Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答はほぼ自然でわかりやすいですが、話をより具体的にし、結論的なトピック文を明確にしてから詳細をつなげるとさらに良くなります。例えば「なぜその広告が印象深かったか」（家族の思い出、頻繁に見た、メロディの特徴など）や、短い評価（好きだった/影響を受けた）を加えると説得力が増します。また、接続詞（because, so, which）を使って論理を明確にしてください。文は最大5文に収めましょう。

예시: A commercial for a popular snack made a strong impression on me when I was a child because it had a very catchy song and colorful characters. I heard it so often on TV that the melody stuck in my head for years. The characters were playful and memorable, which made me want to ask my parents to buy the snack. Even now I can still hum part of the jingle and remember the bright packaging.

제안: 回答は直接的で簡潔ですが、具体例や比較を加えると良くなります。例えばどのような広告（商品、イベント、サービス）が多いか、デジタル画面とポスターの違い、またその影響（便利、煩わしいなど）を一文で補足すると深まります。接続語（for example, because, and）を使って文を繋げてください。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport because trains and buses have both digital screens and posters. For example, I often notice ads for smartphones, streaming services, and local restaurants. The digital screens tend to show short video clips while posters display bold images, so the two formats catch attention in different ways.

제안: 考えは明確ですが最後の文で意味が曖昧（"appear too free"）なので具体化が必要です。肯定面と否定面を挙げるのは良いので、否定の理由を明確に（例：頻繁に出る、個人情報を追跡する、時間を奪う）し、接続詞で論理を整理してください。語彙は簡潔で文意が伝わる表現を選びましょう。文数は3〜4文に留めてください。

예시: I have mixed feelings about advertisements because they can be informative and even entertaining. However, I dislike them when they interrupt videos or appear too frequently, as that wastes my time. Also, targeted ads based on my browsing history sometimes feel intrusive.

제안: 答えは短く率直ですが不自然な表現や文法の誤り（"snacks and tips", 断片文）があります。まずトピック文で好きな広告の種類を明確にし、その理由を具体的に述べてください。例：どんなビジュアルや感情を引き起こすか、記憶に残る要素など。文は完全な文でつなぎ、接続詞（because, so, which）を使いましょう。

예시: I prefer advertisements for snacks because I enjoy seeing colorful, tempting images that make the products look delicious. These ads often use close-up shots and cheerful music, which makes me feel happy and more likely to try the snack. For example, a short video showing someone enjoying the taste usually convinces me to buy it.

제안: 回答は要点を含んでいますが不完全で意味の通らない文（"so since"）があり、具体性に欠けます。どのアプリやサイトでよく見るか（ソーシャルメディア、動画サイト、検索エンジン）、広告の形式（バナー、動画、ポップアップ）や影響（購買に繋がる、煩わしい）を一文で付け加えると良いです。接続詞を正しく使い、文を整えてください。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, especially on social media apps and video websites. They usually appear as short video ads, sponsored posts, or banner ads. Because these ads are targeted, I sometimes discover new products but they can also be distracting when I'm trying to work.

× I remember a commercial for a popular snack brand when I was a child.

✓ I remember a commercial for a popular snack brand from when I was a child.

The original sentence is understandable but awkwardly mixes present tense 'I remember' with a time clause 'when I was a child' without a preposition. Adding 'from' clarifies the time reference and improves naturalness. Suggestion: use 'from when I was a child' or 'that I saw when I was a child.'

× Even now I can still remember part of the melody.

✓ Even now I can remember part of the melody.

The phrase 'can still remember' is not grammatically wrong, but 'can still' is redundant with 'even now.' Removing 'still' makes the sentence stylistically cleaner. Suggestion: choose either 'even now I still remember' or 'even now I can remember.'

× I see a lot of advertising on public transport.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements on public transport.

The countable noun 'advertisement' is more natural in this context when referring to multiple items. Use the plural 'advertisements.'

× There are digital screens and posters inside trains, so it feels like we are constantly exposed to ads almost every day.

✓ There are digital screens and posters inside trains, so it feels as if we are constantly exposed to ads almost every day.

Grammatically 'so it feels like' is acceptable, but 'as if' is more appropriate when describing a situation that seems to be true. The main issue is stylistic rather than strict grammar. Suggestion: use 'as if' to improve formality.

× I have mixed feelings about advertisements.

✓ I have mixed feelings about advertisements.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. Explanation: Present tense 'have' correctly expresses a current state of mind.

× On the one hand, they can be informative and sometimes even entertaining.

✓ On the one hand, they can be informative and even sometimes entertaining.

Both positions of 'sometimes' are acceptable; original is fine. If adjusting, ensure adverb placement is consistent: 'even sometimes' is less common, so original is preferable. No grammatical error.

× On the other hand, I find them annoying when they interrupt videos or appear too free.

✓ On the other hand, I find them annoying when they interrupt videos or appear too frequently.

The word 'free' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'frequently.' Replace 'free' with 'frequent' or 'frequently.' Use 'appear too frequently' to modify the verb 'appear.'

× I like advertisements for snacks because I'm a big fan of snacks and tips.

✓ I like advertisements for snacks because I'm a big fan of snacks and their marketing.

The original phrase 'snacks and tips' is unclear and likely incorrect pronoun/reference. If the student means they like snack ads and marketing ideas/tips, rephrase to 'snacks and their marketing' or separate items clearly. Clarify reference to avoid confusion.

× It has sometimes colorful, tempting images.

✓ They sometimes have colorful, tempting images.

Subject-verb agreement and word order are incorrect. 'It has' does not match plural 'advertisements' and adverb placement 'sometimes' should precede the verb or follow the subject. Use 'They sometimes have' or 'Advertisements sometimes have.'

× Makes me feel happy.

✓ They make me feel happy.

The fragment lacks an explicit subject and correct verb form. Add subject 'They' (referring to advertisements) and plural verb 'make' to form a complete sentence.

× Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on my phone or on computers.

✓ Yes, I usually see a lot of advertisements on my phone or on my computer.

Consistency of singular/plural devices: pair 'my phone' with 'my computer' or use plural 'phones or computers.' Using 'on my phone or on computers' mixes possessive. Suggestion: 'on my phone or on my computer' or 'on phones or computers.'

× Many companies promote their products through social media, TV, so since.

✓ Many companies promote their products through social media and TV, so I see them often.

The original ends with 'so since,' which is ungrammatical and unclear. Provide a complete result clause after 'so' (e.g., 'so I see them often'). Also replace the comma with 'and' between 'social media' and 'TV.'