达。建议：1）用一个清晰的主题句（"I prefer ads that tell a story or are humorous."），2）随后用一两句说明为什么，并可给出具体效果或例子，3）使用连接词避免重复。

예시: I prefer advertisements that tell a story or are humorous because they are more engaging. Such ads make the product memorable and create a positive impression, so I'm more likely to remember or buy it.

제안: 内容完整但有重复与用词不准（如“when I say the shop video”）。建议：1）用一句直接回答并总结频率（"Yes, I see them almost every day."），2）接着列举具体出现的场景（social media, shopping apps, videos），3）说明你的态度并给出原因，4）避免重复词与口头语。

예시: Yes, I see ads almost every day on my phone and computer. They appear on social media, in shopping apps, and before online videos. Sometimes they are helpful, but most of the time I just skip them because they are irrelevant.

× It showed that a little boy and bring the ball of water to fish her mother's feet.

✓ It showed a little boy bringing a ball of water to his mother's feet.

原句动词形式和句子结构错误：使用了“and bring”导致并列结构不恰当，应使用动名词短语或现在分词表示画面（“showed”描述过去的画面，因此用“bringing”更自然）。同时代词“her”与“a little boy”不一致，应为“his”。建议用动名词/现在分词（bringing）来描述广告中正在发生的动作，并确保代词与先行词性别一致。

× Actually, it's very famous advertisement.

✓ Actually, it's a very famous advertisement.

名词“advertisement”前需要不定冠词“a”。原句缺少冠词，导致不自然。建议在可数单数名词前加适当冠词（a/an/the）。

× When you are on bus or trains you can see a lot of imposter on the world and screams playing the short video.

✓ When you are on buses or trains you can see a lot of posters and screens playing short videos.

原句多处错误：1) 单复数问题——应为复数“buses or trains”；2) 单词误用——“imposter”应为“poster”，而“screams”应为“screens”；3) 句子结构和名词短语顺序不当，应用复数并将动词和名词配对（screens playing short videos）。建议注意单复数一致并检查近似单词拼写。对应问题类型包括单复数和词汇选择（此处按题目列表归为“Present tense issue”与名词/单复数错误）。

× Not really most advertisement uh with my time and and too hard to sell things so I don't like watching advertisement.

✓ Not really. Most advertisements take up my time and try too hard to sell things, so I don't like watching advertisements.

原句问题：1) 可数名词“advertisement”应使用复数“advertisements”；2) 句子缺少谓语和连接词，使意思不连贯；3) 表达“占用我的时间”和“过于用力推销”的动词搭配需调整（take up my time / try too hard to sell）。建议将可数名词改为复数，补全谓语并分句以提高可理解性。

× Well, I like advertisement that tell a story or make me laugh umm because I think it's really umm, it's really interesting and they can make product memorable and positive.

✓ Well, I like advertisements that tell a story or make me laugh because I think they're really interesting and they can make a product memorable and give it a positive image.

原句问题：1) 可数名词应为复数“advertisements”；2) 从句谓语与主语不一致，应为“that tell”对应复数；3) 代词和名词搭配需明确——“they can make product memorable and positive”应为“they can make a product memorable and give it a positive image”。建议统一复数形式，保持主谓一致，并使用更自然的搭配表达。

× Yes, I see advertisement almost every day when I use the phone or computer, you know they pop up the social media, the shopping apps, or when I say the shop video umm, sometimes they they are useful, but uh, most of the time I just skip.

✓ Yes, I see advertisements almost every day when I use my phone or computer. They pop up on social media, shopping apps, or when I watch short shop videos. Sometimes they are useful, but most of the time I just skip them.

原句问题：1) 可数名词“advertisement”应为复数“advertisements”；2) 缺少所有格“my phone”；3) 介词使用错误——应为“pop up on social media”；4) 代词缺失宾格——“skip them”；5) 句子需分句处理更清晰。建议使用复数、加入所有格、正确介词并补全代词宾格。