Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите более связно и прямо: начните с темы, затем добавьте одно-две конкретные детали. Избегайте звуковых пауз («umm», «uh») и грамматических ошибок (например, «it's about»). Используйте простые связки: "When I was a child, I remember an ad about...", затем опишите, что именно запомнилось и почему.

예시: When I was a child, I remember an advertisement for cookies. It showed a happy family sharing cookies at a picnic, which made the product feel warm and friendly. Because of that scene, I always associated the brand with good memories.

제안: Отвечайте полными предложениями и исправляйте ошибки в словах и структуре. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте конкретный пример и причину. Используйте связки: "Yes, I do. For example..." и корректную лексику: «advertising», «everywhere», «on public transport».

예시: Yes, I do. For example, I often see posters and digital screens on trains and buses. These ads are everywhere in the city, especially near stations and on the inside walls of carriages.

제안: Сформулируйте четкую позицию в начале и поясните её причинами. Избегайте повторов («aesthetic, look aesthetic») и неясных фраз («it's right»). Используйте связку «because» для объяснения и приведите пример, где вам нравится реклама.

예시: I like advertisements when they look attractive and creative because they catch my attention. For instance, a well-designed fashion ad on Instagram is pleasant to watch, but repetitive TV ads can be annoying.

제안: Давайте более развёрнутый ответ: назовите тип рекламы и объясните, почему она вам нравится, добавьте пример. Избегайте междометий и используйте связующие слова: «because», «for example», «also».

예시: I enjoy fashion advertising because it often uses strong visuals and stylish models that are inspiring. For example, high-fashion campaigns usually have good photography and music, which makes them enjoyable to watch.

제안: Отвечайте кратко и чётко, избегая повторов и слов-паразитов. Начните с «Yes» и добавьте конкретные каналы и частоту просмотра. Используйте корректную лексику: «advertisements», «YouTube», «social media».

예시: Yes, I see them very often on my phone and computer. For example, I get video ads on YouTube and banner ads on social media like Instagram and Facebook almost every day.

× I remember, but umm, about it's about, uh, cookies like.

✓ I remember an advertisement about cookies.

The original sentence has filler words and an incorrect structure. Remove filler words ('umm', 'uh', 'like') and use a clear noun phrase: 'an advertisement about cookies.' This creates a complete sentence with subject and object and correct word order.

× Yes, now every everywhere have advantaging.

✓ Yes, now advertisements are everywhere.

The student used incorrect words and verb agreement. Replace 'every everywhere' with 'everywhere' and use the plural noun 'advertisements' with the correct verb form 'are'. Also 'advantaging' is not a correct noun; use 'advertisements'. Ensure subject-verb agreement between plural subject and 'are'.

× If it's aesthetic, look aesthetic and good, I like it, but when I watch TV or watch YouTube it's right.

✓ If an advertisement looks attractive and well-designed, I like it, but when I watch TV or YouTube I don't mind other kinds.

The original mixes pronouns and verb forms incorrectly. Use present simple for general preferences: 'looks' not 'look'. Replace vague 'it's right' with a clear response. Ensure consistent subject and verb forms and clearer vocabulary ('attractive', 'well-designed').

× About fashion, I think it's interesting and the, uh, watchable.

✓ I like fashion advertisements because I find them interesting and enjoyable to watch.

The original is a fragment and contains fillers. Reframe as a full sentence explaining why: subject + reason + adjectives. Use 'enjoyable to watch' instead of 'watchable' for natural English.

× Yes uh, now everywhere have uh adversity advertisement uh, when I watch umm YouTube or anything else social in the social media uh, uh.

✓ Yes, there are advertisements everywhere now, when I watch YouTube or use social media.

The original sentence uses incorrect noun forms and word order. Use the existential 'there are' for existence of multiple items (advertisements). Replace 'adversity advertisement' with 'advertisements' and 'anything else social in the social media' with 'use social media'. This corrects pluralization and word choice.